Stealing Busses

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Summer night Soft sand beach Watch the moon Go reach-to-reach And yet I'd trade Pure eve like this For just a chance To steal your kiss Exquisite portals Lush as thine Are incomplete If not with mine Oh, what a crime Far past compare Should LIPS as sweet Refuse to share So tell them now To please take heart They're in good care While far apart ... ** SECOND PLACE in the "Mid August Standard Poetry Contest", Brian Strand, Sponsor. **

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Dean Wood

Date: 8/18/2017 10:06:00 PM

This is wonderful Greg. Effortless to read and very descriptive. Congratulations.!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/18/2017 11:41:00 PM

Thank you so much, Dean, I had a lot of fun with this one, and I take pride in TRYing to create smooth rhyming metre ... "try" being the operative word here, lol. Much as it is against the grain these days, I enjoy Rhyme a bit MORE than Free Verse.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/18/2017 11:41:00 PM

I love both for their different personalities and nuances, but Rhyme is a bit of a lost art, in my opinion, and one I take very seriously. Much more information than you expected, but thanks again so much, my friend - so appreciated!

John Leong

Date: 8/16/2017 10:54:00 AM

wow! i was bowled over by the romantic overtures there. nice! the words well written too; got me distracted for that few moments. cheers!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/16/2017 9:14:00 PM

Thank you, John, very kind of you ... this one was fun and very special, (for a number of reasons) - so pleased you liked it!

Russell Sivey

Date: 8/15/2017 4:26:00 AM

This write is a very good write my friend! I really enjoyed reading this illustrious poem this morning! You have written an awesome piece, such a delight to read, Great Work!!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/15/2017 4:46:00 AM

Thank you, my good friend - your comments always make me smile, and your kindness spreads sunshine wherever you go! Blessings, Russell! :-)

Lin Lane

Date: 8/14/2017 9:39:00 AM

"Exquisite portals/Lush as thine/Are incomplete/If not with mine" ~ those are my favorite lines.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/15/2017 4:45:00 AM

Thank you, Lin - this one was especially fun! :-)

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/14/2017 9:18:00 AM

Nice one Greg. I like the ending :)

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/15/2017 4:44:00 AM

Thank you, Heidi ... just a little "naughty". ;-)