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Stardust, Perseus' Dream

The sun, long set, whispers a quiet good night, its final glow passing from sight, while the glimmering moon patiently awaits to greet us in early morning splendor. My head reels in delight as with slightest brush, in the grass she rests beside me. In the dark the final light fades to black and Perseus' spawn spears the night as we watch mesmerized, one lone falling star pierces the jewels on his sword releasing heaven's dust upon us, and my mind's illusions delight in dreams of her. 06/15/2020 STARDUST Poetry Contest Sponsor: Nette Onclaud

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Eric Cohen

Date: 7/14/2020 10:50:00 PM

As a star gazer I was mesmerized by this beautiful poem. I especially like the constellation Perseus, what with the double cluster and all. For another take on Perseus, check out my poem "Algol." And "keep looking up."

James Inman
Date: 7/15/2020 8:46:00 AM

Thanks for the nice comment Eric. I don't get a very good view of Perseus living in the south and with a city just north east of me. I used to enjoy Star Gazers on PBS when I was young (I haven't thought about it for a long time), such a tragic death for Horkheimer.

Aditi Mishra

Date: 6/22/2020 6:42:00 AM

James this is an absolutely stunning piece! I am glad I got to read it. The last two lines are the real gems in your verse. Congratulations on your win :)

James Inman
Date: 6/22/2020 8:09:00 AM

Thank you for visiting Aditi. What a wonderful comment, I love looking at the stars.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/21/2020 2:31:00 PM

Just coming back to say have a happy father's day!!

James Inman
Date: 6/21/2020 2:55:00 PM

Thank you Andrea, I had a picnic with my two daughters at Bok Tower. It was nice.

Iza Costa

Date: 6/20/2020 11:14:00 AM

Such a charming poem with an enigmatic touch ... beautiful! Congratulations James

James Inman
Date: 6/20/2020 12:04:00 PM

Thank you for your kind comment, Iza.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/19/2020 10:38:00 PM

I love this James. Congratulations on your win! Please let me tell you what dear heart advised me of...to see how your poem looks to the sponsor just click on the little camera at the top near your icon. Sometimes one line will go on and on but not look that way when you post it. It took me a long time to make mine come out in six lines. Wish I had known that long ago. xxoo

Aditi Mishra
Date: 6/22/2020 6:43:00 AM

Oh I hadn't known that too! Interesting. Now this could be kept in mind. Thanks Connie :)

James Inman
Date: 6/19/2020 10:52:00 PM

Thank you so much for letting me know about how the sponsors see the poems. They actually see them as greeting cards? That is strange to me. I have never hosted a contest so I didn't know. I had to revise this poem 6 times to get it to fit properly but when I look at it the way you said it still doesn't fit. Have you noticed how much shorter the lines are now than a couple of years ago? I adjust my word file to account for the line length before posting new poems and it seems I've been adjusting it each time, LOL. Thanks for the comment as well Connie.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/19/2020 1:26:00 PM

Amazing imagination and imagery in this short free verse poem. Love it, Ralph.

James Inman
Date: 6/19/2020 1:30:00 PM

Look to the stars Andrea. I'm waiting for a Space Traveler to come take me away.

Michael Tor

Date: 6/19/2020 12:19:00 AM

James you awoken me to watch the night sky. Love reading this piece. Nicely done and worthy of a win my friend...

Michael Tor
Date: 6/19/2020 9:14:00 AM

I will look for the Perseus Constellation. Thanks for the info James...

James Inman
Date: 6/19/2020 8:44:00 AM

Michael, nice of you to visit. Look for shooting stars in August. If you locate the Perseus constellation, where the shooting stars seem to originate, on Perseus' sword's handle you will find two open star clusters usually referred to as the double cluster, visible to the naked eye, that are the jewels of Perseus.

Carole Duet

Date: 6/18/2020 8:10:00 PM

Dreamy...puts me in the mood to go outside and stargaze. Carole :D

James Inman
Date: 6/19/2020 8:07:00 AM

Hi Carole, hope you're well. I love the night time sky and watching falling stars. The Perseid Meteor shower is one of the best times to see them, although this year the moon will be out in the morning so you won't see as many. They will start being visible in the early morning sky in late July and last through most of August but the peak will be around August 11th through the 13th. You may see as many as 40 or 50 an hour during its peak. The shooting stars appear to originate in the constellation Perseus, so look there to get the best view.