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Summer Rain Storm

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Billowing nimbus writhe in charcoal sky, zephyr winds whisk waves over briny seas. I watch, observing clouds hastening by on showery Summer days such as these, as crystal raindrops soak my thin chemise. I seek shelter 'neath a swaying date palm, my wet hair; cobras, dancing in the breeze. Then the rain abated; the sea grew calm, sweet petrichor rising, its scent a soothing balm. SUMMER RAIN STORM(2) Spencerian Stanza Poetry Contest Sponsored By Dale Gregory Cozart n/a in contest judged 7/9/18 Submitted to poem na'd in a July contest Sponsored by Dear Heart a.k.a broken wings ABABBCBCC checked with rhymezone and how many syllables 6/15/18

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Constance La France

Date: 7/29/2018 5:08:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this lovely poem, well done !

Jan Allison
Date: 7/29/2018 5:10:00 PM

Thanks so much Constance it was entered in a premiere contest so I appreciate that places were limited. So happy you like it well enough to give a first place:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Gentry

Date: 7/28/2018 1:46:00 PM

Congratulations on your #1 win. Your imagery isalways remarkable. :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/28/2018 1:48:00 PM

Thanks so much Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 7/27/2018 4:44:00 PM

Congratulations on your awesome win. I enjoyed reading this well written poem with great imagery. Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 7/28/2018 2:33:00 AM

Thanks Eve, its lovely to get a second chance especially with poems that were entered into a premiere contest, I enter fewer and fewer these days but may still write inspired by the theme:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 7/27/2018 6:00:00 AM

This lovely piece finally gets the attention and honor it deserves. Beautifully choreographed poetry, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/27/2018 6:10:00 AM

Thanks Lin, I enter fewer and fewer contests especially the premiere ones, am so glad I got placed in the second chance contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/21/2018 12:41:00 AM

Excellent Jan! Your choice of words to convey imagery in this piece is just outstanding! Surreal! xxoo : )

Jan Allison
Date: 7/9/2018 11:32:00 AM

thanks Connie, sorry I missed replying to your comment sooner. Got the dreaded n/a but hey so its a premiere contest and there are few winners. :-) hugs jan xx

Rob Carmack

Date: 6/19/2018 7:25:00 PM

I agree with Nina concerning the 'cobras' imagery. It really grabs the reader. Also, 'chemise' was a new word for me. Good luck in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2018 2:59:00 AM

Thanks so much Rob:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/18/2018 1:24:00 AM

- Excellent, impressive, really well done Jan - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/18/2018 1:39:00 AM

Thanks so much Anne-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 6/16/2018 3:24:00 PM

Can imagine standing on the beach and seeing the rain soak the hair. So descriptive. Awesome. love phyl

Jan Allison
Date: 6/16/2018 11:47:00 PM

Thanks Phyl:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 6/16/2018 7:20:00 AM

Jan, this is absolutely amazing

Jan Allison
Date: 6/16/2018 7:23:00 AM

aww thanks so much Constance I wanted to try and use colour and enjambment - since I joined I have learned an awful lot thanks to some wonderful people on soup:-) hugs jan xx

Lyric Man

Date: 6/16/2018 5:32:00 AM

Jan, you've skillfully and beautifully written about one of my favorite things about summer.. a summer storm!!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/16/2018 6:21:00 AM

Thanks so much for dropping by Chance:-) hugs Jan xx

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/16/2018 3:16:00 AM

Wow, Jan, i thought i was reading 'Wordsworth' so many classic lines in there, in fact looking out of my window, your poem, mirrors the scene before me.. Truly a thing of beauty!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/16/2018 3:22:00 AM

aww thanks Harry that is praise indeed, you are just too kind... and we too have much needed summer rain today and had Storm Hector a few days back - no rain then just very high winds:-) hugs Jan xx

Al Juman

Date: 6/16/2018 2:35:00 AM

You are like the dictonary my friend

Jan Allison
Date: 6/16/2018 3:20:00 AM

Thanks Al, I've learned so so many new words like petrichor and zephyr since joining soup in 2014:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 6/15/2018 7:03:00 PM

Great descriptive rhyming write, Jan, luck in the contest..Hugs Eve ~' *

Jan Allison
Date: 6/16/2018 3:17:00 AM

Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Mick Talbot

Date: 6/15/2018 6:31:00 PM

A vision of a summer rainstorm if you please, 'cobras dancing in a breeze' a fantastic wet hair metaphor indeed. A winning Spencerian stanza for me! Good luck Jan, hugs Mick

Jan Allison
Date: 6/16/2018 3:14:00 AM

Thanks Mick, I do like that line too:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner

Date: 6/15/2018 5:44:00 PM

Somebody's muse is really feeling colorful and descriptive. This is excellent poetry, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/16/2018 3:14:00 AM

Thanks DT I hope that Dale likes the poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/15/2018 10:12:00 AM

Written well Jan, nothing like a good storm to freshen up the land. (hopefully when we're asleep) Good luck. Tom.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/15/2018 12:10:00 PM

We are in desperate need of rain at the moment Tom I have to use about 20 watering can fulls to do my pots and flowers and strawberries:-) hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/15/2018 9:03:00 AM

You did this so well. Hugs Rick.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/15/2018 12:08:00 PM

Thanks Rick, we had a storm only on Wednesday no rain just winds but it inspired the poem:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 6/15/2018 8:53:00 AM

What fantastic imagery you've created, Jan. I could almost hear the wind blowing, feel the rain soaking through to my skin. The build-up is great and then you included the aftermath. I can breathe in the sweet aroma of plumeria on your island. This one is exceptional.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/15/2018 12:06:00 PM

Oh wow Lin I am blown away by your comment, thank you so so much:-) hugs jan xx

Heidi Sands

Date: 6/15/2018 8:30:00 AM

One of your best Jan! Good luck in the contest :)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/15/2018 12:05:00 PM

Thanks so much Heidi:-) hugs Jan xx