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Succumbing To Time


Derelict now cold
Mossed stones in sporadic spill
Ageing arms out spread
They, competing for the light
Sadly, both succumb to time




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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/29/2015 10:25:00 PM

James, Thank you for the sweet reply to my comment. Love LINDA

Paul Callus

Date: 3/24/2015 12:26:00 PM

Sadly, everything has to succumb to time, but hopefully this fine poem will last long! Congrats on a fine win, James. #7 // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/22/2015 1:58:00 PM

JAMES, Congratulations on your awesome TANKA 2 win Always & Forever <3 Luv ~LINDA~

James Fraser
Date: 3/23/2015 3:18:00 PM

Thank you Linda, always and forever back // hugs, James :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/21/2015 9:39:00 PM

James this was beautiful imagery. I did not score it higher because I was not sure who the arms belonged to: a tree or a person? If a tree, limbs would have fit so nicely there!! Also, I don't want to see capitalized lines in my contest entries. Anyway, the message here is GREAT. Congrats in my contest.

James Fraser
Date: 3/22/2015 7:07:00 AM

Hiya Andrea, no worries. It's simply nice for ones poem to be read, anything more is a bonus. Wishing you a lovely Sunday :) :)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/17/2015 12:04:00 PM

Dear James, we all succumb to time. I'll step into the shadows so as not to "compete for the light." Let the youth have their day! Excellent tanka and it is a fine entry for the "derelict" contest. Always wishing success and happiness for my old friend. Love, Carolyn

James Fraser
Date: 3/18/2015 5:54:00 PM

Hiya Carolyn, I didn't know there was a contest until Jan mentioned it in her comment, so I thought, why not, nothing to lose. Thank you for your kind words, hugs//James :) :)