Gary Bateman Poet Free verse

Notes About The Poem

Author's Notes: The "Striking Deeply a Painful Reminder" is a  Free Verse write that Liam McDaid and I closely collaborated on during October. This poem was previously first posted on Poetry Soup by Liam on October 25th. This one is a continuation of the collection of similar dark-theme poems we previously posted during October in honor of Halloween 2015. If you haven't read this one yet, here's a second chance to do it with my posting of this quite tragic and forbidding poem whose Protagonist at the end sees and experiences his very soul being consumed in the flames of Hellfire!! A rather chilling ending indeed for this dark and expressive Halloween poem. (Gary Bateman - October 29, 2015) (Free Verse)

Categories: dark, evil, fantasy, halloween, horror, myth, and scary.

Striking Deeply a Painful Reminder

Striking Deeply a Painful Reminder 

Striking deeply a painful reminder comes of you now.
Salt falls inside my open wound bringing untold pain.
My soul has one choice to make amidst all this pain,
Telling me the considered direction I must take now. 

Washed through a dirty ocean lining all foamed up,
We are frustrated with ourselves to no end today,
As we stand at the crossroads of our broken lives 
Asking sad, difficult questions and feeling all alone. 

Begging the wrong side for forgiveness is no fun as
We answer while looking upon two sides of a story; 
And a wounding confession of lights promises only
A flash darkness blinding out of a tragic haunted mist. 

Warm dawning radiant colors say love to us both now,
As they elicit a soothing and gentle compassion of hope;
Yet real tenderness is nothing but an illusion as deep pain
Lives inside the shadows without any remorse or apology.

Invading poison of a snake bite brings such sweet love, 
As your alter ego robs me of all my dignity and grace. 
I listen now to the stark tonal sounds of the seagulls, 
As they mix their cries over the ocean dark and deep.  

Kissing salted waves filled with the care of true angels, 
I cast now cruelly—bitter stones in the Garden of Eden,
While touching an apple once bitten never to shy away.
It’s funny how one can see such a tragedy in the daylight.  

Sacrifice a dove dancing within the light now turning dark; 
Behind the curtains a grotesque, ghastly face appears now
As the double side of your coin is exposed for all to see— 
And when flipped, the truth opens its book quite readily. 

Dropping down a snake crawls upon its soft underbelly, 
And behind the scenes people find this image repulsive,  
Since it portrays how a poisonous viper strikes fatally as
His very mask falls away for all to see his diabolical grin. 

Forbidden is the soul of who you are and want now to be; 
A sweet-talking deceiver I know too well for my own taste; 
One who really hides behind a false face but revels in his 
Deception as the dark demons mask their fear and cowardice.
 
Dusk now blends into the night as death comes to life;
I realize now the hellish intent of Lucifer’s own demon
Who stares intently at me with his blackest of eyes—
I see my soul consumed now in the flames of Hellfire!

In my final strength and emotion, I drop to my knees:
Almighty God in Heaven—Save me now . . . Amen!

Gary Bateman and Liam McDaid – A Collaborated Poem
Copyright © All Rights Reserved – October 25, 2015 
(Free Verse)

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Dorian Petersen Potter October 31, 2015 at 2:31 PM Hi Gary n' Liam!Wow!Wow!This is a very deep,outstanding, amazing and very intense,dark Halloween poem that you've painted here my dearest friends.Just incredible!So very beautifully written and so sad, dark and evil!It gives me the shivers just to read it.A perfect Halloween poem!So full of mystery.Just awesome!A masterpiece.Excellent imagery!Great collaboration!Well done!Your pens are truly mighty golden!A 7 + ++ to each!A Fav!And very Happy Halloween to you both!BOO! BOO!:))Wishing you a very lovely weekend!In His light! God bless you always!:)Love n' hugs!xoxox D.^O^ Gary Bateman October 31, 2015 at 2:42 PM Hello Dear One "D" -- BOO!! BOO!! and HAPPY HALLOWEEN TO YOU!! Thanks for your Top Rating here and for the FAV and for you most wonderful comments. Liam and I are pleased that you liked this dark write for Halloween. Again, best holiday wishes and best greetings from Ingrid and me!! Cheers and Best, Gary (BOO!!!)

Liam Mcdaid October 31, 2015 at 11:20 AM also thank you laura and silent one for the heartfelt beautiful comments wishing you both a lovely joyous week

Liam Mcdaid October 31, 2015 at 11:16 AM gary this just blew me away writing this with you pal power to your pen as always sings wishing you both a wonderful week Gary Bateman October 31, 2015 at 1:31 PM Yes, I agree Liam Mate!! This one did turn out very well. Enjoyed the co-write effort with you -- as always. Cheers and Best, Gary

Laura Breidenthal October 29, 2015 at 6:41 PM I am absorbing this write, Gary....such immense emotion here....strange imagery, yet delightful to the senses..will be returning to this powerful piece...excellent as always Gary! Always, Laura Gary Bateman October 30, 2015 at 2:00 PM Hello Laura!! Thanks so much!! Liam and I did a few other collaborations during Sept-Oct. "Blood Red Moon" is one we did that I believe we got Poem of the Week for. Another one is "Halloween's Evil Visage Cometh," on Oct 1st, which was a Poem of the Day selection. (They and others we've done are really excellent writes, with or without, the POTD/POTW distinctions.) These new poems will be in my second book which is under development now, and will include short stories too!! (I'm glad to hear that you're enjoying my first book. I hope I've done justice to all of the poems in the book!! Happy Halloween!! Cheers and Best, Gary Laura Breidenthal October 29, 2015 at 6:43 PM My apologies, and Liam McDaid as well! Very awesome collaboration indeed. ~Laura