State of the Nation Tb

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State

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the

Nation

State of the Nation


Nature unchaste,
river waste drifts;
distasteful scene. 

Shorebirds in flight,
gray and white gulls;
despite foul winds.

Mercury fear;
poison-smeared fish
make dreary food.




*January 29, 2019
For Charles Messina’s Than-Bauk Contest

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Ann Gilmour

Date: 2/14/2019 12:25:00 AM

Many congrats Carolyn, such an important message conveyed so well within your poem - so sad but true. Kindest thoughts Ann xx

Jan Allison

Date: 2/13/2019 3:12:00 PM

very vivid imagery, such a sad state of affairs Carolyn:-( many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 2/11/2019 10:51:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, well-versed warning!

Alexis Y.

Date: 2/11/2019 11:40:00 AM

Hi Carolyn, All three of your poems well written and true. Congratulations on a well deserved win:-) Alexis

Joseph May

Date: 2/11/2019 7:28:00 AM

So sad that so many rivers are polluted.. Congrats on your win..

Charles Messina

Date: 2/10/2019 9:50:00 PM

This was a great write Carolyn. So much truth and sadness told here. It such a pity what's happened and is still happening. Well done as usual, Congratulations on your 1st place win.. love & hugs...Charlie

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 2/11/2019 5:48:00 AM

I enjoyed this form, Charles. Thank you for choosing Than Bauk and giving us this challenge, my friend!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/30/2019 4:34:00 PM

Crucial message wrapped in clever Than Bauk rhyme. Nicely done, Carolyn and G.L. in the contest. Best wishes, Gershon

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/30/2019 2:52:00 AM

I remember as a child going to the shop to pick up groceries and everything was fresh and sold loosely now the food we have is full of chemicals wrapped in plastic that finds it's way to our oceans and on land. The world is becoming one big dustbin. Good luck. Tom

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 1/30/2019 1:30:00 PM

So many of our favorite places have changed, Tom. The plastic refuse is choking fish and wildlife. Thanks for sharing