Kim Rodrigues Poet Rhyme

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3/11/2023
Virelai Form

Sundays River

Come down to river
‘tis cold you’ll quiver
Amend
and find the Giver
He will deliver
Transcend
Love’s a caregiver
Come down to river
Descend

No need to contend
when angels defend
God praise
No need to pretend
A life with no end
sans grays
Eternity spend
With Jesus your friend
Good pays

With the heart ablaze
sing salvation’s praise
Shiver
with the Spirit’s gaze
Let go sinful days
sliver
of the past a haze
baptised in Sunday’s
river

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I Am Anaya April 3, 2023 at 9:48 AM Kim this should be submitted as a calling everywhere, for a most holy sacrament. Makes for great gospel! Exciting ~Anaya Kim Rodrigues April 3, 2023 at 1:10 PM Thank you, Anaya!

Beata Agustin March 22, 2023 at 5:58 AM Thanks for sharing this... with faith-edifying content, and poetry skill-enhancing form, exemplifying what your contest requires. God bless you. Kim Rodrigues March 22, 2023 at 10:53 AM Thank you so much, Beata! :)

Regina Mcintosh March 17, 2023 at 2:31 PM Love this. Excellent example for your contest. Amazing. God bless you. Love, Gina Kim Rodrigues March 17, 2023 at 4:42 PM Thank you, Gina! So glad you like it!

Mahtab Bangalee March 15, 2023 at 10:26 PM creative form and insightful writings Kim Rodrigues March 16, 2023 at 7:39 AM Thank you, Mahtab!

Joanna Daniel March 14, 2023 at 10:39 PM What a powerful little poem, Kim, love the new form:) Kim Rodrigues March 15, 2023 at 8:11 AM Thank you, Jo!

Speaks Volumes March 13, 2023 at 8:39 PM This was the first Virelai poem I ever read Kim, when I read the instructions for your contest. I was in awe at the structure. Unlike other restrictive forms of poetry, this one allows a story still to be told. Your example is wonderful. Thank you so much Kim Rodrigues March 15, 2023 at 8:11 AM Thank you, Wendy! :)

Sam Kauffman March 13, 2023 at 1:44 PM A visual and auditory delight Kim! Looks like fun! Kim Rodrigues March 13, 2023 at 3:56 PM Thank you, my friend!

Paul Callus March 13, 2023 at 7:30 AM I love the poem, Kim, including the rhyme scheme you employed....but, I'd make sure to choose a lovely summer day with less shiver! ~ Regards // paul Kim Rodrigues March 13, 2023 at 3:58 PM A warmer day would be better :) Thank you, Paul!

Gershon Wolf March 12, 2023 at 7:22 PM Cleansing! Kim Rodrigues March 12, 2023 at 8:09 PM Thank you, my friend!

Sotto Poet March 12, 2023 at 6:40 AM If you want to be one with nature, you won't find a prime spot to spend time by the bank of the river. Water has a purifying effect, and the presence of rivers has a relaxing effect. Kim Rodrigues March 12, 2023 at 10:56 AM Thank you, Lasaad!

Anil Deo March 12, 2023 at 6:25 AM Enjoyed the form, complex rhyming, and a simply reFRESHing message of sin-solution to begin ANEW. Shalom shalom, thanx Kim Kim Rodrigues March 12, 2023 at 10:56 AM Thank you so much, Anil!

Bj Legros Kelley March 12, 2023 at 12:53 AM Lovely, JOYFUL! Oh, goodness, Kim, this is simply so gloriously Happy!! Kim Rodrigues March 12, 2023 at 10:56 AM Oh! Thank you for saying so! <3