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Sudden Storm

The storm blasted its way across near horizon Like a fleeting loss of Mother Nature’s temper-- Seething anger, blowing, and drumming ahead Shouting to the trees “Get out of my way!” and Sending loose flotsam before it to blow about With no regard for torn shingles or fresh, clean Clothes pinned to that long thin line stretched Between two crosses of piping standing rigid. The storm strode across the flowering meadow Like the entrepreneur who owns everything and Preens disarmingly confident in his arrogance-- Leaving broken stems of royal purple in its wake Applauding its success while breaking their backs With flashes of flexing strobes and sudden gusts. THIRD PLACE WINNER August 1, 2021 entered "Imagism" poetry contest sponsored by Emile Pinet

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/4/2021 9:07:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A wonderful write. I love your line, "Shouting to the trees “Get out of my way!” I can hear the storm/Mother Nature, saying this to the trees. Have a blessed day/weekend......................

L Milton Hankins
Date: 9/4/2021 9:22:00 AM

Thank you so much for your thoughtful comment, Paula. I appreciate your read.

Edward Ibeh

Date: 9/1/2021 8:46:00 AM

A marvelous poem with such vivid imagery! Congratulations on your win, Milt:-)

L Milton Hankins
Date: 9/1/2021 9:05:00 AM

Thank you so much, Edward. Your congratulations means a lot to me.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 9/1/2021 8:10:00 AM

Milton, a big CONGRATS on your well-deserved win! Expressive use of figurative language! Janice

L Milton Hankins
Date: 9/1/2021 9:06:00 AM

Janice, I always enjoy hearing from you. Thanks for your congratulatory note.

Emile Pinet

Date: 9/1/2021 8:08:00 AM

Congratulations Milt, your poem came in "Thrid" in my contest. Very well done, it was a pleasure to read, my friend, Emile.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 9/1/2021 9:07:00 AM

Thank you, Emile. I'm glad you found it worthy. I always enjoy your contests, no matter what the placement. Hope you have a fine Labor Day weekend.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 8/7/2021 11:02:00 AM

This is perfectly written. Especially this part "The storm strode across the flowering meadow Like the entrepreneur who owns everything" Wow!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 8/7/2021 4:16:00 PM

Thanks, Caren. Your affirmation means a lot to me. I wasn't sure about that line, so, I guess it worked!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 8/1/2021 9:36:00 PM

Storm and Stormy: Could be a raging bull of a boss; captain of a ship; coach of a sports team; or, sadly, head of a country (even a democracy,... more sadly). Vivid write, Milt. Felt like I was right in the path of this storm, and that I might have had my spine snapped like a thin branch of a tender sapling. Kudos, Gershon

L Milton Hankins
Date: 8/2/2021 8:59:00 AM

Hey thanks, Gershon. I really appreciate the time you took to pen such a neat response to my poem. I kind of like this one myself.