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3/11/2023
Virelai Form

Come down to river ‘tis cold you’ll quiver Amend and find the Giver He will deliver Transcend Love’s a caregiver Come down to river Descend No need to contend when angels defend God praise No need to pretend A life with no end sans grays Eternity spend With Jesus your friend Good pays With the heart ablaze sing salvation’s praise Shiver with the Spirit’s gaze Let go sinful days sliver of the past a haze baptised in Sunday’s river

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I Am Anaya

Date: 4/3/2023 9:48:00 AM

Kim this should be submitted as a calling everywhere, for a most holy sacrament. Makes for great gospel! Exciting ~Anaya

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/3/2023 1:10:00 PM

Thank you, Anaya!

Beata Agustin

Date: 3/22/2023 5:58:00 AM

Thanks for sharing this... with faith-edifying content, and poetry skill-enhancing form, exemplifying what your contest requires. God bless you.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/22/2023 10:53:00 AM

Thank you so much, Beata! :)

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 3/17/2023 2:31:00 PM

Love this. Excellent example for your contest. Amazing. God bless you. Love, Gina

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/17/2023 4:42:00 PM

Thank you, Gina! So glad you like it!

Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 3/15/2023 10:26:00 PM

creative form and insightful writings

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/16/2023 7:39:00 AM

Thank you, Mahtab!

Joanna Daniel

Date: 3/14/2023 10:39:00 PM

What a powerful little poem, Kim, love the new form:)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/15/2023 8:11:00 AM

Thank you, Jo!

Speaks Volumes

Date: 3/13/2023 8:39:00 PM

This was the first Virelai poem I ever read Kim, when I read the instructions for your contest. I was in awe at the structure. Unlike other restrictive forms of poetry, this one allows a story still to be told. Your example is wonderful. Thank you so much

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/15/2023 8:11:00 AM

Thank you, Wendy! :)

Sam Kauffman

Date: 3/13/2023 1:44:00 PM

A visual and auditory delight Kim! Looks like fun!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/13/2023 3:56:00 PM

Thank you, my friend!

Paul Callus

Date: 3/13/2023 7:30:00 AM

I love the poem, Kim, including the rhyme scheme you employed....but, I'd make sure to choose a lovely summer day with less shiver! ~ Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/13/2023 3:58:00 PM

A warmer day would be better :) Thank you, Paul!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 3/12/2023 7:22:00 PM

Cleansing!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/12/2023 8:09:00 PM

Thank you, my friend!

Sotto Poet

Date: 3/12/2023 6:40:00 AM

If you want to be one with nature, you won't find a prime spot to spend time by the bank of the river. Water has a purifying effect, and the presence of rivers has a relaxing effect.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/12/2023 10:56:00 AM

Thank you, Lasaad!

Anil Deo

Date: 3/12/2023 6:25:00 AM

Enjoyed the form, complex rhyming, and a simply reFRESHing message of sin-solution to begin ANEW. Shalom shalom, thanx Kim

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/12/2023 10:56:00 AM

Thank you so much, Anil!

Bj Legros Kelley

Date: 3/12/2023 12:53:00 AM

Lovely, JOYFUL! Oh, goodness, Kim, this is simply so gloriously Happy!!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/12/2023 10:56:00 AM

Oh! Thank you for saying so! <3