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Stars I hankered after

To slumber, when I did surrender Someone gave me Untimely Call Was enjoying dream hence did not answer Colourful STARS vying for me one and all Vivid shapes, attractive sizes, all catching eye balls Enchantment caught me tight In seventh heaven, fell en masse in love-at-first-sight Missed heartbeats, fright of missing-any-one haunted Arms went out for embracing all together Dream reached climax, with bite of bug dream aborted Dream shattered, all stars went helter-skelter All fairies vanished, pillow was left with tear Someone uttered, Untimely Call was of STARS Same stars, in dream I hankered after ( Rhyme Scheme : a-b-a-b-b, c-c ) -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- By Hitendra Mehta Entry for Members Contest - Create your own Form, May be by Constance La France ~A Ramblingpoet~

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Date: 11/23/2010 2:50:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in this fine contest.Sara
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Date: 11/15/2010 8:56:00 PM
Very nicely done with creating your own form. it was quite the challenge. Very interesting concept and title: stars I hankered after! luv, Andrea
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Date: 11/15/2010 10:11:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Hitendra in Constance's contest "Create Your Own Form, Maybe?". Love, Carol
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Date: 11/15/2010 4:07:00 AM
Many congrats for this HM Hitendra.
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Date: 11/15/2010 3:45:00 AM
Thank you very much, congratulations too on your super win....love, Lightening Ink.
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Date: 11/14/2010 1:49:00 PM
Congratulations Hitendra on your interesting sonnet. Love, Joyce
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Date: 11/14/2010 9:21:00 AM
What an excellent poem, and a difficult but challenging form! Congratulations, Hitendra!
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Date: 11/14/2010 8:57:00 AM
A very interesting sonnet form that is new to me, Hitendra. I was glad to see you receive recognition in Constance's contest! Well done. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/14/2010 7:43:00 AM
Congrats Hitendra on your HM in Constance's contest with this wonderful entry so poignant and so well deserved to be featured on the winners list my friend.. enjoy your very special honor with lots of luv this happy Sunday...
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Date: 11/14/2010 4:24:00 AM
Congratulations on this well deserved win, Hitendra
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Date: 10/12/2010 11:36:00 AM
@C arol, @Constance @Destroyer & @ Liz.... thnx for encouraging comments..... Luv/Best wishes always....Hitendra Mehta
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Date: 10/12/2010 6:46:00 AM
An excellent write Hitendra. I want to thank you for your kind comments and wish you a wonderful day. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/12/2010 5:40:00 AM
A lovely poem, utterly enchanting and dreamy and "thanks for the comment on my poetry" ~~
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Date: 10/11/2010 2:48:00 PM
beautiful write Hitendra, enjoyed this one...P.D.
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Date: 10/11/2010 10:28:00 AM
Lovely piece - Liz
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