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Along rails of ambivalent dreams, Bittersweet yet luscious flashbacks Take me back to my friend, the tactile moon – a Quiescent basin of grace and alchemy: we would utter And laugh about legends quite arcane from books Chipped from eve’s daily flamboyant story – telling rites… As willows stoop like night’s immolation for more Replays of drama, our guiding star acts as an intercessor For excuses to prolong near dusk's trail in our former home-- This quintessence of a young spirit’s hunger to journey Far across moon-friend’s range in an endless, mythical glide! 11.15.16 Ten word challenge -2 for John Hamilton

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Date: 11/25/2016 4:44:00 PM
Wonderful imagery. Congratulations.
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Date: 11/15/2016 6:42:00 PM
Dear Nette: Marvelous poem and the words fit inconspicuously. Perfect timing for the super moon. Good Luck in the contest. I know it will place high. Hugs, SuZ
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Date: 11/15/2016 2:14:00 PM
Well Nette, I am tellingly tongue tested.' tripping in ties, and indeed trellises of rich imagery as supplied by your talented pen.' really worth the read.'
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Date: 11/15/2016 10:10:00 AM
This is great, Nette, the use of the words are fascinating. :) Good luck in the contest already a high winner Hugs Eve
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Date: 11/15/2016 5:37:00 AM
Great one... Good luck with the contest...
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Date: 11/14/2016 9:12:00 PM
Stretches the mind beautifully. Good use of lesser used word.7 lol Peace, Love and Joy.
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Date: 11/14/2016 6:54:00 PM
A challenge met in the most emphatically aesthetic way dear, nette! Good luck!
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Date: 11/14/2016 6:11:00 PM
wow Nette you amaze me with your creativity - such a beautiful poem - you wove those difficult words in with apparent ease and told a lovely story:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/14/2016 4:40:00 PM
Excellent Nette. You are truly a first rat poet. Loved this. It has a magical quality to it and I could see a child sitting spell bound listening to the tales. A big seven from me. God Bless, JB
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Date: 11/14/2016 4:06:00 PM
Great job, Nette! A wonderful poem with some words one would not ordinarily use in a poem. You almost made them of no importance. Just lovely poetry:)
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Date: 11/14/2016 2:11:00 PM
Beautifully penned, Nette. Very expressive and lush imagery. Top notch poetry. An excellent write, dear lady. Love and peace to you. RW (Romantic Warrior)
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Date: 11/14/2016 12:59:00 PM
The moon is one of the best friends we can ever have. She will always be there for us, no matter what... Your poem took me on a wonderful journey, Nette, and I enjoyed it so much! ...Good luck in John's contest!
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Date: 11/14/2016 11:45:00 AM
This was beautiful Nette and such a wonderful use of the 10 words that were required. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 11/14/2016 11:04:00 AM
- Mythical glide and exciting ... at any age, Nette - a great poem, good luck in the contest ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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