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Striking Deeply a Painful Reminder

Striking Deeply a Painful Reminder Striking deeply a painful reminder comes of you now. Salt falls inside my open wound bringing untold pain. My soul has one choice to make amidst all this pain, Telling me the considered direction I must take now. Washed through a dirty ocean lining all foamed up, We are frustrated with ourselves to no end today, As we stand at the crossroads of our broken lives Asking sad, difficult questions and feeling all alone. Begging the wrong side for forgiveness is no fun as We answer while looking upon two sides of a story; And a wounding confession of lights promises only A flash darkness blinding out of a tragic haunted mist. Warm dawning radiant colors say love to us both now, As they elicit a soothing and gentle compassion of hope; Yet real tenderness is nothing but an illusion as deep pain Lives inside the shadows without any remorse or apology. Invading poison of a snake bite brings such sweet love, As your alter ego robs me of all my dignity and grace. I listen now to the stark tonal sounds of the seagulls, As they mix their cries over the ocean dark and deep. Kissing salted waves filled with the care of true angels, I cast now cruelly—bitter stones in the Garden of Eden, While touching an apple once bitten never to shy away. It’s funny how one can see such a tragedy in the daylight. Sacrifice a dove dancing within the light now turning dark; Behind the curtains a grotesque, ghastly face appears now As the double side of your coin is exposed for all to see— And when flipped, the truth opens its book quite readily. Dropping down a snake crawls upon its soft underbelly, And behind the scenes people find this image repulsive, Since it portrays how a poisonous viper strikes fatally as His very mask falls away for all to see his diabolical grin. Forbidden is the soul of who you are and want now to be; A sweet-talking deceiver I know too well for my own taste; One who really hides behind a false face but revels in his Deception as the dark demons mask their fear and cowardice. Dusk now blends into the night as death comes to life; I realize now the hellish intent of Lucifer’s own demon Who stares intently at me with his blackest of eyes— I see my soul consumed now in the flames of Hellfire! In my final strength and emotion, I drop to my knees: Almighty God in Heaven—Save me now . . . Amen! Gary Bateman and Liam McDaid – A Collaborated Poem Copyright © All Rights Reserved – October 25, 2015 (Free Verse)

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Date: 10/27/2015 7:36:00 AM
Liam, your pen is glowing gold with this gem!!! I want to congratulate you and Anne Lise for having really lovely collabs.. =`) keep it up!~Olive Eloisa
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Date: 10/27/2015 6:23:00 AM
Hello Liam Mate!! Thanks for getting this one posted on October 25th. This one is an extraordinarily powerful write with a most definite message. (I'm very proud of the result of our co-write here!!) Cheers and Best, Gary
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Date: 10/26/2015 8:42:00 AM
- My back is not "good" I should... but can not "drop to my knees" after reading this magnificent poem !!! - - Bravo my friends !!!!!! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/25/2015 6:13:00 PM
Hi Liam n' Gary!Wow!Wow!This is a very deep,outstanding, amazing and very intense,dark Halloween poem that you've painted here my dearest friends.Just incredible!So very beautifully written and so sad, dark and evil!It gives me the shivers just to read it.A perfect Halloween poem!So full of mystery.Just awesome!A masterpiece.Excellent imagery!Great collaboration!Well done!Your pens are truly mighty golden!A 7 + ++ to each!A Fav!And very Happy Halloween to you both!BOO! BOO!:))Wishing you a very lovely week!In His light! God bless you always!:)Love n' hugs!xoxox D.^O^
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