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Stars That Fall

A weary road and stars that fall
                    This cannot be the end at all
The sun seems but a helpless ball
                    Yet I attempt to step and fall

I’ll not give up though darkness looms
                  Like suffocating empty rooms
And pushing never-ending brooms  
             To clean up all the broken blooms

Yet I remember days that shone
                  When not afraid and not alone 
With warmth and grace, a rolling stone
                   A carefree life to ne’er disown

I long to dwell within the light
             Before the day turned into night

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Ann Foster

Date: 4/1/2024 8:46:00 AM

Love the last line... the best, but all of the write... is well done... well done... Ann

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 3/28/2024 12:07:00 PM

I feel hope and optimism in this one Mike. Very nice! Congratulations! :)

Mike Gentile
Date: 3/29/2024 4:15:00 PM

Thank you so much Linda!!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 3/27/2024 10:42:00 AM

Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write with your great ending again. Have a blessed day...........

Mike Gentile
Date: 3/27/2024 7:37:00 PM

Thank you Paula xxoo

Charles Messina

Date: 3/27/2024 10:40:00 AM

Mike, I love this poem. It flowed so well and you really did a nice job writing it. Congratulations on your top win. Sorry so late I've not been feeling well. All the best. hope all is well...Charlie

Mike Gentile
Date: 3/27/2024 7:37:00 PM

Charlie, thank you so much and I hope you are feeling better!!!

Terry Miller

Date: 3/27/2024 9:58:00 AM

An excellent poem for the competition, congratulations.

Mike Gentile
Date: 3/27/2024 7:42:00 PM

Terry, thanks so much!!!

Duke Beaufort

Date: 2/15/2024 5:23:00 PM

Mike, I had to look up the meaning of ITQ. It could be related to commerce or PTSD (International Trauma Questionnaire). This reads well using the PTSD alternative. If you have it, my deepest sympathies. Some of us see or experience really bad things in our lives. As one of those people, I find it difficult to put some bad thoughts out of my mind and they seem to come with the slightest triggering. We're never giving up, but it does hurt.

Mike Gentile
Date: 2/16/2024 4:00:00 AM

Thank you Duke, actually ITQ in the case is from a contest requiring Iambic Tetrameter Quatorzain. Charlie, the sponsor, requested titles to show ITQ next to them so he would not accidentally read it prior to judging the contest.

Ink Empress

Date: 2/10/2024 4:51:00 AM

I absolutely love how youv used the prompt and how youve written in such a descriptively moving manner. So creative and captivating! “The sun seems but a helpless ball Yet I attempt to step and fall” the exhaustion and wearing how youv delivered is clever and soulful! “ Yet I remember days that shone When not afraid and not alone “ that resonates strong really! BOL for the contest im sure youll do well i really felt the emotions flowing throughout your well articulated lines

Mike Gentile
Date: 2/10/2024 5:15:00 AM

Thank you so much Ink Empress and happy Saturday xxoo

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 2/8/2024 12:45:00 PM

I enjoyed reading your wonderful write/Great Ending. Good Luck if it is for a contest..... Have a wonderful day..................

Mike Gentile
Date: 2/8/2024 2:36:00 PM

Thank you Paula xxoo