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the heavens yawn a sea of suns above me each shining gem to countlessly attest to how I conned her barren heart to love me by pining for the passions she possessed the saga of our love has found its closure while I, with bold temerity, did ask if she might give, thereof, honest disclosure instead of serving, cold, the bloody task why can't the midnight skies embrace my being and turn me to the dust from whence I came? the use has left my eyes, for tears or seeing her proclivity for just assigning blame you see, she found her way into my marrow each nuance of her face now haunts by soul life's aperture, today, is oh, so narrow despair as deep as space, and black as coal so please, dear firmament, consume my spirit devour me with the flame of earthly death though she has no intent to ever hear it please make her tender name ... my final breath. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Eight Word Challenge - 9" Poetry Contest, John Hamilton, Judge & Sponsor.

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Eve Roper

Date: 12/2/2018 9:32:00 AM

Like always , Greg, I enjoyed reading. Great way of the use of the 8 words .. Congratulations on your 1st place win.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/22/2018 7:09:00 PM

That's very sweet, Eve, thank you very much, my friend! :-) <3

Sandra Haight

Date: 11/30/2018 8:24:00 PM

Another incredibly, beautiful write, Greg. You made such excellent use of the required words as only you can do. Congratulations on your First Place win. Sandra <3

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/22/2018 7:08:00 PM

Oh, you are too kind as usual, Sandra, but I so appreciate it, and I'm very thankful that you enjoyed my poem! Blessings, Dear Poet! :-) <3

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 11/30/2018 12:46:00 PM

Such a darkly moving tribute to the pain of unrequited longing, congratulations on a well-earned win!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/22/2018 7:07:00 PM

Many thanks to you, Michelle, I'm pleased you enjoyed my poem! :-) <3

Gershon Wolf

Date: 11/28/2018 2:29:00 PM

A daring ending to this downward spiral of a revelatory darkling write, my friend. Congratulations are in order for such outstanding poesy. Season's Best, Gershon

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/29/2018 11:56:00 PM

The same to you, my friend, and thank you very much for your kind and heartfelt comments. Blessings! :-)

Joseph May

Date: 11/28/2018 8:54:00 AM

Fading passions consume the soul..Congrats on your win Greg..Blessings to you and yours this holiday season..

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/29/2018 11:55:00 PM

Well-said, my Poet Brother ... and thank you so kindly! Blessings! :-)

Deb Radke

Date: 11/28/2018 8:50:00 AM

Oh. This is so beautifully written. Your use of rhyme so pleasing to read. I greatly admire how you used unusual words to form the rhyming pattern. I know that can be daunting. You, however, have made it flow effortlessly. The tender emotions shine through. A great write. Congratulations on your well-deserved win. All my best. Deb

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/29/2018 11:54:00 PM

This is such a wonderful comment - poetry in itself - and it made me smile warmly - thank you so very much, Deb, I so greatly appreciate you taking the time. Blessings, my friend! :-) <3