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Sunsets Poetry Contest Sponsored by Natasha L Scragg. 09/11/23

I sit alone wishing we’d had just one last summer to observe the setting sun. As sol slowly sinks towards the horizon I feast my eyes on a smorgasbord of colour. Such glorious shades of rich marmalade, tangerine, hints of cinnamon spicy saffron and liquid honey. I smile as sunbeams of burnished gold sparkle as they dance on the water Yet a solitary tear trickles down my cheek... I miss you mum

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Christina Bowring

Date: 9/21/2023 3:32:00 PM

This is so truly beautiful Jan and expressed so exquisitely. It is so visually stunning,’ rich marmalade, tangerine,’’sunbeams of burnished gold’.So, so well written and then the last few lines so tender, touching that resonates with the reader and pulls them in gently to you and your immense loss. Makes your audience really feel and that’s great poetry dear Jan. I love your work. You should be proud. Hugs and smiles to you :):)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2023 6:18:00 PM

Thanks Christina, I have come a long long way since i started as a novice back in 2013, this is a very special poem to me:-) hugs Jan xx

Craig Cornish

Date: 9/20/2023 12:34:00 PM

My Mom is 93 and still awesome - thank you for reminding me to not take it for granted!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2023 6:17:00 PM

Thanks Craig, I am so so proud of this poem, it's not my usual poop for sure lol. Losing mum last year hit me hard ... she was at end of life care for 6 months but kept bouncing back like tigger hence the reason I wasn't really active on the site for 9 months. Wish she was still here to see the humour book I am self publishing! hugs jan x

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 9/17/2023 9:12:00 PM

Oooh ~ so tender. A fav

Jan Allison
Date: 9/18/2023 5:04:00 AM

thanks so much US, wish i could fave it myself!:-) hugs jan xx

Chantelle Cooke

Date: 9/16/2023 7:32:00 PM

Oh my goodness Jan I cried reading this touching tribute to your mum. I miss my mom very much...a fav for me.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/18/2023 5:03:00 AM

thanks for dropping by to read this one, I seldom write emotional pieces but the ending just came to me:-) hugs Jan xx

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 9/13/2023 1:38:00 PM

Jan You are not alone You are not only to me But the many Matriarch of the Soup

Jan Allison
Date: 9/13/2023 3:02:00 PM

Thanks Christopher I was having a rare melancholy moment here, got to say its a poem I am SO proud to have written:-) hugs Janxx

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 9/13/2023 1:13:00 AM

oh... a fave for sure. Definitely a fave. A blessing to read and experience. God bless you, Jan. Love you, Gina

Jan Allison
Date: 9/13/2023 3:01:00 PM

thanks Regina:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/11/2023 4:19:00 PM

Your thoughts of mom both beautiful and sad. Hugs ~ Kim

Jan Allison
Date: 9/12/2023 3:05:00 AM

thanks so much Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

The Situation

Date: 9/11/2023 3:08:00 PM

She's somewhere waiting.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2023 3:27:00 PM

Thanks so much for the comment The Situation:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 9/11/2023 2:05:00 AM

I loved the third stanza so much, Jan, absolutely stunning and colourful and "smorgasbord" - wow! The way you connect the sunset to missing your mom is so touching:)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2023 3:18:00 AM

Thanks Jo I am proud of this one, wish i could fave it :-) hugs jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/11/2023 1:31:00 AM

A great tribute to your mother. Your muse is in full swing, comparing the sunset to a famous type of food. Hugs.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2023 1:38:00 AM

Thanks Victor, it's rare for me to write this way but I think colour can be used to great effect in a poem like this:-) hugs Jan xx

Deb M

Date: 9/11/2023 12:42:00 AM

Oh Jan….l feel every word you wrote! Sending the biggest cuddle of love and kindness to Jan in the IOM…..Beautiful poem written by your heart Jan…..Debx

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2023 1:28:00 AM

Thanks Deb, I appreciate your kind words and especially the cuddle! hugs jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 9/10/2023 7:54:00 PM

Jan, I was enjoying your scene until your last line hit me like a gut punch. I know the relationship you had with your Mum. You will always hold her in your heart. Hugs.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2023 1:27:00 AM

I miss her every day Lin, Just a colourful tribute to her, sadly one many can relate to. I've added this one to the list of poems to be featured on soup, wish i could fave it but with all the lovely comments I will come back again to it:-) Hugs jan xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/10/2023 7:44:00 PM

Aw, I'm sure you'd give up 100 sunsets for one glimpse of Mum!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2023 1:26:00 AM

Spot on GW! hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/10/2023 7:05:00 PM

It's at times like those when you're deep in thought that it hits you. Lovely tribute Jan. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2023 1:26:00 AM

Thanks Tom, we have some glorious sunsets, a time for reflection in many ways. hugs Jan xx

Akkina Downing

Date: 9/10/2023 6:35:00 PM

Oh my gosh, Jan, what a stunning poem and that last line to pull on my heart. Love!! Hugs ~

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2023 1:25:00 AM

Thanks so much Akkina:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Lawrence

Date: 9/10/2023 5:54:00 PM

Jan...so heartfelt and loving. I can see you sitting there gazing out. What a wonderful thing to have just one more sunset together. I have a hard time thinking of the day my dear mom will be gone. Every moment is a gift. Sending love and big hugs. Susan :)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2023 1:25:00 AM

Thanks Susan, its been 10 months since she passed, I miss her every day. I still find the time of my daily visit is the hardest thing to come to terms with. Hugs jan xx

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 9/10/2023 5:37:00 PM

Stunning imagery of a sunset Jan. Your last line nearly brought me to tears. From my writer's cabin, I sit and watch the sunset nearly every night and think about those who have crossed the veil before me. It gives me comfort to think they can see the same sunset from Heaven.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2023 1:24:00 AM

Thanks Jerry:-) hugs Jan xx