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FICTIONAL POEM FOR CONTEST I sailed through my pregnancy without a problem We’d painted the nursery in pale blue I was having A little boy I'd stroke my swollen belly every time he kicked we joked he'd be a great football player tragically he’d never kick a ball no one knows why he stopped moving on my due date The doctors could not save my child Why was my baby born sleeping? My precious son You never cried F I C T I O N P O E M W R I T T E N F O R n/a in Fragmented Verse Poetry Contest (n/a because the line spacing was incorrect for the form - now amended) 02/15/21

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Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 2/23/2021 12:37:00 PM

Hi Jan, I'm so glad this was fiction, it is an excellent poem and I have to save it in my mind forever. I lost my first born at 5 days old, he was born a spina bifida and it was heartbreaking. God was kind though I fell pregnant 6 months later and 8 and a half months later I gave birth to a beautiful happy bouncy baby boy! Love and hugs, Jennifer.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/7/2021 4:22:00 PM

oh Jennifer that is so heartbreaking i am so sorry you had such sadness with your first born baby:-( hugs jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 2/19/2021 2:57:00 PM

Hello Jan … your poem really hits hard Jan. How to cope with tragedy is hard to comprehend - thanks Jan - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 2/19/2021 3:54:00 PM

Thanks Lindsay the pain must be so hard to live with for both husband and wife:-( hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/19/2021 5:33:00 AM

- The worst that can happen ... no one knows how much it hurts without having experienced it yourself ... heartbreaking poem, Jan - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 2/19/2021 3:54:00 PM

Thanks Anne-Lise, Happy weekend:-) hugs jan xx

David Kavanagh

Date: 2/16/2021 12:26:00 PM

Fiction or not, is irrelevant Jan, only someone with total empathy and understanding could write such a verse, so in effect you have created reality, cheers David

Jan Allison
Date: 2/16/2021 3:09:00 PM

thanks for that comment David:-) hugs jan xx

Judy Ball

Date: 2/16/2021 7:41:00 AM

Oh this is so sad and anyone who ever lost a baby feels it. It's why I get so mad every time someone says a fetus is not a baby until it's born. EXCUSE YOU. WHAT DO YOU THINK IT IS> Great job here my friend. God Bless, JB

Jan Allison
Date: 2/16/2021 12:11:00 PM

Thanks Judy, it is a very emotive subject:-( hugs jan xx

Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 2/16/2021 3:20:00 AM

This is a tearjerker. You have captured the emotions beautifully. All the best for contest. Take care Rama

Jan Allison
Date: 2/16/2021 12:11:00 PM

Thanks Rama:-) hugs Jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/15/2021 11:07:00 PM

My daughter had such a miscarriage. Happens often. Pity, ~~

Jan Allison
Date: 2/16/2021 12:10:00 PM

Aww Victor that's so sad:-( hugs Jan xx

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 2/15/2021 9:13:00 PM

Such a heartfelt poem sharing heartbreak of many.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/16/2021 12:10:00 PM

Thanks Caren:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 2/15/2021 7:39:00 PM

My mother never "got over" her miscarriages, which were quite common years ago, but it is even worse when a small child dies, and that is increasingly common in the USA! Good luck in the contest! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 2/16/2021 12:09:00 PM

aww that's so sad Rico:-( hugs Jan xx

Janice Canerdy

Date: 2/15/2021 5:52:00 PM

Very moving, Jan--the story of so many heartbroken women. Janice

Jan Allison
Date: 2/16/2021 12:09:00 PM

Thanks Janice I know from a friend's experience that it can affect relationships badly too:-( hugs Jan xx

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 2/15/2021 3:42:00 PM

Ah, no greater pain then to give birth to a still born child, You got my heart softening here. winning wishes Jan, hope your Valentine was good. xo

Jan Allison
Date: 2/16/2021 12:06:00 PM

Thanks Vie:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 2/15/2021 2:31:00 PM

i am so glad that this is fiction, jan, although you've made it sound very real. a touching and very sad poem...

Jan Allison
Date: 2/16/2021 12:06:00 PM

Thanks Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 2/15/2021 1:55:00 PM

this is a tearjerker jan, resonates with me as i lost my angel baby x

Jan Allison
Date: 2/16/2021 12:05:00 PM

aww Charlotte I'm so sorry you can relate its fiction for me but when I was training to be a nursery nurse the teacher had a stillborn baby and it's something I will never forget. hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 2/15/2021 1:39:00 PM

Such a sad scenario Jan, and because they've just given birth they are in the maternity ward with all the other mums with their newborns. In cases like that they should be given a room away from the maternity ward but its always down to money. Good luck in the contest. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 2/15/2021 1:49:00 PM

I agree with you Tom especially if they know the baby has died, but sadly some babies don't always survive the birth so i guess that would be a tough call, so heartbreaking:-( hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 2/15/2021 1:24:00 PM

Hi Jan, It was hard to read this heartfelt write; it brought tears to my eyes. Although your well written write is fiction, it is true for many women worldwide. The second stanza was heartbreaking to read. Best wishes in the contest-Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 2/15/2021 1:47:00 PM

Thanks Alexis when i did my nursery nursing training the pre school teacher had a stillbirth and it has always stayed with me:-( hugs jan xx