Sun Too Needs a Savior

Where does the 
    selfless sun hide
when heavens
r a i n bloodstones? 
Burned and inscribed, 
from monsoon monsters,
gnawing at our bones,
the shimmering 
  darkness imbibed,
If only drifting shades of gray, 
where the tempests 
             of hell sway,
would hear the hymns I sleep to
when the clouds steal on cue
the soul of illuminating skies. 

I listen to the echoing symphony
of s i l e n t sighs, 
convincing soothingly,
pulling me back to soar
new h i g h s
amongst electric choirs,
as angels swiftly swing,
       on saffron strings,
to the bass of cellos rising,
above tuscan tambourines.

Yet, I keep drowning in needless tears, 
from pearlized ponds of fears,
seeing life as how it
has always been forged,
a disappointment
fed through 
   filthy forks, who’ve gorged 
on the first
of every scintillating ray of light.

But, what if the sun, too, needs a savior? 
Like an eternal gem that beams
upon dreary dawns set upon her
draining every heavy lampshade
       of stars within spheres 
of novae, lest the opulence give 
way to bruise and decay.

Perhaps, grim gales gusting in
wrathful bursts
shall finally be the 
  serenity I need
for I’ve tilled every field
of hurts like raspberry
from the scent 
    of rose water, 
For sometimes, that’s all it takes, 
heeding to freeze through
malevolent thorns in icy lakes.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Ramel Avatar
October 30, 2024 at 4:55 PM
I have just begun reading your poetry....I admire your writing style, your weaving of words.
Ashley Avatar
January 22, 2024 at 5:13 PM
Dear Empress, you continue to enchant my imagination and contemplation. Your clever word play "I listen to the echoing symphony/of s i l e n t sighs" along with creative imageries and alliterations "grim gales/gusting in/wrathful bursts" and artistically molded metaphors, introspections and personification "Where does the/selfless sun hide/when heavens/r a i n bloodstones?" weave together to form a deep rich poetic tapestry. If the center of the universe needs a savior, then why wouldn't we? A humbling gem of poetic thought and beauty. Congratulations for your excellent win in Brian's contest. Warmest wishes, soulful poetess.. ~Susan
Poet Avatar
January 22, 2024 at 6:39 AM
Back with hearty congratulations on your podium win.
Empress Avatar
January 22, 2024 at 7:07 AM
Ah dr sotto this was first posted for your contest when i joined soup, ill never forget how you placed me first, and how you’ve encouraged and supported me from the very beginning. Thank you so much truly
Kendrick Avatar
January 22, 2024 at 4:35 AM
Congratulations on your winning work in Brian's contest. Way to go. Sara K
Empress Avatar
January 22, 2024 at 7:07 AM
Thank you dear sara i appreciate your support always
George Avatar
September 2, 2023 at 1:57 AM
The images you use are striking and your metaphors are so profound. Your poem enlarges in dimensions as we read this over and again ! Congratulations Empress on your first place win.
Empress Avatar
September 2, 2023 at 3:58 AM
Thank you so very much im so happy to hear that from a brilliant poetess like you thank u
Poet Avatar
September 1, 2023 at 5:08 PM
INK, Congratulations on winning my contest with your beautifully written poem. Your poem is filled with deep thoughts and vivid descriptions, which brings the imagery to life.
Empress Avatar
September 2, 2023 at 3:57 AM
Omg really this is an honor truly. I am humbled and so grateful beyond i can express thank you so much kindly
Ray Choudhury Avatar
September 1, 2023 at 2:52 PM
Congratulations on your top win, Dear Poet. This poem is definitely a gem - I got goosebumps reading through the brilliant array of creative images!
Empress Avatar
September 2, 2023 at 12:05 PM
Thank you so very much this is so kind of you
Goldsmith Avatar
September 1, 2023 at 2:18 PM
Congratulations on your win. What a creative/lovely write. Love your line, "But, what if the sun, too, needs a savior?" Have a blessed day................
Empress Avatar
September 2, 2023 at 3:57 AM
Thank you so very much for the appreciation truly grateful
Mcconnell Avatar
August 26, 2023 at 12:16 PM
Lovely penning, you've made a great piece here with great imagery and insightful line of thought.
Empress Avatar
September 2, 2023 at 3:57 AM
Ah thank you so very much
Lindley Avatar
August 24, 2023 at 4:44 PM
WOW! I read this beauty 3 times and still could not get the all of its many nuances and imaginings, etc. Truly wonderful poetry. A fav and a gem. God bless.
Lindley Avatar
August 25, 2023 at 8:05 AM
My friend, tis far better that I thank you for this poem. For it is a masterpiece to any that knows real poetry. God bless.
Empress Avatar
August 24, 2023 at 10:56 PM
You are so kind thank you so much always
Downing  Avatar
August 24, 2023 at 3:02 PM
This is just WOW!!! Can I call you Inky too? Like our friend Tom Does :) Magnificent poem, and I am going to fave it for a reread. And would love to share it if you don’t mind of course. Just takes my breath away. Big smile for you, Inky :)
Empress Avatar
August 24, 2023 at 10:56 PM
Oh about sharing poems, wow how do we share poems here? I didnt know this, and what a generous offer and thought, truly you are so very kind thank you and yes you may thats such an honor
Empress Avatar
August 24, 2023 at 10:55 PM
Awwn yess you can, many do call me inky on instagram. Thank you for your kind support, beautiful Akkina, truly appreciate you so much
Kauffman Avatar
August 24, 2023 at 11:34 AM
Dear Empress, your word use and images that express your meaning and emotion are breathtaking in their originality! What a gift you express. Just a thought sparked by your poem, it seems to me that all creation needs the redeeming, freely given love, and light, of a Savior. Thank you for those moments of reflection for, in my mind, that is what poetry does. Sending you blessings of light!
Empress Avatar
August 24, 2023 at 10:54 PM
You have a deep mindset, and you’ve left your very profound thoughts on my poem so generously, thank you so much for your sincere support
May Avatar
August 24, 2023 at 6:01 AM
When there is no place to hide spreading light is all thats needed, Very nicely penned
Empress Avatar
August 24, 2023 at 10:53 PM
Thank you so very much for your deep feedback. Much appreciated always
Poet Avatar
August 23, 2023 at 3:35 PM
Your poem, Ink, has been beautifully written. It effortlessly transports the reader through the realms of heaven and earth, delving into the depths of human emotion. Your masterful use of a wide range of metaphors adds depth and richness to the piece. You have truly excelled Ink. Best of luck in the contest.
Empress Avatar
August 24, 2023 at 12:31 AM
Thank you so much, i appreciate your kind feedback, and inspiration. Always a delight hearing your thoughts on my work . Grateful
Parker Avatar
August 23, 2023 at 11:56 AM
sometimes dear poet the sun needs to free itself from the universe that feeds on its light and find another place, another space to rest in a peaceful purpose of self-imposed reflection...beautiful creative writing dear poet...
Empress Avatar
August 23, 2023 at 11:18 PM
You’re very metaphorical and you really understood my poem perfectly thank you so much for your comment and yes sometimes that is the best for the sun
Mcintosh Avatar
August 22, 2023 at 3:14 AM
Incredible writing. I just love it. God bless you always, Love, Gina
Empress Avatar
August 24, 2023 at 3:06 AM
Thank you always
Andresen Avatar
August 22, 2023 at 1:31 AM
- Wow... you have taken this poem to heaven and earth through human deep feelings... using a great variety of metaphors... excellent, Ink :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
Empress Avatar
August 24, 2023 at 3:06 AM
Thank you so much , i appreciate your support , hugs
Sharma  Avatar
August 22, 2023 at 12:41 AM
My goshh, this is such a magnificent, marvelous and bewitching piece that oozes dark emotions from every crack and void depicted in heart's chambers.. What a striking thought of sun needing a saviour, for its burnt and scorched by its own flames, radiating light & life, yet destroying itself.. When the world revolves in gloomy ambience, devoured by imposters, evils and melancholy.. At that time the sun too, needs to be revived.. To fight the bloodstones coming from seemingly 'heavens'..
Empress Avatar
August 24, 2023 at 3:06 AM
Thank you always for sprinkling such golden reviews on my poems. Its every poets and writers dream to get feedback like yours, that makes us feel seen, grateful
Sharma  Avatar
August 22, 2023 at 12:42 AM
Ahh, I could praise this piece all day! The metaphors, imagery, vivid vocabulary, alliteration and perfect flow of this piece has truly made me go wow! Such a surreal and spellbinding one, with poignant depth and heart-aching vulnerability.. That ending is too beautiful and heartfelt ~ sending you so much love-
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