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written for the artwork " strayed sheep" " our english coasts painting" by William Holman Hunt Hosted by Dilly Dally.

I am the unseen, resting amongst invisible butterflies, waning amidst wildflower wishes~ facing watercolor breezes, drifting between the sun and the sea, where the wind collaborates with the salt and skin of waves, like forbidden lovers engrossed in euphoric zest… I sing in silence with sanctified verses, where zephyrs breathe amongst paralyzed procrastinators, following a flock of clichés, amidst the slippery slope of rocky edges, veiling ripples of rusted rings~ that ache to caress the blushing softness of crawling clouds in the musky air, as gilded blades of evergreen greed feed the fleece of fragility with emptiness, in the landscape of loneliness~ influencing the clueless to please the blind stones of bitter lies, like chameleons of ephemeral mist, caught in coated curls of jealousy. Let me be the heartbeat guiding the rising rays of lustrous gold. I am both the strayed and the shepherd, crafting a vessel of virtue~ with floating grace beneath Noah’s Ark, to steer the spirit of sleepless sheep, placing trust in ticking terrains… for I see beyond the silken sins, that lured you to the fickleness of flora, while oblivious to the crestfallen thorns, intoxicating your conscience, stealing the light of sun-stroked innocence…

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Date: 12/21/2024 4:12:00 AM
"Amidst the slippery slope of rocky edges, I am both the strayed and the shepherd, crafting a vessel of virtue~" I like to put these two separate lines as a combined stanza doing great justice to the painting. What a wonderful interpretation. This shows the duel fate of man. We are at once the victim and the victor. I am spell bound by the depth of your metaphors. All through the poem, we see such abysmal depth of thoughts. Every time, how can you cleave such ideas to form into a cohesive stream of thoughts, I keep wondering. Dear Empress, Congratulations on your top win! Sorry for the late response. With Christmas, as my children are at home, I am a little busy.
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Date: 12/20/2024 7:50:00 PM
Beautiful ass usual. Congratulations!
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Date: 12/20/2024 2:24:00 PM
The opening stanza to this is just stunning Ink - beautiful imagery also in "oblivious to crestfallen thorns" - no one else in the world could create such lines from looking at this painting - it's quite magical how you bring these expressions to life. Congratulations on your placement x
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Date: 12/21/2024 11:43:00 AM
I had to zoom in the artwork, to interpret it. Thank you so much for my placement in your contest and also for your kind comment dear DD, i am grateful truly. Was a bit nerve wrecking doing this one. Sending you light always
Date: 12/20/2024 11:28:00 AM
- The essence of beauty, which gives you a sense of connection to nature... love it, Ink :) - Congratulations on your win in the contest :) - Merry Christmas :) - hugs
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Date: 12/20/2024 11:00:00 AM
Nice poem, Ink. I especially like the first lines opening each of the three stanzas.
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Date: 12/19/2024 4:17:00 PM
This is very deep. It's the type of poem I think Rob would have liked it in his contest we were discussing. I think nobody has taken your approach with this contest. So many interesting metaphors, Ink!
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Date: 12/18/2024 4:00:00 PM
"I am both the strayed and the shepherd..." Nice commentary on the duality of humanity, personified in a black sheep. We have our voices and virtues but we are what we are. Hey nice take on the theme Inky
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Date: 12/18/2024 6:57:00 AM
"I am the unseen,' indeed, especially if depending on physical senses alone -- "I am both the strayed and the shepherd," -- Profound truth! "I see beyond the silken sins, that lured you to the fickleness of flora, while oblivious to the crestfallen thorns, intoxicating your conscience, stealing the light of sun-stroked innocence…" -- if only to know how much we see and seem is of our own creating and obvious manipulation. Brilliant poetry!
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Date: 12/18/2024 4:29:00 AM
this is very impressive, the images and references until the ending convey strong emotions , absolutely brilliant dear poet enjoyed
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Date: 12/18/2024 1:40:00 AM
Oh my dear Ink, this poem is absolutely glorious and beautiful in its very essence! The idea of one becoming the very core, the unseen yet the most crucial, whistling away as the air, which guides those gleaming sunrays of dusk and dawn to fall upon the blushing florets... and leading the lost to their home... ahh, you absolutely enchanted my heart with this one and the depth your words breathe in! I can't help but swoon over your extraordinary opening and ending lines.. just immaculate they are.. you've really interpreted the picture prompt on a whole new level!! "drifting between the sun and the sea, where the wind collaborates with the salt and skin of waves" My goodness, absolutely ethereal and cosmically beautiful!! "following a flock of clichés, amidst the slippery slope of rocky edges, veiling ripples of rusted rings" Your diction there is absolutely phenomenal
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Date: 12/18/2024 2:17:00 AM
Wow you really do understand my poems, you got it! Its so impressive that a young girl like you can understand deep metaphors and truth woven better than many . You are truly a soulful poet and reader. Thank you so much for leaving this thoughtful comment im so grateful
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Date: 12/18/2024 1:50:00 AM
"guiding the rising rays of lustrous gold. I am both the strayed and the shepherd, crafting a vessel of virtue~ with floating grace beneath Noah’s Ark," I just can't help but be in awe of these lines as perhaps, they are my most favorite here, altho everything about this is my favorite!! The flow and language, brilliant ~ best wishes to you for the contest! Sending love and light always, my fairy goddess, this is a faveee
Date: 12/17/2024 7:17:00 PM
Love your interpretation of the picture IE, there's always light at the end of the tunnel, we must never give up on hope. Best of luck in the contest. Tom
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Date: 12/17/2024 6:15:00 PM
Breathtaking - it should be a winner, I love "to steer the spirit of sleepless sheep, placing trust in ticking terrains…"
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Date: 12/17/2024 2:13:00 PM
This is really good Ink. From the opening line "I am the unseen, resting amongst invisible butterflies" which portrays feeling alone in an ever expanding universe so beautifully. To "feed the fleece of fragility with emptiness,in the landscape of loneliness~'" which expresses the feelings of depression ao eloquently. This is a very well written piece.
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Date: 12/17/2024 1:05:00 PM
Your poems are so restful. l actually wish they could be recorded to be listened to on spoken tapes. Do you put any of your work on youtube?
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Date: 12/18/2024 2:44:00 AM
Dear jackie, thats very thoughtful of you to say and no i dont do spoken word, i did once anonymously for a friend and thats about it. Yes tom woody too suggested in comments recently to do a spoken word. I think theres few here that do very nice spoken word like the contest sponsor dilly dally, you might enjoy her spoken word. I appreciate always your support and thoughts
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Date: 12/17/2024 1:40:00 PM
I've tried to encourage her to narrate. We'd all love to hear her voice
Date: 12/17/2024 11:27:00 AM
the unseen, resting amongst invisible butterflies, ooo child … the eerieness … drifting between the sun and the sea,.. wind collaborates with the salt and skin of waves, ooo the elegance in those lines.. zephyr breathes amongst paralyzed procrastinators, slippery slope of rocky edges,.. caught in coated curls of jealousy. to steer the spirit of sleepless sheep, ooo yess alliterationssss papi!! while oblivious to the crestfallen thorns, intoxicating your conscience, Love how the flow in this piece is sooo effortlessly.. stealing the light of sun-stroked innocence…this ending is absolutely stunning … breathtaking aeee
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Date: 12/17/2024 11:22:00 AM
Ink Impress, I love your poem! I especially love how you begin each stanza, my favorite line being this one: I sing in silence with sanctified verses,
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Date: 12/17/2024 11:14:00 AM
Nice ending … always a good read
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