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Sweats and Sweet

Life has its side not fair at all To till the earth and break rocks To make our nest with claws of hulk To try our best and fit the world No time to rest but just to work We know no guest who wants to knock The fruits we heist we can’t seem to pluck But leave the rest in the hands of luck I once saw the side so fair to me Opened so wide opportunities I meet On beds of roses I pose to eat My joy didn’t hide to share my tweets I sure did ride on iron as feet And were seemed hard with ease I hit The hides are now mild to feet my teeth If I hadn’t tried, I wouldn’t know how sweet

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/30/2015 6:13:00 PM

Hi Victor. Congrats on your SWEATS AND SWEETS win. LOVE LINDA

Skat A

Date: 6/30/2015 12:12:00 AM

Victor, this is a nice sweet win *Hugs* SKAT

Victor Nwakanma
Date: 6/30/2015 8:09:00 AM

thanks skat

Paul Callus

Date: 6/28/2015 4:49:00 PM

This is a most worthy winner, Victor! Congratulations! // paul

Victor Nwakanma
Date: 6/30/2015 8:09:00 AM

am flattered paul, thanks

James Fraser

Date: 6/28/2015 3:00:00 PM

Many congratulations Victor on your placing in Olive's contest, James :) :)

Viv Wigley

Date: 6/28/2015 1:29:00 PM

Gritty stuff, and a worthy entry on the winners list. Well done, Victor. Regards, Viv

Victor Nwakanma
Date: 6/30/2015 8:11:00 AM

thanks wigley

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 6/28/2015 10:24:00 AM

Victor, Very good flow. Simple words were used but really are thuds from line to line! There is the intensity that goes with the way you present the theme which hits good! "making nest with claws of hulk---mmmn like that" The stanzas can stand alone making it a two poem in one for me.. =) I like the second stanza best. CONGRATULATIONS!~Olive Eloisa

Victor Nwakanma
Date: 6/30/2015 8:13:00 AM

wow! you mean you saw all of this from these few words?, thank you Eloisa

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 6/28/2015 10:27:00 AM

It must be noted that James and me went to deliberation to consider this entry as it doesn't have date However, since, it carried the title we required.