Spring Shadow

Clouds bursting on clouds from the uncured rain,
Where stemmed wicks snuff out flower smoke,
Fissures that droop so much deeper—
The air full of seed will burn out the storm.

Where stemmed wicks snuff out flower smoke,
A girl ringed in twists of ivy.
The air full of seed will burn out the storm;
She is set like the sun on the many tones of the sky.

A girl ringed in twists of ivy,
Fissures that droop so much deeper—
She is set like the sun on the many tones of the sky,
Clouds bursting on clouds from the uncured rain.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



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Date: 6/7/2024 4:02:00 PM
It's got a mystical feeling and such lovely lines. Thanks for your recent visit to my poetry, dear
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Date: 6/7/2024 4:00:00 PM
Finally. A poem I have not read yet. Let me take a look
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Date: 5/8/2024 12:32:00 PM
You are starting to do this from so well.. nice arrangement of words..
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Date: 4/28/2024 9:29:00 AM
Very pretty words woven! "She is set like the sun on the many tones of the sky" the way you see positivity never stops making people smile! Fondly A.S.
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Date: 4/27/2024 4:18:00 AM
The air full of seed will burn out the storm…love this line, Paige!
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Date: 4/20/2024 4:42:00 AM
Dear paige, ive missed reading you, apologies for reaching your poem so late as iv been away not well, and i must say i am as always impressed by your wordplay and creative nature of your lines and how they flow in such eloquence in the form of pantoum! I especially loved the lines “Where stemmed wicks snuff out flower smoke, Fissures that droop so much deeper— The air full of seed will burn out the storm.” Wow excellent and unique! A fave for originality and artistic talent
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Date: 4/19/2024 11:24:00 AM
This is a new look at rain. You brought it to life in your poem. Thank you for this pantoum
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Date: 4/19/2024 7:53:00 AM
Where stemmed wicks snuff out flower smoke… A girl ringed her old animal in twists of ivy… Fissures that droop so much deeper…Made for such an interesting read! Great imagery to,ponder, Paige!
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Date: 4/18/2024 7:07:00 AM
Dear Paige, your poem is an outstanding meditation on the cyclical nature of life and the beauty found within its shadows. I loved the imagery of clouds bursting with uncured rain, evoking a sense of renewal. At the same time, the juxtaposition of stemmed wicks snuffing out flower smoke speaks to the inevitable passage of time. Your words are filled with many truths within every storm, for there is the potential for rebirth and transformation. - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 4/17/2024 10:02:00 AM
Hi Paige, am finally back in the office and reading your uniquely crafted poem. These lines are filled with your signature ability to create fresh images and poetic pictures. If this is for a contest, best wishes for a win. Blessings!
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