Spring

A spring was made and then consigned In spiral form to serve mankind. There's tension in the shape, It's aching to escape From python hold and then unwind. -------------------------------------------

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Aditi Mishra

Date: 6/23/2020 8:08:00 AM

This is witty and gives a different perspective on a simple thought. Congratulations on your win Paul :)

Paul Callus
Date: 6/23/2020 2:04:00 PM

Thank you, Aditi. There is quite a gap between my simple entry and your top-placed one. You certainly soared :) Regards // paul

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 5/10/2015 9:39:00 PM

Hello Paul... very clever Paul. The title had me thinking of warmer weather so I got a pleasant surprise - Lindsay

Paul Callus
Date: 5/11/2015 8:47:00 AM

Pleased that you enjoyed, Lindsay. In this contest we were asked to tackle the word 'spring' from different aspects/angles. Thank you for dropping by. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 3/10/2015 2:42:00 PM

Dropping back with my congratulations Paul:-) Hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2015 6:52:00 PM

Oh Paul do take it easy - if you have a tape recorder - use that to get your thoughts down! hugs jan xxx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/11/2015 6:51:00 PM

Writing!!! That's a joke!! I have spent two days doing plumbing and electrical work in the house...and with a bad wrist it's not funny! It's now 1am and have to rise early in the morning. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2015 6:48:00 PM

I know the feeling Paul I had so many comments to catch up on today then respond to contest winners - hardly time for writing at the moment! hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/11/2015 6:46:00 PM

Thank you Jan; trying to get through a backlog of unanswered mail!! I have spent the last 6 hours replying and commenting! Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/10/2015 2:21:00 PM

I like this cleverness of your meaning here. Congrats, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/11/2015 6:48:00 PM

Thank you Andrea...at least somebody has noticed that I'm not all that stupid:) // paul

Emile Pinet

Date: 2/21/2015 1:58:00 PM

Your words took stage and treated the reader to a glimpse of your imagination and a feel for your talent. Well sprung. Emile. #7

Paul Callus
Date: 2/21/2015 2:50:00 PM

Thank you Emile! I admire your comments where choice of words is given priority of attention. txs for the high rating. // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/21/2015 8:29:00 AM

:D Those springs can wreck a person's back. Loved the last line - quite a creative image! Wishing you success in Deb's contest. Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 2/21/2015 9:35:00 AM

Thank you Carolyn; so pleased to have you back on Soup! The poems you have posted show invigorated freshness. Welcome back! love // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/20/2015 8:13:00 PM

hey this is pretty clever. I was thinking of doing one on that same definition of spring. But my mind won't SPRING to attention!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/21/2015 8:55:00 AM

Thank you for the lovely comments, Andrea! I had a few ideas, which I have now written in Limerick form, they are witty but too bawdy! Thought of another one while reading your last sentence! // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 2/20/2015 8:46:00 AM

love the way you come up with two things here.. :) olive eloisa. :) hugs never tried a limerick before.. :O

Paul Callus
Date: 2/20/2015 2:41:00 PM

Pleased that you enjoyed, Olive_eloi! Perhaps I can tempt you to write a Limerick now:) hugs // paul

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 2/20/2015 7:10:00 AM

Spring and python.. strange combination but so well crafted my friend. I am certainly amazed at the range of your imagination. Honestly it is one of your best and one of the best in the soup. Sure a winner. God bless.>>>Regards>>>rajat

Paul Callus
Date: 2/20/2015 2:38:00 PM

You are too kind, Rajat! Thank you for the lovely comments and for the trust you show in this poem. God bless you, too! // paul

Hija De La Luna

Date: 2/20/2015 5:29:00 AM

this made me smile, Paul! forgot python is not a fave even as an image :))

Paul Callus
Date: 2/20/2015 2:36:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed, Hija! Thank you for stopping by. :) paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 2/19/2015 11:44:00 PM

This is well, quite Brilliant!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/20/2015 1:10:00 PM

Your comment shines, Arthur! Thank you. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 2/18/2015 6:49:00 PM

Very clever limerick Paul:-) Hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 2/19/2015 10:14:00 AM

I fins it difficult to write limericks that aren't humourous - i have another one I wrote for spring that is - not sure if i will submit it though - still needs a bit more work - got another 4 i part wrote yesterday each needs a final line lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 2/19/2015 10:05:00 AM

Thank you Jan. It's not really on the witty side, but that was done intentionally; wanted to view a limerick from an unusual angle Hugs // paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 2/18/2015 6:16:00 PM

i enjoyed this one, paul! i love the python metaphor...

Paul Callus
Date: 2/19/2015 10:11:00 AM

Glad that you enjoyed it, Ilene...especially the python bit! It's more of a 'clever' than witty limerick. All the best. // paul

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 2/18/2015 5:26:00 PM

You have 8/8/7/7/8 Paul which it not 'wrong' so to speak but making lines 3 & 4 shorter will add more 'tension' and so will using an odd numbered syllable count. Polish a bit more Paul, have fun try another. Be a wee bit naughty it is a limerick dear friend. You DO have the idea of the meter - if you start with a hard sound you must follow with 1 or 2 soft sounds.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/20/2015 2:46:00 PM

Hi Debbie, just realized that I missed answering your comment! Yes, I know it's not witty enough for a Limerick, but when this thought came to mind I just had to write it. Thank you for the inspiration! // paul

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 2/18/2015 2:34:00 PM

Very fine pen, Paul! Very amusing Limerick, it sure made me smile big, my dear friend. A 7 from me! GL in the contest! I wish you a very lovely day! In his light! God bless you!:)xxx D.""

Paul Callus
Date: 2/18/2015 4:07:00 PM

Thank you for a lovely visit and encouraging comments, Dorian. You're always welcome:) hugs // paul

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 2/18/2015 2:29:00 PM

Well penned. All the best in the contest

Paul Callus
Date: 2/18/2015 4:05:00 PM

Pleased that you enjoyed, Njeri; thank you for stopping by. // paul

Janet Eaton

Date: 2/18/2015 2:00:00 PM

Good one Paul, love it. I am just learning a limerick so it is fun for me to read one and get the beat:) Good luck in the contest. Janet

Janet Eaton
Date: 2/18/2015 4:47:00 PM

I will enter the next limerick contest Paul. Debbie helped me get my mind around the limerick (not this poem) but she helped me a lot and I think it is only fair to keep practicing and enter the next one. I would not feel right if I placed

Paul Callus
Date: 2/18/2015 3:21:00 PM

Thank you Janet. I read your Spring Forward Limerick and it did sound good to me; nothing to lose by entering it for the contest. Using single or double syllable words might help. All the best:) // paul