Statuesque

Mark’s sent me a card of Mic’angelo’s “David”.
I’m really not sure how I’m meant to react …
Did he think I’m pining to see a nice body?
Or is he half-hoping that I’ll send it back?

The truth is, I don’t feel the least bit insulted.
I’ve studied male shapes ever since I was five!
I really enjoy all their planes and their contours:
‘Tis pity they’re seldom this good in real life …

This statue of David is one of the finest.
He’s firm and he’s smooth, and his muscles are taut …
If he were to step down and walk through the gallery,
The one thing to wobble is the one thing that ought!

His face is the image of very young Elvis …
And so is his body, the bits that we’ve seen.
They could be the same man … a re-incarnation …
Translated from Florence to Hollywood screen.

This picture just fills me with such mixed emotions!
I’m eager to see him: to touch, taste and smell …
And yet, it occurs, I’m too old for such notions …
But this old bat’s not dead yet … so, hey, what the Hell!

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Entry for Debbie's "Change for the Meter" contest.
This is a dactylic tetrameter ... I think!
Tell me if I'm wrong, please!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 2/12/2012 3:14:00 AM
FRANCES,, stopping by to wish you a SWEET VALENTINE.. AND A WONDERFUL , congratulations... ON your wonderful win In this awesome contest. Enjoyed ;-) . have yourself a wonderful valentines. @lways & @lways *xox~PD
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Date: 2/7/2012 8:29:00 AM
Congratulations to you on your win in Debbie Guzzi 's "Change for the Meter" contest Frances. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/6/2012 1:37:00 AM
nice win, thank you, Al
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Date: 2/5/2012 3:16:00 PM
Congratulations Frances on the win..)
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Date: 2/5/2012 10:48:00 AM
Frances congrats on your win..David
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Date: 2/5/2012 8:36:00 AM
I love this piece Francis. Reason mixed with humor. What more can we ask. Congratulations
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Date: 2/2/2012 2:55:00 PM
Excellent effort!! If you wanted to do more Dactyl/Dactylic/ three syllables per foot [STRESS + Unstress + Unstress] tetrameter 4 of these groupings..wowser/ you seem to have the 12 syllables per line MOSTLY but the [SRESS unstress unstress] is off ..line 9 is mostly amphibrachial / line 10, 14 & 19 are iambic hexameter 6 groupings of 2 syllables, many lines have no meter I CAN discern? If you want help giving the piece as a whole amore regular meter let me know!
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Date: 7/4/2009 2:04:00 PM
I was here & read, what she said, that she's not dead, I don't know that my soul was fed, but getting old is not my dread, but with that said, my Godly love unto you, hoping that will do you! lolzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz!Lovingly Moses
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