Jan Allison Poet Monorhyme

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Sue's Excess Weight Didn'T Look Great

Sue was putting on weight
at an alarming rate
Was it down to fate…
or too much food on her plate!

She got asked by a mate
when was her due date
But Sue’s monthly was not late,
at her friend Sue got quite irate!

Her friend’s comment made Sue instigate
a course on how to roller skate.
Her weight gain Sue did negate
and she’s slimmed down and looking great!

10-19-17

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Andrea Dietrich October 20, 2017 at 7:41 PM Awesome, now she can skate AND lose weight!!! Jan Allison October 21, 2017 at 3:12 AM LOL, just a fun poem :-) I was inspired by the monorhyme contest and wrote 3 poems in the end... maybe reading the rules properly in the first place would have helped lol. I love the pic and the woman shooting the weight display lol:-)hugs jan xx

Christopher Flaherty October 20, 2017 at 4:06 PM Like it funny Jan Congratulations I see you made the best 100 poet's list. Not bad hey Christopher Flaherty October 20, 2017 at 7:46 PM Always wonder what it takes to get noticed or why. Taste or beauty is in the eye of the beholder But still nice to be appreciated all the same Jan Allison October 20, 2017 at 4:27 PM Thanks Christopher, I take no notice of the lists on soup they can be so easily manipulated - its more to do with popularity than quality of work and there are many more deserving poets who should be on them but they are not particularly active on the site-( hugs jan xx

John Gondolf October 20, 2017 at 11:04 AM This is great Jan, thanks for the laugh. Back when I was much younger and not so wise I made that mistake; I don't know who was more embarrassed the woman or me! I will NEVER make that mistake again... Jan Allison October 20, 2017 at 12:18 PM You wouldn't be the first person to make the mistake John... and although it is embarrassing it may make the lady think she needs to do something about it hugs Jan xx

Duke Beaufort October 19, 2017 at 7:07 PM Very cute Jan. I read it to my wife, and she said, "it is really cute." So, you have brought a smile to our faces. Thanks for everything!! Jan Allison October 19, 2017 at 7:14 PM Your current run of Trump poems make me smile - he makes such great fodder for us Duke!:-) hugs jan xx

Janis Medders Tobechi October 19, 2017 at 5:29 PM The second verse can really happen. I asked that of a young lady about a year ago who was my doctor. Never was I so embarrassed. Cleverly done monorhyme. Jan Allison October 19, 2017 at 5:40 PM Thanks for your comment Janis I can imagine how embarrassing is is for both parties!:-( hugs jan xx

Alexis Y. October 19, 2017 at 12:32 PM Hi Jan, I really enjoyed this entertaining write. I love the monorhyme form as well. Good ending. I better go get some skates lol:-) Alexis Jan Allison October 19, 2017 at 1:49 PM You will judge it one day my friend :-) hugs jan xx Alexis Y. October 19, 2017 at 1:31 PM I'm glad my contest inspired you to write three monorhymes. Too bad I can't judge the anytime soon. But you never know:-) Alexis Jan Allison October 19, 2017 at 12:55 PM THANKS Alexis - I was inspired by your contest and wrote 3 monorhymes:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith October 19, 2017 at 11:49 AM I think her choice was really fate...let's hope no more that she'll inflate...cuz I'm taking her dancing Friday night and can't wait to see her gyrate Jan Allison October 19, 2017 at 12:15 PM LOL Tim:-) we now go dancing on a Tuesday night:-) hugs jan xx