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Sparkling Green Eyes

. This nubile soul so ripe Her sparkling green eyes her her I musn't say it were bursting with energy before me oh yes before me do I dare YIKES I dove off of that train with rapid movement for her gallant's dirk glistened out of thin air

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Laura Breidenthal

Date: 4/18/2015 3:57:00 AM

Awesome one!!! I think I would have dove off too! Sometimes we take it too far and we get nothing!! I really like this one's structure. It was quite effective in telling the story.

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 3/29/2015 11:55:00 AM

beautifully painted james loved the style used

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/17/2015 3:10:00 PM

Man she must have been attractive..Enjoyed reading your work.Your presence at my page was uplifting...Sara

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/17/2015 8:46:00 AM

yikes, don't dive off the train!! I am all set today for ST. Patricks' Day and my green eyes and my little green hat!

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 2/28/2015 11:25:00 PM

Very nice pen James ! I enjoyed reading your unique piece, my dear friend. A 7 from me! Have a very lovely day! In his light! God bless! :) D.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/28/2015 12:46:00 PM

mystery abounds in this read... very intriguingly pleasing, james...write on!.. huggs

Constance La France

Date: 2/28/2015 7:29:00 AM

James, I love the pauses within your write, the hesitations leave one hovering, well done and thanks so much for your lovely comment on my poem I write pages and pages . . .