James Peranteau Poet Free verse

State of Undress

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 Our naked feet feel the grass
   and our naked legs feel the
                  flowers
       and the pretty weeds

Our naked hands feel the pears
            and the apples
               the grapes
              and the rain

       Our naked faces kiss
   and our naked bodies love 
               each other
 until the naked moon meets
   the flaming constellations

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Elizabeth Wesley August 24, 2011 at 10:49 PM You give me ideas on what to do! Amazing action, to go in my favs

Debbie Guzzi May 17, 2011 at 8:38 AM such charming sentiment and great title too! I'd like to see you "plump" it Up with some metaphor, personification, alliteration, it is the most beautiful skeleton now please write more? please? Light & Love

Wilma Neels April 8, 2011 at 6:22 AM Naked thoughts so perfectly dressed :) an awesome piece to start my weekend with James, enjoy the weekend ahead, love Wilma

Linda-Marie Sweetheart April 8, 2011 at 5:16 AM Wishing u a happy weekend James my friend as poetic masterpieces flow from your creative pen luv.. my Love Fest is posted for your viewing pleasure luv..

Kabuteng P.Ink K. April 7, 2011 at 6:19 PM And isn't this just the naked truth? sorry I just had to use that line ;) really enjoy that last two lines as well-- very vivid ending for this sensuous piece :) sending you soupmail after :)

C.C Bloomsfield April 7, 2011 at 6:54 AM naked thoughts indeed. .its always lovely to read your poetry,James,always C.C

Linda-Marie Sweetheart April 7, 2011 at 6:29 AM Well I am on fire after reading this one James my friend.. how versatile u are luv.. creating from all ends of the spectrum of poetry.. naked is beautiful to me.. am now working on a hot entry for Frank's luv contest.. steamy and sizzling I hope..haha.. thankxx for your wonderful comment on Smokescreens.. bible truths shall ever prevail... the Book is all about luv..luv..

Daver Austin April 6, 2011 at 11:22 AM Them's the bare facts, Sir James. This is loving and sensitive stuff, romantic as a pistol! Great! Love, daver

Nette Onclaud April 5, 2011 at 1:59 PM a lovely work lined with brushes of sensuality.. well done, james! :) huggs, nette

Jl Sadberry April 5, 2011 at 10:42 AM Smile, *^_^* I find a profound loveliness amid this wonderfully soft and tenderly brushed canvas my dear friend. = And as precious Carolyn touched upon below, I also find images of some place similar unto the garden of eden to found within the colours of this sweetened painting. == Although, the ending holds something perhaps somber in gray somehow? Either or, "Very Beautiful Verse My Friend." === love, jasper

Carol Sunshine Brown April 5, 2011 at 10:05 AM Thank you for sharing your amazing poetry James. I enjoyed reading it and hope to read more of it soon. May you always find the inspiration to continue with your writing endeavors. Love, Carol

James Foulk April 5, 2011 at 9:41 AM a very touching and romantic piece of poetry. thank you for reading my little girl grown and for your comment.

Carolyn Devonshire April 5, 2011 at 9:39 AM Clothing was invented by man. Remember Adam felt no shame until after the original sin. Since then we have been trying to cover up all our flaws. This is a beautiful poem. I especially love the thought of the naked moon meeting the "flaming constellations." I sent the email to the wrong address, but saw your Soup mail and will try to send it to the correct address now. Love you, Carolyn