Star-Crossed - For Love of Day, For Love of Night

(this is a form called Swap Quatrain, where first line's phrases swap in the last line of each stanza) In shadows’ veils, at end of night, sweet Moon removes her modest light and softly, yet again, exhales - at end of night, in shadows’ veils. As she departs, her love’s released to climb the stairway to the east. They cannot meet to share their hearts. Her love’s released as she departs. She watches him while hid from view, the way he kisses morning’s dew, and sees gold rays spill from his rim. While hid from view, she watches him. Sad Moon, alone for centuries, with awe has watched Sun leave, cerise. while she, afar. . . how cold she’s grown! For centuries, sad moon alone. She takes his place so he may rest. And though forlorn, she’s always dressed in lace, for Luna has great grace. So he may rest, she takes his place. For love of night, for love of day, she can’t implore him that he sway from course. To be apart’s their plight. For love of day, for love of night.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Norton Avatar
September 4, 2023 at 4:36 PM
Hi Andrea I think you forgot how to write a bad poem, if you ever did know. I thoroughly enjoyed this. How is your cat? Later, Bryan
Poet Avatar
September 4, 2023 at 2:54 PM
Back with hearty congratulations on your amply deserved win, Andrea, your poem is just stunningly beautiful
Watt Avatar
May 14, 2020 at 2:07 PM
I do love your Swap Quatrains, and I hope to try this form soon. This one is a beauty with the moon and sun in the roles of unrequited lovers. I feel as though I have read this before, yet there is no comment from me... does this exist on Soup under a different title perhaps? Hugs ~ John
Inman Avatar
April 2, 2020 at 8:28 PM
Another beauty Andrea. really enjoyed this.
Gutmacher Avatar
November 9, 2019 at 7:44 AM
really enjoyed this one
Gauthier Avatar
February 11, 2019 at 10:17 PM
Back with well deserved congrats on your win, Andrea.
Canerdy Avatar
January 26, 2019 at 4:38 PM
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win, Andrea! Superb! Janice
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January 26, 2019 at 2:34 PM
Hey, this is awesome, Andrea. Love the way the sun and moon miss each other. Very clever and a new form to learn as well. Congrats on your win!
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January 26, 2019 at 12:06 PM
Andrea, congrats on your win on mile 12 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon contest! This is a brilliant celestial write and perfect for the Swap Quatrain form! Thank you so much for your support of my contests. By continuing to place in the contests you are accumulating points toward the final. ~Mark
Gauthier Avatar
April 15, 2018 at 5:08 PM
Lovely write, Andrea.
Duncan Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 1:14 AM
I love this :)
Kroll Avatar
August 27, 2016 at 9:34 AM
Such beauty and technical achievement combined. Congrats on your many achievements!
Cheema Avatar
April 6, 2016 at 7:44 AM
Mesmerised Andrea! You sure did deserve all the accolades!
Sky Avatar
January 24, 2016 at 2:48 AM
This is so beautiful Andrea. I feel the Sad Moon's love and passion in your words.
Schneiter Avatar
August 30, 2015 at 12:50 PM
This is a stellar poetic achievement, especially so because you wrote it in a demanding form (Swap Quatrain). Little wonder it took first place in the referenced contest. Congratulations (well deserved). Hugs.
Wellington Avatar
July 10, 2015 at 10:17 AM
Andrea I stopped by this morning reading a few poems and I must say I was mesmerized by your words and great style I read each delightful verse with anticipatory eagerness. A great write my lady!
Callus Avatar
June 13, 2015 at 4:22 PM
Great personification of sun and moon, Andrea! I read this a couple of times...beautiful! I see that through these past years this poem has served you well. Congratulations for a worthy podium finish! // paul
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June 13, 2015 at 1:15 AM
Andrea, Congratulations on your win. You placed well:) Alexis
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June 12, 2015 at 10:31 PM
Love he form Andrea, I remember their was a contest with this form some time ago...Congrats on a great write and win
A  Avatar
June 12, 2015 at 9:45 PM
Andrea, this one was one of my picks for this contest. Enjoy your second place win....SKAT
Flint Avatar
May 12, 2015 at 10:54 PM
Simply an amazing poem Andrea! I marvel at your skill.
Das Avatar
May 12, 2015 at 8:09 PM
Speechless with wonder. What beauty flows from your pen. What a big big achievement to take first place in that competition and get published. When I look for various forms of poetry I often see your poems set as examples on Shadowpoetry. A poet of the highest order. A favorite.
Yvonne Avatar
November 7, 2014 at 7:28 AM
Just brilliant, you take my breath away.
Roberts Avatar
October 18, 2014 at 12:33 PM
Once again. . . .amazing. . . .the more I read of your work the more I feel I shouldn't be here. . .your command of words, thought and emotion is such a gift. . .
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December 20, 2010 at 3:52 PM
Congrats on your win, Andrea. Dan C
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