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Summer Rain

summer rain drums on
window panes, of such magic 
vegetables grow


It is my understanding that this was not considered for a "Traditional Haiku" contest because the first line is Capitalized and and likely also because there is a comma after 'panes'. I think this is silly but such, I'm told, are the rules of "Traditional Haiku"

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Freddie Robinson Jr.

November 14, 2016 at 3:56 PM

I really liked your haiku poem, Dave. I'm not a stickler for the rules, but hey, I don't run this outfit. I love summer rain. Also, your poem title is the same title of a gorgeous jazz vocal song by the Jazzmasters. It is on "Jazzmasters 2." Stay blessed and less stressed, brother. Love and joy to you.

D.W. Rodgers

December 18, 2016 at 7:45 PM

Thanks Freddie, with full on winter, summer seems far behind.

Andrea Dietrich

July 19, 2015 at 4:22 PM

not just traditional, but modern too, Dave (referring to your note). Anyway, most of us are posting things that are not even haiku anyway and getting away with it around here! Sometimes with certain contests, things are just stricter.

Constance La France

July 4, 2015 at 5:06 PM

Dave, I love this haiku, my haiku, butterfly did not place because my last line was tragedy and not beauty and I was told they can only be beauty, for me it was excellent

D.W. Rodgers

July 7, 2015 at 1:31 PM

Thanks BK, it would seem I'm not the only one who floundered on Traditional shores. I thought your poem and the butterfly/fairy were beautiful

Andrea Dietrich

July 4, 2015 at 9:34 AM

It's too bad, but that is how haiku have to be in order to get published in a good magazine I learned it the hard way and it's why I let people know those rules when I host contests of this form. Actually, if you had left out the music part (not necessary, since you already mentioned the phrase "drums on"), this to me would have been the perfect haiku!

D.W. Rodgers

July 7, 2015 at 1:26 PM

Thanks Andea, point taken, I'll have to think about music and redundancy

Cona Adams

July 3, 2015 at 8:36 AM

Most Americans are confused about "Traditional Haiku" which is taught to all students in our schools. The Haiku is a Japanese poetry form. In the Japanese language, there are no syllables, there are only sounds. We are miss-directing our students when we tell them the form requires 17 syllables. Actually, you may use any number of syllables, "up to" 17. It is true, however, that no punctuation is part of the rules. But I like your Haiku. Love the thought. Sometimes, it's OK to break the rules.

D.W. Rodgers

July 3, 2015 at 8:56 PM

Cona, Thanks for both your insight on Haiku and liking the thought, although given the length perhaps more of a notion that came on a rainy day than a thought.

Casarah Nance

June 28, 2015 at 3:44 PM

Nicely done, the rain is playing my song :)

D.W. Rodgers

June 28, 2015 at 9:46 PM

Thanks Casarah

Anne-Lise Andresen

June 28, 2015 at 12:30 PM

- It sounds like you're sitting in my living room .... (it rains on my window) - A great haiku, Dave ! - // Anne-Lise :)

D.W. Rodgers

June 28, 2015 at 1:07 PM

HI Anne Lise, Thanks, yes this rain seems widespread. At times, its nice to relax on the dry side of the window and let it be.

Robert Heemstra

June 28, 2015 at 11:19 AM

Yes indeed there's nothing like the sound of the rain but when there's lightning and thunder is there its no longer a swimmer's delight. Nice write...

D.W. Rodgers

June 28, 2015 at 1:02 PM

Thanks Robert, too true, this is more a steady all day rain, now on day 2. In German they have a great word for it, landregen.

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