Suddenly

SUDDENLY Feeding time The picnic table is black with birds the main cluster but then as many disseminate inhabit branches wires fences flitting down when hunger dares Suddenly this winter day – remembering the movie “Suddenly Last Summer” – I am uncomfortably terribly aware The disjointed mass chorus of voices – in perpetual forte – are not quaint not convivial not joyous The clamor is born of desperation – each member I-am-the-one – Each with a single song constant eyes ruffled feathers and rapid pulse The ground squirrel ceases to be cute in scurrying in his sneaking in his thievery And I bite down on my pen Looking thoughtfully off Suddenly ill almost

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 2/9/2011 2:16:00 PM

PLease enter this fine write in my Free Verse Contest only 2 spots left GO! Light & Love

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/15/2011 1:34:00 PM

well, as you know by now, I saw your newest poem. That was a treat, Daver. Bye now. I better get off here soon. LUv, Andrea

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 1/12/2011 7:12:00 PM

Gotta love the birds, Daver...and those sneaky squirrels.:) I don't know what happened to the grey squirrels here? Now we have loads of black ones. One man across the river from us, feeds the birds, but had killed 7 or 9 squirrels. Like they were supposed have known they'd gone to a bird only place. Food is food to them. Now we have a feeder that is squirrel proof. The birds prefer the old one. Lucky squirrels.:) Best to you, Love, Mikki

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/11/2011 9:56:00 AM

Now Daver, you need to forgive the squirrels for stealing - survival instincts. But the way you describe the birds' clamor of "I-am-the-one" makes me realize man has much in common with our featuehred friends. Hope you lighten up before spring returns and can find joy in nature again. LOL Love you, Carolyn

Gert W. Knop

Date: 1/8/2011 7:51:00 AM

Your write is so pictureque! Enjoyed the read this dull winter evening! Snow is melting and it is cold and damp outside!...Take care!...Love, Gert

James Peranteau

Date: 1/8/2011 6:51:00 AM

Such a visual write Dave ! This is filled with heavy note of nature seen through an artist; as yourself ! Powerful write Sir ! much love, james

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/6/2011 1:59:00 PM

Yes, I could see you meant that too, what you told me about nature. It's all very much related. There are some great classic poems that address this same interesting theme as well, and the paradoxes of nature.

Lauren Reindel

Date: 1/5/2011 11:52:00 PM

i'm loving your format, it deffintily conveys the title "suddenly" and the imagery is very beautiful. favorite part " And I bite down on my pen Looking thoughtfully off" absolutely perfection. : )

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/5/2011 7:57:00 PM

Yes like Andrea commented Dave reminds me of the Birds by Alfred Hitchcock and that is a good thing as he was the master of the macabre and suspense.. quite enjoyable piece my friend.. wishing u a wonderful 2011 ...with luv..

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/5/2011 5:42:00 PM

Not sure what this one is about..Wondering is it about the birds that fell from the sky in masses?..Sara

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/5/2011 4:11:00 PM

oh, it grows menacing like The Birds movie or that movie I saw a few years ago, dang I fogot the name of it, but all nature goes nuts. This is wonderful stuff, Daver. thanks for giving us a new poem today! and about Dale, I was 8 and he was 12 when Mom married his dad. He was killed by a drunk driver just before graduating law school. He would have loved you! andrea

Date: 1/5/2011 1:49:00 PM

I like the use spacing to add power to your words--a style that is truly yours. Gives your writing and interesting quality. Thank you for sharing this poem with us and for your kind words on mine. Karen