James Peranteau Poet Free verse

Sparkling Green Eyes

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              This nubile soul
                    so ripe

       Her sparkling green eyes
                      her 
                      her
              I musn't say it
                     were

          bursting with energy
                 before me
            oh yes before me

                 do I dare

                   YIKES 

                   I dove
off of that train with rapid movement
                   for her 
               gallant's dirk
                  glistened

               out of thin air

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Laura Breidenthal April 18, 2015 at 3:57 AM Awesome one!!! I think I would have dove off too! Sometimes we take it too far and we get nothing!! I really like this one's structure. It was quite effective in telling the story.

Liam Mcdaid March 29, 2015 at 11:55 AM beautifully painted james loved the style used

Sara Kendrick March 17, 2015 at 3:10 PM Man she must have been attractive..Enjoyed reading your work.Your presence at my page was uplifting...Sara

Andrea Dietrich March 17, 2015 at 8:46 AM yikes, don't dive off the train!! I am all set today for ST. Patricks' Day and my green eyes and my little green hat!

Dorian Petersen Potter February 28, 2015 at 11:25 PM Very nice pen James ! I enjoyed reading your unique piece, my dear friend. A 7 from me! Have a very lovely day! In his light! God bless! :) D.

Nette Onclaud February 28, 2015 at 12:46 PM mystery abounds in this read... very intriguingly pleasing, james...write on!.. huggs

Constance La France February 28, 2015 at 7:29 AM James, I love the pauses within your write, the hesitations leave one hovering, well done and thanks so much for your lovely comment on my poem I write pages and pages . . .