Sterile Rain

pit      pat

    pitter        patter

 pitter   patter   pitter   patter

a playful LIGHTNESS WEIGHS HEAVY
defiant droplets dance

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down the outside of the window … pain 
a heart FILLED WITH EMPTINESS
FRAZZLED AND RAW 
bright sunshine is too brash

yet raindrops ... 

so reminiscent of a sound
~l~o~n~g~i~n~g~
to be heard on the
(inside)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Esquire Avatar
September 12, 2010 at 1:37 PM
Dear Sharon, Congratulations on YOUR Well deserved 1st Place Win "downthe outside of the window ..."Pain" " I am with you in feekings for the rest of the POEM reminiscent to me that word has such deep emotional meaning Superb POEM YOUR Liege ALWAYS... HG
Dietrich Avatar
September 10, 2010 at 10:17 PM
Hey, congratulations on your win, Sharon. And where have you been lately? I miss you. LUv, Andrea
K. Avatar
September 7, 2010 at 12:52 PM
Super congrats btw-- very well deserved definitely!! ^_^
K. Avatar
September 7, 2010 at 12:51 PM
How I could I have missed this awesome free verse of yours, Sharon?? I absolutely love this --it's so unique and I just love how you formatted it-- you know how I love the rain and this is going to my faves, haha-- loved the oxymoron you put in here-- very clever--this write just captivated me! & haha yup I am now a tick enjoying the sterile rain, lol ^_^ hugs to you thanks again for dropping by all of my blogs you are a sweetie to do so :) nikko :) eep gotta sleep see you around :)
Guzzi Avatar
September 2, 2010 at 6:44 AM
lovely, touching write! congrad's
Walters Avatar
September 1, 2010 at 6:00 PM
Wonderfully done! Great layout to create visual poetry as well! Congratulations on this beauty! hugs, Kris
Brown Avatar
August 30, 2010 at 4:56 AM
Congratulations Sharon on your win in Charles Henderson's contest "Free For All Do As You Please". Love, Carol
R Avatar
August 29, 2010 at 2:21 AM
Congrats on your win, Sharon. A very interesting poem and an ever more interesting way to present it. You are a talented poet. Emily
Kendrick Avatar
August 28, 2010 at 1:10 PM
Very creative and expressive is this write...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara
Mehta Avatar
August 27, 2010 at 7:25 PM
Congrats on the win, Sharon
Devonshire Avatar
August 27, 2010 at 2:09 PM
Congratulations on taking first place with your great poem, Sharon! Love, Carolyn
Dietrich Avatar
August 27, 2010 at 1:36 PM
Wowie, Sharon, what an awesome win on your awesome poem! ! LUv, Andrea
Sweetheart Avatar
August 27, 2010 at 1:19 PM
Congrats Sharon on your big first place win for an excellent write and artistic piece .. enjoy my friend.. with luv..
Gorelick Avatar
August 27, 2010 at 12:26 PM
A truly unique piece. Congrats on your big win. BG
Richards Avatar
August 27, 2010 at 11:41 AM
Wow....again, my congrats for a job well done..and beautiful to look at! Great job, Sharon! ~ Love, Carrie
Freeman Avatar
August 27, 2010 at 10:56 AM
Congratulations, Sharon on your worthy first place, Agape, Moses
Dietrich Avatar
August 25, 2010 at 9:47 PM
seems like it could have been for that one contest with oxymorons or something. this is very interesting,Sharon. Luv, Andrea
Peranteau Avatar
August 25, 2010 at 8:14 AM
Awesome poem Sharon, love the way the words bring the rain drops right in ! james
Mehta Avatar
August 24, 2010 at 9:41 PM
Very interesting way depict the pen picture of raindrops with rhythm, Sharon
Fraser Avatar
August 24, 2010 at 3:14 PM
Creative, you bet. This reminds me of something, I just can't put my finger on it. Clever layout and delightful poetry to boot >> James
Devonshire Avatar
August 24, 2010 at 8:18 AM
Very clever layout, Sharon. You allow us to see the rain through both the words and your creative design. Very nice work! Love, Carolyn
Sweetheart Avatar
August 24, 2010 at 7:28 AM
Very creative Sharon.. enjoyed this piece .. would make a good contest entry for weather or creativity .. winner for sure if so... nice flair with the capitals too.. with luv.. from Italy..ciao..
Culverhouse Avatar
August 24, 2010 at 6:17 AM
sad yet I like the way you did the motion of the rain on a window. well done!!
Neels Avatar
August 24, 2010 at 5:05 AM
Amazing write Sharon, love the uniqueness of style as well.. Hope you will enjoy your day further :) Wilma
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August 24, 2010 at 4:49 AM
Excellent write...love the images shared..always Michael
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