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For Tania Kitchin's  the 'Wind, Rain, Snow, Thunder or Sun in 8-12 Lines ' Poetry Contest

I am Sun; at the center of all, I’m your biggest star.
Night comes, and though I’m still around, my light you cannot see,
and whether you see me rise or fall depends on where you are.
I warn you: never look too long directly up at me.

When you see me sunny side up, I’ll be looking down
beaming at you, but I adore those lying on the ground,
bare skin showing. They worship me; their skin I may turn brown,
but if the sky is overcast, take care and know I’m still around.

Light and heat I gift you, but you’ll sweat the more I shine.
By many names I have gone by, for a King am I.
The ancients worshiped  me. Some would make for me a shrine.
A giant in five billion years, I’ll scorch your earth and die.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



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Date: 4/12/2024 1:34:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Andrea. Your poem is so well constructed with wonderful images of "old Sol!" Keep shining like your sun, my friend! Blessings to you and hugs!
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Date: 4/7/2024 9:48:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Sun" personification write. Have a blessed day writing away...........
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Date: 4/5/2024 4:46:00 PM
Andrea, a great personification poem, the sun can be delightful and destructive, congratulations on your winning placement.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 4/5/2024 11:50:00 PM
Thanks so much, Tanya
Date: 3/29/2024 11:48:00 AM
Andrea, another wonderful poem indeed. It's fun and points out that we sometimes need shade. You are right....the sun will gradually increase in intensity and make life here impossible. We won't be here when that happens.
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Date: 3/26/2024 4:58:00 AM
This is so well done Andrea. You captured the essence of the sun.
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Date: 3/25/2024 3:34:00 PM
Beautiful personification of the sun- interesting thoughts
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Date: 3/25/2024 9:40:00 AM
Great personification poem. Soon we will have a blazing sun. Sunblocks will have to be bought.
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Date: 3/25/2024 3:12:00 AM
Lovely xx
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/25/2024 8:03:00 AM
Thanks, Mandy
Date: 3/24/2024 11:21:00 AM
Nice personification of sun. Well written.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/25/2024 8:03:00 AM
Thanks, Jay
Date: 3/24/2024 9:37:00 AM
I love this!!! I love a sun poem, and youv described sun so well in this personification, made me smile when i read “ When you see me sunny side up, I’ll be looking down beaming at you, but I adore those lying on the ground, bare skin showing. They worship me; their skin I may turn brown,“ ah i bet mr sun does love that huh. Youv covered all the aspects of sun! And how creative and seamless is your poem. Youv realy nailed it! A fave it is for me
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Date: 3/24/2024 8:05:00 AM
This was very realistic and lovely. I appreciate the love-hate relationship I have with the sun. "Light and heat I gift you, but you’ll sweat the more I shine." It burns and soothes us. Nice one Andrea.
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Date: 3/24/2024 7:53:00 AM
You personify so well... you described the element of being the sun very well..
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/25/2024 8:02:00 AM
Thanks, S O
Date: 3/24/2024 1:20:00 AM
This is a great personification of the sun with all its qualities dear Andrea. But in contrast to its goodness, also the power and damage that it can cause. The last stanza is powerful and the last line in particular is very daunting. A true portrayal of the sun personified. Enjoyed the reflection your poem has given. Good luck in the contest - haven’t seen many sun poems yet. :):) xx
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/24/2024 8:21:00 PM
Thanks, Christina.
Date: 3/24/2024 12:46:00 AM
Dear Andrea,a lovely pome.My best wishes in the contest. Andrea Blessing.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/24/2024 8:18:00 PM
Thanks, Mulu. Sorry I have not soupmailed you. I am on this phone a lot this weekend and unable to copy and paste, but I want to soupmail you soon!
Date: 3/23/2024 11:12:00 PM
I can feel the warmth in your verse Andrea, sad to think that one day it will die. Earth would become uninhabitable. Good luck in the contest. Tom
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/24/2024 8:17:00 PM
Thanks, Tom
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