Sterile Rain

pit      pat

    pitter        patter

 pitter   patter   pitter   patter

a playful LIGHTNESS WEIGHS HEAVY
defiant droplets dance

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down the outside of the window … pain 
a heart FILLED WITH EMPTINESS
FRAZZLED AND RAW 
bright sunshine is too brash

yet raindrops ... 

so reminiscent of a sound
~l~o~n~g~i~n~g~
to be heard on the
(inside)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 9/12/2010 1:37:00 PM
Dear Sharon, Congratulations on YOUR Well deserved 1st Place Win "downthe outside of the window ..."Pain" " I am with you in feekings for the rest of the POEM reminiscent to me that word has such deep emotional meaning Superb POEM YOUR Liege ALWAYS... HG
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Date: 9/10/2010 10:17:00 PM
Hey, congratulations on your win, Sharon. And where have you been lately? I miss you. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 9/7/2010 12:52:00 PM
Super congrats btw-- very well deserved definitely!! ^_^
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Date: 9/7/2010 12:51:00 PM
How I could I have missed this awesome free verse of yours, Sharon?? I absolutely love this --it's so unique and I just love how you formatted it-- you know how I love the rain and this is going to my faves, haha-- loved the oxymoron you put in here-- very clever--this write just captivated me! & haha yup I am now a tick enjoying the sterile rain, lol ^_^ hugs to you thanks again for dropping by all of my blogs you are a sweetie to do so :) nikko :) eep gotta sleep see you around :)
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Date: 9/2/2010 6:44:00 AM
lovely, touching write! congrad's
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Date: 9/1/2010 6:00:00 PM
Wonderfully done! Great layout to create visual poetry as well! Congratulations on this beauty! hugs, Kris
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Date: 8/30/2010 4:56:00 AM
Congratulations Sharon on your win in Charles Henderson's contest "Free For All Do As You Please". Love, Carol
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Date: 8/29/2010 2:21:00 AM
Congrats on your win, Sharon. A very interesting poem and an ever more interesting way to present it. You are a talented poet. Emily
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Date: 8/28/2010 1:10:00 PM
Very creative and expressive is this write...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara
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Date: 8/27/2010 7:25:00 PM
Congrats on the win, Sharon
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Date: 8/27/2010 2:09:00 PM
Congratulations on taking first place with your great poem, Sharon! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 8/27/2010 1:36:00 PM
Wowie, Sharon, what an awesome win on your awesome poem! ! LUv, Andrea
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Date: 8/27/2010 1:19:00 PM
Congrats Sharon on your big first place win for an excellent write and artistic piece .. enjoy my friend.. with luv..
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Date: 8/27/2010 12:26:00 PM
A truly unique piece. Congrats on your big win. BG
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Date: 8/27/2010 11:41:00 AM
Wow....again, my congrats for a job well done..and beautiful to look at! Great job, Sharon! ~ Love, Carrie
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Date: 8/27/2010 10:56:00 AM
Congratulations, Sharon on your worthy first place, Agape, Moses
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Date: 8/25/2010 9:47:00 PM
seems like it could have been for that one contest with oxymorons or something. this is very interesting,Sharon. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 8/25/2010 8:14:00 AM
Awesome poem Sharon, love the way the words bring the rain drops right in ! james
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Date: 8/24/2010 9:41:00 PM
Very interesting way depict the pen picture of raindrops with rhythm, Sharon
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Date: 8/24/2010 3:14:00 PM
Creative, you bet. This reminds me of something, I just can't put my finger on it. Clever layout and delightful poetry to boot >> James
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Date: 8/24/2010 8:18:00 AM
Very clever layout, Sharon. You allow us to see the rain through both the words and your creative design. Very nice work! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 8/24/2010 7:28:00 AM
Very creative Sharon.. enjoyed this piece .. would make a good contest entry for weather or creativity .. winner for sure if so... nice flair with the capitals too.. with luv.. from Italy..ciao..
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Date: 8/24/2010 6:17:00 AM
sad yet I like the way you did the motion of the rain on a window. well done!!
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Date: 8/24/2010 5:05:00 AM
Amazing write Sharon, love the uniqueness of style as well.. Hope you will enjoy your day further :) Wilma
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Date: 8/24/2010 4:49:00 AM
Excellent write...love the images shared..always Michael
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