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Spoilsport

Kids want to play.
Rainy day comes.
The grey denies.

Rains cats and dogs.
Even hogs pout,
but frogs rejoice.

Clouds roll away.
Sun will stay out.
Make way for fun.

Hurrah for sun,
in just one hour
all done with games.

                                                  Won no. 10

For Dr. Mehta's contest

Copyright © Joyce Johnson | Year Posted 2011

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Andrea Dietrich Date: 8/13/2011 12:11:00 PM congrats on your win. should have been higher! Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 8/12/2011 5:22:00 PM Congrats on your win..Sara Login to Reply

David Williams Date: 8/12/2011 3:33:00 AM hey Joyce, congrats on your win, David Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 8/11/2011 10:54:00 PM JOyce, this is a great job. I am curious why you didn't name it the correct form? It's not lanterne. It's something like tha-bauk. Anyway, I found it very difficult to do and be witty at the same time. How ambitous of you to do four. I thought that was cute how you said the hogs pout!! Login to Reply

John Freeman Date: 8/11/2011 10:36:00 PM Cool idea Joyce. Agape, Moses Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 8/11/2011 7:48:00 PM Congrats Joyce on your sweet success with new form and great poetry my friend.. super duper one.. Login to Reply

Robert A. Dufresne Date: 8/11/2011 7:17:00 PM congratulations Joyce on your well deserved win. I enjoyed your poem. Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 8/11/2011 7:15:00 PM Congratulations on your well deserved win in Dr. Ram Mehta's "Than-Bauk" contest Joyce. Love,Carol Login to Reply

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 8/11/2011 6:33:00 PM Congratulations on the win in my contest, Joyce Login to Reply

James Fraser Date: 8/11/2011 1:37:00 PM The summer holidays here sure have had the Spoilsport weather. Nice short piece Joyce. Good luck in Dr. Rams contest :) Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 8/11/2011 1:30:00 PM Good luck in the contest with this impressive work..Dr. Ram will surely like this one..Sara Login to Reply

Judy Ball Date: 8/11/2011 1:12:00 PM Nicely done my friend. You linked it well together to form one thought. Loved the imagery here. Rainy days can be a drag but then the kids can go out and play in the puddles. They love that. God Bless, JB Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 8/9/2011 2:13:00 AM cute, and you got alot in. I can't even come up with a single one that I like for this contest, Joyce! Login to Reply

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 8/8/2011 2:07:00 PM I was smiling thinkking about the frogs rejoicing in the rain, Joyce. Back in the day, I used to color or draw for hours on rainy days. Love your use of the form and the upbeat ending! Best wishes in Dr. Ram's contest. Love, Carolyn Login to Reply

Cyndi Macmillan Date: 8/8/2011 1:12:00 AM Joyce, this is great! Loved the playfulness of this one ---especially hogs pouting!!!Also liked the rhyme between lines 9 and 10 (Fun/Sun). Makes me want to try the challenge for a 5 or 6 stanza Than-Bauk with multi rhyme scheme. Hope you place high for this smile maker! Cyndi Login to Reply

Olusegun Arowolo Date: 8/8/2011 12:22:00 AM Nice write up Joyce.I love the expression.more grease to your elbow. Login to Reply

Lee Ramage Date: 8/7/2011 10:31:00 PM Well done, sounds easy to write, it is challenging. Well done. lee Login to Reply

Russell Sivey Date: 8/7/2011 9:30:00 PM Very good!! I really liked the third verse, "Make way for fun", awesome!! Login to Reply

Jack Ross Jr. Date: 8/7/2011 9:11:00 PM Excellent write great form...lovely Lady with love...old Jack Login to Reply

Robert A. Dufresne Date: 8/7/2011 9:02:00 PM This poem of yours than-bauk style is excellent . I really appreciate your comment, Joyce. Once one does a couple of these they are kind of fun really. See you at the top and God bless : ) Login to Reply