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Symbiosis

We are blighted wards
Sordid, trepidatious scars
Haven's wall too darkly far
Eden's thornbush guards
Caught behind our safety bars
Still, we count the free range stars

4/02/20

For 'Pick a Title - Vol 15 - Sedoka' contest
Sponsor: Edward Ibeh
theme: symbiosis

Copyright © Michelle Faulkner | Year Posted 2020

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Edward Ibeh Date: 4/18/2020 5:16:00 PM Fantastic sedoka, Michelle:-) Heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest! Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 4/13/2020 12:59:00 PM - Congratulations on a great winning poem in Edward Ibeh Sedoka contest, Michelle :) - // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply

Jenish Somadas Date: 4/13/2020 12:35:00 AM Great win Michelle.. Congrats.. Login to Reply

Jc Hawkens Date: 4/12/2020 9:52:00 AM Congratulations on your win. Your poem is most Beautifully penned. I hope all is well. JC Hawkens Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 4/12/2020 11:01:00 AM Hope you are well also, thanks for commenting, J.C!

Krish Radhakrishna Date: 4/12/2020 2:13:00 AM Congratulations on your win! Such a nice poem. Had to read a few times to understand it, but once I did the beauty was visual. Well done! Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 4/12/2020 11:00:00 AM So appreciate your kind comment, thank you!

Winged Warrior Date: 4/11/2020 10:11:00 PM Congrats!! MF...great minds think alike...now I'm going to watch the "Three Stooges" lol...stay safe my friend...best wishes from the Wingster :o) Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 4/11/2020 10:21:00 PM At least we can connect online! Thank you for your kind comment, WW-

John Watt Date: 4/11/2020 9:21:00 PM Beautifully stated, Michelle. Nicely rhymed, powerful words. I like Eden's thornbush best; so much packed into two words. Congrats, my friend ~ John Login to Reply John Watt Date: 4/12/2020 8:09:00 PM Michelle, your reply made me grateful for these kinds of interactions with thoughtful, experienced poets. Thinking about a word and revising it can sometimes mean the different between a good poem and a great poem. That thoughtfulness is evident in your writings and an inspiration to me. Thank you. Michelle Faulkner Date: 4/11/2020 10:17:00 PM Actually, I was originally going to use 'garden' but after tinkering with it, I thought 'Eden' worked better, thank you so much for commenting - have a happy, and safe, Easter-

Mark Koplin Date: 4/5/2020 3:07:00 PM So much beauty up above. Great work! Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 4/5/2020 6:40:00 PM Thank you, Mark

Jennifer Proxenos Date: 4/5/2020 2:30:00 PM Wow Michelle - breathtaking! Blessings. Jennifer. Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 4/5/2020 6:40:00 PM Much appreciate it, thank you, Jennifer

Rico Leffanta Date: 4/3/2020 1:58:00 PM Well done! As a child, our ritual was not saying prayers, but counting stars until we fell asleep. Still works! Aloha! Rico Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 4/4/2020 3:06:00 PM Some count sheep, some count stars - hope you are sleeping well-

Gregory Richard Barden Date: 4/2/2020 10:16:00 PM Wonderful Sedoka, Michelle ... for so long I was afraid of the dark, until I realized that the darkness held such beauty as the stars - I love the dichotomy here and the exquisite phrasing - superb write! :o) <3 Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 4/4/2020 3:05:00 PM Very flattered by your compliment, thank you for the feedback!

Gershon Wolf Date: 4/2/2020 9:31:00 PM So sweetly poetic, Michelle. Great contest entry! Best always, Gershon Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 4/2/2020 9:45:00 PM I am flattered you like it, thanks, gw!

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 4/2/2020 8:49:00 PM This is really well done Michelle. I hope is does great in the contest. xxoo Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 4/2/2020 9:15:00 PM Thank you kindly, Connie -

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/2/2020 5:21:00 PM How profound, Michelle!! Great sedoka. Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 4/2/2020 5:35:00 PM Thank you, Andrea!

Sam Kauffman Date: 4/2/2020 4:09:00 PM Hi Michelle, love the contrast between the darkness and hope that looking at the stars brings us. Also love the phrase "free range stars!" Really nice write! Good luck in the contest. Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 4/2/2020 5:35:00 PM Thank you so much for your kind comment, Sam!