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Sun Too Needs a Savior

Where does the selfless sun hide when heavens r a i n bloodstones? Burned and inscribed, from monsoon monsters, gnawing at our bones, the shimmering darkness imbibed, If only drifting shades of gray, where the tempests of hell sway, would hear the hymns I sleep to when the clouds steal on cue the soul of illuminating skies. I listen to the echoing symphony of s i l e n t sighs, convincing soothingly, pulling me back to soar new h i g h s amongst electric choirs, as angels swiftly swing, on saffron strings, to the bass of cellos rising, above tuscan tambourines. Yet, I keep drowning in needless tears, from pearlized ponds of fears, seeing life as how it has always been forged, a disappointment fed through filthy forks, who’ve gorged on the first of every scintillating ray of light. But, what if the sun, too, needs a savior? Like an eternal gem that beams upon dreary dawns set upon her draining every heavy lampshade of s t a r s within spheres of novae, lest the opulence give way to bruise and decay. Perhaps, grim gales gusting in wrathful bursts shall finally be the serenity I need for I’ve tilled every field of hurts like raspberry from the scent of rose water, For sometimes, that’s all it takes, heeding to freeze through malevolent thorns in icy lakes.

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Date: 1/22/2024 5:13:00 PM
Dear Empress, you continue to enchant my imagination and contemplation. Your clever word play "I listen to the echoing symphony/of s i l e n t sighs" along with creative imageries and alliterations "grim gales/gusting in/wrathful bursts" and artistically molded metaphors, introspections and personification "Where does the/selfless sun hide/when heavens/r a i n bloodstones?" weave together to form a deep rich poetic tapestry. If the center of the universe needs a savior, then why wouldn't we? A humbling gem of poetic thought and beauty. Congratulations for your excellent win in Brian's contest. Warmest wishes, soulful poetess.. ~Susan
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Date: 1/22/2024 6:39:00 AM
Back with hearty congratulations on your podium win.
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/22/2024 7:07:00 AM
Ah dr sotto this was first posted for your contest when i joined soup, ill never forget how you placed me first, and how you’ve encouraged and supported me from the very beginning. Thank you so much truly
Date: 1/22/2024 4:35:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning work in Brian's contest. Way to go. Sara K
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/22/2024 7:07:00 AM
Thank you dear sara i appreciate your support always
Date: 9/2/2023 1:57:00 AM
The images you use are striking and your metaphors are so profound. Your poem enlarges in dimensions as we read this over and again ! Congratulations Empress on your first place win.
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Ink Empress
Date: 9/2/2023 3:58:00 AM
Thank you so very much im so happy to hear that from a brilliant poetess like you thank u
Date: 9/1/2023 5:08:00 PM
INK, Congratulations on winning my contest with your beautifully written poem. Your poem is filled with deep thoughts and vivid descriptions, which brings the imagery to life.
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Ink Empress
Date: 9/2/2023 3:57:00 AM
Omg really this is an honor truly. I am humbled and so grateful beyond i can express thank you so much kindly
Date: 9/1/2023 2:52:00 PM
Congratulations on your top win, Dear Poet. This poem is definitely a gem - I got goosebumps reading through the brilliant array of creative images!
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Ink Empress
Date: 9/2/2023 12:05:00 PM
Thank you so very much this is so kind of you
Date: 9/1/2023 2:18:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. What a creative/lovely write. Love your line, "But, what if the sun, too, needs a savior?" Have a blessed day................
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Ink Empress
Date: 9/2/2023 3:57:00 AM
Thank you so very much for the appreciation truly grateful
Date: 8/26/2023 12:16:00 PM
Lovely penning, you've made a great piece here with great imagery and insightful line of thought.
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Ink Empress
Date: 9/2/2023 3:57:00 AM
Ah thank you so very much
Date: 8/24/2023 4:44:00 PM
WOW! I read this beauty 3 times and still could not get the all of its many nuances and imaginings, etc. Truly wonderful poetry. A fav and a gem. God bless.
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Robert Lindley
Date: 8/25/2023 8:05:00 AM
My friend, tis far better that I thank you for this poem. For it is a masterpiece to any that knows real poetry. God bless.
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/24/2023 10:56:00 PM
You are so kind thank you so much always
Date: 8/24/2023 3:02:00 PM
This is just WOW!!! Can I call you Inky too? Like our friend Tom Does :) Magnificent poem, and I am going to fave it for a reread. And would love to share it if you don’t mind of course. Just takes my breath away. Big smile for you, Inky :)
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/24/2023 10:56:00 PM
Oh about sharing poems, wow how do we share poems here? I didnt know this, and what a generous offer and thought, truly you are so very kind thank you and yes you may thats such an honor
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/24/2023 10:55:00 PM
Awwn yess you can, many do call me inky on instagram. Thank you for your kind support, beautiful Akkina, truly appreciate you so much
Date: 8/24/2023 11:34:00 AM
Dear Empress, your word use and images that express your meaning and emotion are breathtaking in their originality! What a gift you express. Just a thought sparked by your poem, it seems to me that all creation needs the redeeming, freely given love, and light, of a Savior. Thank you for those moments of reflection for, in my mind, that is what poetry does. Sending you blessings of light!
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/24/2023 10:54:00 PM
You have a deep mindset, and you’ve left your very profound thoughts on my poem so generously, thank you so much for your sincere support
Date: 8/24/2023 6:01:00 AM
When there is no place to hide spreading light is all thats needed, Very nicely penned
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/24/2023 10:53:00 PM
Thank you so very much for your deep feedback. Much appreciated always
Date: 8/23/2023 3:35:00 PM
Your poem, Ink, has been beautifully written. It effortlessly transports the reader through the realms of heaven and earth, delving into the depths of human emotion. Your masterful use of a wide range of metaphors adds depth and richness to the piece. You have truly excelled Ink. Best of luck in the contest.
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/24/2023 12:31:00 AM
Thank you so much, i appreciate your kind feedback, and inspiration. Always a delight hearing your thoughts on my work . Grateful
Date: 8/23/2023 11:56:00 AM
sometimes dear poet the sun needs to free itself from the universe that feeds on its light and find another place, another space to rest in a peaceful purpose of self-imposed reflection...beautiful creative writing dear poet...
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/23/2023 11:18:00 PM
You’re very metaphorical and you really understood my poem perfectly thank you so much for your comment and yes sometimes that is the best for the sun
Date: 8/22/2023 5:46:00 AM
I think Mr. Sun is gonna be okay. As for the rest of us, not so sure. As per your usual you use metaphors, colors and textures in a surreal way that makes us want to read again and again to uncover the hidden meanings and gems in your poetry, Inky
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/23/2023 5:41:00 AM
I think you're only "new" for thirty days. I'm stoked for you three
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/22/2023 10:48:00 PM
Oh wow thank you so much , i just saw .. but why did you drop? Is it because you are no longer new? This is all very interesting and new for me. So exciting
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/22/2023 11:16:00 AM
Btw, you, Hiya and Su are top three new poets! I was top for several weeks but just dropped off the list. A big congrats to all of you!
Date: 8/22/2023 3:14:00 AM
Incredible writing. I just love it. God bless you always, Love, Gina
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/24/2023 3:06:00 AM
Thank you always
Date: 8/22/2023 1:31:00 AM
- Wow... you have taken this poem to heaven and earth through human deep feelings... using a great variety of metaphors... excellent, Ink :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/24/2023 3:06:00 AM
Thank you so much , i appreciate your support , hugs
Date: 8/22/2023 12:41:00 AM
My goshh, this is such a magnificent, marvelous and bewitching piece that oozes dark emotions from every crack and void depicted in heart's chambers.. What a striking thought of sun needing a saviour, for its burnt and scorched by its own flames, radiating light & life, yet destroying itself.. When the world revolves in gloomy ambience, devoured by imposters, evils and melancholy.. At that time the sun too, needs to be revived.. To fight the bloodstones coming from seemingly 'heavens'..
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/24/2023 3:06:00 AM
Thank you always for sprinkling such golden reviews on my poems. Its every poets and writers dream to get feedback like yours, that makes us feel seen, grateful
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/22/2023 12:42:00 AM
Ahh, I could praise this piece all day! The metaphors, imagery, vivid vocabulary, alliteration and perfect flow of this piece has truly made me go wow! Such a surreal and spellbinding one, with poignant depth and heart-aching vulnerability.. That ending is too beautiful and heartfelt ~ sending you so much love-

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