Jan Allison Poet Quatrain

Stillbirth - Love Without Hope - Emotive Write

From the very moment you were conceived I loved you 
I could feel you kick, as a new life grew inside me 
One day you stopped moving, and tragically I knew
Holding my newborn baby was never meant to be 

Original Laura Loo's contest Weepy Quatrain awarded 1st place
Submitted to best poem from any of Laura Loo's contests
03~29~16

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Afzal Nusker September 18, 2016 at 10:43 PM Jan, congrats on your fine win again with this well deserved poem. Hugs, Afzal. Jan Allison September 19, 2016 at 9:34 AM Thanks Afzal:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars September 18, 2016 at 6:01 PM Jan-still breaks my heart when I read this- I have re-read it many a time and will always be one of my favorite poems you have written...congratulations on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo Jan Allison September 19, 2016 at 9:34 AM Thanks LuLoo:-) hugs Jan xx

Kathleen Kroll June 2, 2016 at 8:33 AM Congrats, Jan. you spoke from the heart and allowed us to feel your emotions. So well written. Kathy Jan Allison June 3, 2016 at 5:41 PM Thanks so much Kathleen:-) hugs Jan xx

Jean Murray May 24, 2016 at 5:00 PM Beautiful. Jan Allison May 24, 2016 at 5:33 PM Thanks so much Jean its such a sad poem I was delighted LuLoo liked it so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux May 24, 2016 at 7:46 AM You certainly channeled the sad with this one. Congrats on top spot. Jan Allison May 24, 2016 at 3:22 PM Thanks Richard I have memories from when I was doing my training and a colleague had a still born baby and never ever got over the loss:-) hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts May 23, 2016 at 6:18 PM Jan congratulations on a brilliant win .....Seren Jan Allison May 24, 2016 at 3:21 PM Thanks Seren:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith May 23, 2016 at 12:13 PM Congratulations Jan...A sad but beautiful win... Jan Allison May 24, 2016 at 3:20 PM Thanks Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

Karam Misra May 23, 2016 at 10:18 AM Jan, your poem touched an emotive chord. I felt the pain of loss of a still birth - of the mother and that of a father. I was going to write on this theme but my memories were too painful. Congrats on a very fine win and an excellent poem. ~karam~ Jan Allison May 24, 2016 at 3:20 PM Thanks Karam it is such a sad subject and I'm so sorry for you it is a true experience I can't imagine the pain of losing a child:-( I'm glad LuLoo liked my poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Janice Canerdy May 22, 2016 at 9:25 PM Jan, congratulations on your top win! Janice Jan Allison May 23, 2016 at 1:17 AM Thanks Janice:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper May 22, 2016 at 8:47 PM Jan, back to congratulate you on your win! Jan Allison May 23, 2016 at 1:17 AM Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich May 22, 2016 at 8:29 PM wow, a very big congrats to you, Jan. you got yourself a trophy now!!! ( I think you do. If this was an old one, it may appear on that older page) Jan Allison May 23, 2016 at 1:18 AM Thanks Andrea I am stunned to receive a trophy never thought it would happen to me as I enter few of these premier contests:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight May 22, 2016 at 8:17 PM Back to congratulate you on your top of the podium win, Jan! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison May 23, 2016 at 1:18 AM Thanks Sandra I'm delighted:-) hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath May 22, 2016 at 7:49 PM Congratulation on your superb win my lovely friend. Loved always, bl Jan Allison May 23, 2016 at 1:19 AM Thanks so much BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars May 22, 2016 at 7:11 PM Jan...tears tears tears...keep falling...:( this broke my heart and it was exactly what I was looking for. Thank you for being a part of my contest and congrats on your 1st place...be blessed lady :)-luloo Jan Allison May 23, 2016 at 1:16 AM OH WOW LuLoo I am absolutely made up - its an emotive write and I'm so pleased and stunned to get a first in a premier contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A April 7, 2016 at 6:06 AM Thank you for the comment on my comment. Have a lovely day Jan.... pd Jan Allison April 7, 2016 at 6:25 AM :-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A April 6, 2016 at 11:35 PM Jan, Congrats on your "Love Without Hope" win ... LINDA Jan Allison April 7, 2016 at 4:44 AM Thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan xx

Shirley Rebstock April 3, 2016 at 3:02 PM A tribute of love to a little soul. Jan Allison April 3, 2016 at 3:03 PM Thanks Shirley:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars April 2, 2016 at 1:36 PM Jan, I can't read this without tears..very emotive..congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo Jan Allison April 2, 2016 at 1:50 PM Oh LuLoo it is such an emotional poem I found it hard to write but I have to go with the flow of my muse and this is where she took me :-( hugs Jan xx

Anisha Dutta April 2, 2016 at 12:04 PM I appreciate your feelings though not experienced by you. But cruel facts appear in Life. Anisha D Jan Allison April 2, 2016 at 12:06 PM Thanks Anisha it is an emotive write I am thankful it is not something I have ever experienced:-) hugs jan xx

Wendy Rycroft April 2, 2016 at 7:18 AM This is so sad good words from a broken heart, God bless you x Jan Allison April 2, 2016 at 11:17 AM I'm thankful it is fiction for me Wendy but I based the poem from the experience of someone I knew when I was 16 or 17:-( hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma April 2, 2016 at 12:39 AM Quite sad n emotive..Congrats on great win with this lovely write Jan. Jan Allison April 2, 2016 at 4:44 AM Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Meenakshi Raina April 1, 2016 at 10:27 PM Congratulations on your win! I can feel the sadness...it reminds me of my own bad time. Jan Allison April 2, 2016 at 4:44 AM Thanks Meenakshi It is a very emotional poem I know from the comments how many people have experience of this tragic event:-( hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper April 1, 2016 at 5:59 PM :'( heartfelt! Congratulations on your win! Jan Allison April 1, 2016 at 6:02 PM Many thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick April 1, 2016 at 8:38 AM Your poem was awesome, creative and unique. You did a wonderful job with the topic “Love Without Hope” ..Congratulations on your placement..Sara The loss of a child must be the worst experience that a person could go through.I could feel your grief and your acceptance in these four lines. Jan Allison April 1, 2016 at 8:58 AM Many thanks Sara - it really was emotional writing this poem - thanks for a great contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight April 1, 2016 at 8:27 AM This really touches the heart, Jan. A sad but well-written poem. Congratulations on your win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison April 1, 2016 at 8:31 AM Thanks so much Sandra:-) hugs jan xx

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