Jan Allison Poet Free verse

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Sunsets Poetry Contest Sponsored by Natasha L Scragg. 09/11/23

Sunset Sadness

I sit alone
wishing
we’d had 
just one last summer 
to observe the setting sun.

As sol slowly sinks
towards the horizon
I feast my eyes on
a smorgasbord of colour.

Such glorious shades
of
rich marmalade, 
tangerine, 
hints of cinnamon
spicy saffron
and liquid honey.

I smile as
sunbeams
of burnished gold
sparkle as they
dance on the water

Yet
a solitary tear
trickles down my cheek...

I miss you mum

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Christina Bowring September 21, 2023 at 3:32 PM This is so truly beautiful Jan and expressed so exquisitely. It is so visually stunning,’ rich marmalade, tangerine,’’sunbeams of burnished gold’.So, so well written and then the last few lines so tender, touching that resonates with the reader and pulls them in gently to you and your immense loss. Makes your audience really feel and that’s great poetry dear Jan. I love your work. You should be proud. Hugs and smiles to you :):) Jan Allison September 21, 2023 at 6:18 PM Thanks Christina, I have come a long long way since i started as a novice back in 2013, this is a very special poem to me:-) hugs Jan xx

Craig Cornish September 20, 2023 at 12:34 PM My Mom is 93 and still awesome - thank you for reminding me to not take it for granted! Jan Allison September 21, 2023 at 6:17 PM Thanks Craig, I am so so proud of this poem, it's not my usual poop for sure lol. Losing mum last year hit me hard ... she was at end of life care for 6 months but kept bouncing back like tigger hence the reason I wasn't really active on the site for 9 months. Wish she was still here to see the humour book I am self publishing! hugs jan x

Unseeking Seeker September 17, 2023 at 9:12 PM Oooh ~ so tender. A fav Jan Allison September 18, 2023 at 5:04 AM thanks so much US, wish i could fave it myself!:-) hugs jan xx

Christopher Flaherty September 13, 2023 at 1:38 PM Jan You are not alone You are not only to me But the many Matriarch of the Soup Jan Allison September 13, 2023 at 3:02 PM Thanks Christopher I was having a rare melancholy moment here, got to say its a poem I am SO proud to have written:-) hugs Janxx

Regina Mcintosh September 13, 2023 at 1:13 AM oh... a fave for sure. Definitely a fave. A blessing to read and experience. God bless you, Jan. Love you, Gina Jan Allison September 13, 2023 at 3:01 PM thanks Regina:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues September 11, 2023 at 4:19 PM Your thoughts of mom both beautiful and sad. Hugs ~ Kim Jan Allison September 12, 2023 at 3:05 AM thanks so much Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

The Situation September 11, 2023 at 3:08 PM She's somewhere waiting. Jan Allison September 11, 2023 at 3:27 PM Thanks so much for the comment The Situation:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel September 11, 2023 at 2:05 AM I loved the third stanza so much, Jan, absolutely stunning and colourful and "smorgasbord" - wow! The way you connect the sunset to missing your mom is so touching:) Jan Allison September 11, 2023 at 3:18 AM Thanks Jo I am proud of this one, wish i could fave it :-) hugs jan xx

Victor Buhagiar September 11, 2023 at 1:31 AM A great tribute to your mother. Your muse is in full swing, comparing the sunset to a famous type of food. Hugs. Jan Allison September 11, 2023 at 1:38 AM Thanks Victor, it's rare for me to write this way but I think colour can be used to great effect in a poem like this:-) hugs Jan xx

Deb M September 11, 2023 at 12:42 AM Oh Jan….l feel every word you wrote! Sending the biggest cuddle of love and kindness to Jan in the IOM…..Beautiful poem written by your heart Jan…..Debx Jan Allison September 11, 2023 at 1:28 AM Thanks Deb, I appreciate your kind words and especially the cuddle! hugs jan xx

Lin Lane September 10, 2023 at 7:54 PM Jan, I was enjoying your scene until your last line hit me like a gut punch. I know the relationship you had with your Mum. You will always hold her in your heart. Hugs. Jan Allison September 11, 2023 at 1:27 AM I miss her every day Lin, Just a colourful tribute to her, sadly one many can relate to. I've added this one to the list of poems to be featured on soup, wish i could fave it but with all the lovely comments I will come back again to it:-) Hugs jan xx

Gershon Wolf September 10, 2023 at 7:44 PM Aw, I'm sure you'd give up 100 sunsets for one glimpse of Mum! Jan Allison September 11, 2023 at 1:26 AM Spot on GW! hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham September 10, 2023 at 7:05 PM It's at times like those when you're deep in thought that it hits you. Lovely tribute Jan. Tom Jan Allison September 11, 2023 at 1:26 AM Thanks Tom, we have some glorious sunsets, a time for reflection in many ways. hugs Jan xx

Akkina Downing September 10, 2023 at 6:35 PM Oh my gosh, Jan, what a stunning poem and that last line to pull on my heart. Love!! Hugs ~ Jan Allison September 11, 2023 at 1:25 AM Thanks so much Akkina:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Lawrence September 10, 2023 at 5:54 PM Jan...so heartfelt and loving. I can see you sitting there gazing out. What a wonderful thing to have just one more sunset together. I have a hard time thinking of the day my dear mom will be gone. Every moment is a gift. Sending love and big hugs. Susan :) Jan Allison September 11, 2023 at 1:25 AM Thanks Susan, its been 10 months since she passed, I miss her every day. I still find the time of my daily visit is the hardest thing to come to terms with. Hugs jan xx

Jerry Brotherton September 10, 2023 at 5:37 PM Stunning imagery of a sunset Jan. Your last line nearly brought me to tears. From my writer's cabin, I sit and watch the sunset nearly every night and think about those who have crossed the veil before me. It gives me comfort to think they can see the same sunset from Heaven. Jan Allison September 11, 2023 at 1:24 AM Thanks Jerry:-) hugs Jan xx