Tim Smith Poet Rhyme

Still Loving Her

The dust has all settled

I'll go get the broom

sweep off the back porch

and the old sitting room

That wind storm was mighty

almost blew me away

the foundation was crumbling

as the house swung and swayed

The timbers were creaking

the roof sprung a leak

the shutters are broken

it really looked bleak

The old building survived

It's weathered but tough

It will stand tall and fight

when the going gets rough

There's much beauty left

in this old home of mine

I'll still be loving her

till the end of my time


02/22/2015
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Skat A August 10, 2015 at 6:29 PM TIM, :-) Congratulations on your wonderful win! *SKAT*

Dr. Upma A. Sharma August 10, 2015 at 1:43 AM Congrats on ur awesome winning poem Tim! eloquent work with great metaphors throughout!

Pandita Sietesantos August 9, 2015 at 9:22 PM Excellent metaphorical piece! Thoroughly enjoyed the read and happy to see it on the winners list! Congratulations, Tim, on a great win! Pandita

Eve Roper August 9, 2015 at 1:54 PM Congratulations on your win Hugs Eve

Sara Kendrick March 19, 2015 at 3:51 PM Congrats on your winning work..Sara

Poet Destroyer A March 19, 2015 at 11:26 AM Tim, Congratulations on your awesome gathering Dust win..... Luv ~LINDA~

Debbie Guzzi March 15, 2015 at 7:56 PM Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Skat A March 15, 2015 at 3:33 PM Tim, CONGRATULATIONS, on your Win ~SKAT~

Barbara Gorelick March 15, 2015 at 2:10 PM Tim, your rhyming is great, unforced. Well done and congrats. BG

John Lawless March 15, 2015 at 11:57 AM Hey Tim, nice one. I found a bit of a metaphoric sense in this poem. A tinge of lost love and the frailty of our human forms as they fall into disrepair with age. Thanks for submitting this to the contest.

Jan Allison March 15, 2015 at 11:33 AM I do love your take on the theme Tim a beautiful write:-) Hugs Jan xx

Charmaine Chircop February 23, 2015 at 8:46 AM That old cosy home with a loving nest would always be stronger than life's weathered mess.A powerful message Tim..Charma Tim Smith February 23, 2015 at 4:28 PM That is true Charma...We have to keep it nourished with love and good morals and it will weather any storm....hugs Tim

Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2015 at 8:44 AM A very emotional write! I enjoyed your poem. Tim Smith February 23, 2015 at 4:22 PM Thank you Richard

Casarah Nance February 23, 2015 at 7:59 AM Wonderful! I really enjoyed your visualization on this and the multiple meanings one can take from it. Hope everything is well and you are weathering all your storms strongly my friend. hugs. Tim Smith February 23, 2015 at 4:21 PM Thanks Cas. Trying to weather the cold winter. Ready for spring

Demetrios Trifiatis February 23, 2015 at 4:37 AM A marvelous piece of artistic beauty! What a verse! What a message! A seven , my dear friend, Tim! Tim Smith February 23, 2015 at 4:20 PM Thank you Demetrios my dear friend

Arthur Vaso February 22, 2015 at 11:31 PM Tim, this is masterpiece! Tim Smith February 23, 2015 at 4:17 PM Thank you my friend

Eileen Manassian February 22, 2015 at 10:11 PM :) I'm glad you've weathered the storm, Tim. Hugs Tim Smith February 23, 2015 at 4:16 PM Thanks Eileen..This one yes : )

Eve Roper February 22, 2015 at 9:48 PM Life sends us so much burden, we endure, and go on. Love this beautiful poem, Tim. 7 Blessings and hugs Tim Smith February 23, 2015 at 4:14 PM Thanks Eve..I think we are only sent what we can handle.....hugs Tim

David Meade February 22, 2015 at 8:07 PM Many storms endured but plenty of life left . . . stand tall and firm dear friend. 7 Tim Smith February 23, 2015 at 4:09 PM That I will David...hugs Tim

Njeri Hunjeri February 22, 2015 at 7:33 PM And she deserves the love. #7 Tim Smith February 23, 2015 at 4:08 PM Thanks njeri...hugs Tim