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Sue's Excess Weight Didn'T Look Great

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Sue was putting on weight at an alarming rate Was it down to fate… or too much food on her plate! She got asked by a mate when was her due date But Sue’s monthly was not late, at her friend Sue got quite irate! Her friend’s comment made Sue instigate a course on how to roller skate. Her weight gain Sue did negate and she’s slimmed down and looking great! 10-19-17

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/20/2017 7:41:00 PM

Awesome, now she can skate AND lose weight!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/21/2017 3:12:00 AM

LOL, just a fun poem :-) I was inspired by the monorhyme contest and wrote 3 poems in the end... maybe reading the rules properly in the first place would have helped lol. I love the pic and the woman shooting the weight display lol:-)hugs jan xx

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 10/20/2017 4:06:00 PM

Like it funny Jan Congratulations I see you made the best 100 poet's list. Not bad hey

Christopher Flaherty
Date: 10/20/2017 7:46:00 PM

Always wonder what it takes to get noticed or why. Taste or beauty is in the eye of the beholder But still nice to be appreciated all the same

Jan Allison
Date: 10/20/2017 4:27:00 PM

Thanks Christopher, I take no notice of the lists on soup they can be so easily manipulated - its more to do with popularity than quality of work and there are many more deserving poets who should be on them but they are not particularly active on the site-( hugs jan xx

John Gondolf

Date: 10/20/2017 11:04:00 AM

This is great Jan, thanks for the laugh. Back when I was much younger and not so wise I made that mistake; I don't know who was more embarrassed the woman or me! I will NEVER make that mistake again...

Jan Allison
Date: 10/20/2017 12:18:00 PM

You wouldn't be the first person to make the mistake John... and although it is embarrassing it may make the lady think she needs to do something about it hugs Jan xx

Duke Beaufort

Date: 10/19/2017 7:07:00 PM

Very cute Jan. I read it to my wife, and she said, "it is really cute." So, you have brought a smile to our faces. Thanks for everything!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2017 7:14:00 PM

Your current run of Trump poems make me smile - he makes such great fodder for us Duke!:-) hugs jan xx

Janis Thompson

Date: 10/19/2017 5:29:00 PM

The second verse can really happen. I asked that of a young lady about a year ago who was my doctor. Never was I so embarrassed. Cleverly done monorhyme.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2017 5:40:00 PM

Thanks for your comment Janis I can imagine how embarrassing is is for both parties!:-( hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/19/2017 12:32:00 PM

Hi Jan, I really enjoyed this entertaining write. I love the monorhyme form as well. Good ending. I better go get some skates lol:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2017 1:49:00 PM

You will judge it one day my friend :-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.
Date: 10/19/2017 1:31:00 PM

I'm glad my contest inspired you to write three monorhymes. Too bad I can't judge the anytime soon. But you never know:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2017 12:55:00 PM

THANKS Alexis - I was inspired by your contest and wrote 3 monorhymes:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 10/19/2017 11:49:00 AM

I think her choice was really fate...let's hope no more that she'll inflate...cuz I'm taking her dancing Friday night and can't wait to see her gyrate

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2017 12:15:00 PM

LOL Tim:-) we now go dancing on a Tuesday night:-) hugs jan xx