Sweats and Sweets

In one graceful motion, I lift my love on high
with all my strength, suffering and sweat
until hills fall in shadow. Until my words die
upon sweetened breath, I shall never forget -
I am fated to long for our lover's duet.

How can I break away, retreat from this -
a taste of forbidden love for my soul to graze,
to want eternally? For one summer day of bliss,
glazed, green apple eyes enticed with their gaze
while berry-kissed lips set lush fields ablaze.

In one fluid motion, I poured over you, 
drizzled my love like honey. An impassioned sun
burned bold at midnight until Venus flew 
and beads of sweat fell from heavens undone;
until, no going back, we, two, became one.   

When my arms lift you into realms higher
than I'll ever know and stars sparkle near 
like beautiful, new lovers to desire,
remember my sweat and sacrifice, my dear.
I lift you with waning days of sweet youth and tears. 


Written 6/18/15 for Olive's Sweats and Sweets Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 6/30/2015 9:47:00 PM
uh huh, YEP!!! I see, Rhonda!!! (and as for your win, THAT was WELL DESERVED)
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Date: 6/30/2015 6:16:00 PM
Rhonda. ((lol, that wart makes me laugh)) Congrats on your SWEATS AND SWEETS win. LOVE LINDA
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Date: 6/30/2015 12:09:00 AM
Rhonda - I note the only person you replied to is the sponsor of the contest. I actually wrote a question as well, asking you when you are going to judge the "Florida Nature" contest, the deadline for which was March 16th. When are you going to do that?
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 6/30/2015 7:58:00 PM
I've NEVER had to block anyone on this site before. You might be my first.
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 6/30/2015 7:56:00 PM
I did respond to your soupmail and told you I was dealing with health problems. You are an insensitive person and you have no idea what people are going through in their "real" livesm
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 6/30/2015 7:54:00 PM
It's not any of your business, Julia, but I prefer to spend my time visiting the poetry of the poets who visit mine. I don't have time to respond to every comment. No one has ever excused me of being rude in all my years on this site. I've heard many call you rude.
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Julia Ward
Date: 6/30/2015 10:11:00 AM
Your correspondents wouldn't like the way you ignore them. THAT'S being rude, and asking about your failed contest is not... I did write you a soupmail some time back, but you ignored it, as you ignore the contest, your correspondents, etcetera, etcetera. JULIA WARD
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 6/30/2015 9:13:00 AM
I'm sorry that you don't like the way I comment...I'm sorry you are so bothered by my contest results not posted yet. In the future, I prefer you soupmail me with your concerns. You're reputation for rudeness precedes you.
Date: 6/29/2015 11:59:00 PM
Rhonda, this is a nice sweet win *Hugs* SKAT
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Date: 6/29/2015 7:36:00 AM
Rhonda, there are many lines that I love here.. I read this poem how many times because I like it but then somehow, me and James have opposing idea with this one.. Congratulations! thanks for participating!~Olive ELoisa
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 6/29/2015 3:40:00 PM
Thanks for your kindness and inspiring me to write this poem, Olive. I appreciate the placement...hugs, Rhonda
Date: 6/28/2015 5:17:00 PM
Congratulaions on your win a 7 Hugs Eve
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Date: 6/28/2015 4:45:00 PM
Rhonda, this has been a delight to read. Congratulations, though I would have liked to see it place higher. // hugs paul
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Date: 6/28/2015 3:33:00 PM
Many congratulations Rhonda on your placing in Olive's contest, James :) :)
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Date: 6/19/2015 4:11:00 PM
wow, Rhonda. that is utterly gorgeous. The title of the contest was just not one that I could come up with a beauty of a poem. Sweat is a non-count non, and I cannot bring myself to write of sweat and then give a title in the plural. So I did mine on sweats, as in sweat pants. haha. I kind of wish I'd done one like yours. I could always change the title after the contest!! This better appear on the winners' list because it is superb!
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Date: 6/19/2015 12:57:00 PM
A delight to read Rhonda - such wonderful imagery - good luck with the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx soupmail:-) 7
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Date: 6/19/2015 11:47:00 AM
Your thoughts come alive and breathe within your words. An absolute delight to read with a mystical flowing cadence that welcomes the experience, presenting an image of passion's flame.
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Date: 6/19/2015 11:28:00 AM
You captured this contest very well those first two stanzas were as sweet as honey dipped chocolate
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Date: 6/19/2015 8:40:00 AM
my Rhonda, exquisitely done in a Romanesque way.. enjoyed till the end!.. hugs.. and SOUPIE
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Date: 6/19/2015 7:56:00 AM
Very nice... However, when are you going to get around to judging the "Florida Nature" contest, the deadline for which was March 16th? We all went to a lot of trouble to do these poems for you.
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Date: 6/19/2015 1:23:00 AM
Oh my Rhonda....this is going to be at the top of the winner's list I predict. It is written with such elegance that the love you speak of takes on a Divine presence, romance heightened to the heavens. I loved it and must fave it my friend! You don't need any luck with this beauty. 7
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