Sunstroke

Eyelids heavy with memories Cover lights and shadows of a hospital in ruins. A baby with grown-up fingers Reads the past in Braille Barely touching the meaning of broken cobblestone streets of her past. Her fingertips retract like eyes of snails back into the present Where handsome men - immoral in their animalism - try to understand LOVE for the very first time. Great White sharks kill tri-athletes and place them in immortality as writers reach the end of the journey frustrated by their lack of gills ... The torrid yellow burden rolls down incinerated crystals between her breasts She senses people as zigzags with burglarized drawers rhythmically roaming up and down the Riviera... The ocean breeze murmurs: “ Michelle, my belle...”, “ I love, I love you, I looove you...” Invading her nostrils with the aroma of freshly brewed coffee and the smell of barbeque that, once she could digest. The sun drops gold coins into the turquoise as they ricochet into her degenerating eyes. I see myself in her from the above as unscrupulous tides rip open our sandy abdomen Violently sucking my body's sand sculpture back to the undertow. It's almost dusk and seagulls fly through me to a secret shelter I wish I had... I'm scared to fall asleep as I might wake up without wings while numbness's taking over my bleeding shoulder blades... "The body of a peddler with broken clocks on sale was found tonight on the landing pad of a hospital in ruins"
for Deb's contest "Real, UNreal or SURreal "

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 5/29/2011 1:23:00 AM
wow, this is very surreal indeed. So many images. What a writer!!
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Date: 5/22/2011 2:01:00 AM
Reallt out side the box this one!! Iolanda..
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Date: 5/16/2011 5:53:00 PM
Dear Iolanda....came back to read this amazing poem again. And want to thank you so much for the birthday wish. Also, just want to hear how things are going, and hope things have gotten better for your situation, and that you are settled and happy where you are living now. Still in the Carlsbad/Oceanside/ Fallbrook area I presume? Hope the job situation has worked out ....just think of you and keep you in my good thoughts! Love, Carrie
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Date: 5/10/2011 4:53:00 PM
Wild imagination in this one...Reads like a winner for sure..Good luck..Thanks for the recipe on cooking beet greens..I think that it will be good..Sara
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Date: 5/10/2011 11:59:00 AM
amazing write, my iols! SOUP MAIL:) huggs
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Date: 4/22/2011 5:53:00 PM
Wow, what a very powerful and vivid poem, Iolanda! Super congrats on your win :)!
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Date: 4/21/2011 4:25:00 PM
Way to go Iolanda, Congratulations on your success in the winner circle. Agape, Moses
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Date: 4/21/2011 2:46:00 PM
Wow...Iolanda, I think this is the most powerful poem of yours I've read....amazing, and filled with such deep image. Congrats on your win! Love, Carrie
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Date: 4/21/2011 12:57:00 PM
Congratulations on the second place win in the contest, Iolanda
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Date: 4/21/2011 11:25:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the contest Iolanda. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/21/2011 10:34:00 AM
Wow!!!! is all I can say, Iolanda. Many congrats on your BIG WIN! Lainie
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Date: 4/21/2011 7:19:00 AM
Wow, this is a very super write Iolanda. Many warm congrats for this terrific write
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