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~stealing the Summer~

I have witnessed the dullness grow stealing warmth from sky’s blue hue, so hoary fist grips land below, turns the leaves into maelstrom brew. Stealing warmth from sky’s blue hue when darkness comes a shade too soon, and breath is hung like web trapped dew beneath the gaze of harvest moon. So hoary fist grips land below while skeletal oaks seem to shake as if there’s something they should know, a dance in which they must partake. Turns the leaves into maelstrom brew like kittens escaping their fear, and carried on a forlorn mew the plaintive cry of “winters here”. ***This is a Retourne; The retourne is all about repetition. It contains four quatrains and each line has eight syllables. The trick is that the first stanza's second line must also be the second stanza's first line, the first stanza's third line is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's fourth line is the fourth stanza's first. Retournes do not have to rhyme.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 12/16/2008 9:57:00 AM
Hey Colin, I feel as if we come full circle as we met here and then allpoetry and now your back. Awesome write it has such great imagery and says so much. Amazing write, welcome back to the soup ~Michaela~
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Date: 12/16/2008 7:39:00 AM
Nice poem the imagery is great...Raul
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Date: 12/16/2008 6:32:00 AM
I like the form, Colin. It looks very difficult. You've chosen a great and interesting subject. Well done. Celeste
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Date: 12/16/2008 6:31:00 AM
Excellent write my friend. The poem speaks with such beauty and grace and the words drips with metaphors. Great job!
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Date: 12/16/2008 6:19:00 AM
Excellent poem, both in content, and in form. You inspire us to try a new format. This is beautiful and awesome, and rather sad, bidding farewell to the season. ~ Carrie
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