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Sparkles At Night

Directionally dillusional in a straight line scene Not knowing where I'm going or where I've been Heading out east on a westward breeze Living on vitamins and two broken knees Don't look off in the distance when I come out your way There's a desperate desire that won't just go away Enthralled in your beauty and soul's guiding light This gleam in my eye only sparkles at night Engulfed in the moonbeams I'm starting to see What exactly is lying out in front of me Journey's taken full of life's fury flight Twists in plans are turning out right

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Brett Harrison

Date: 1/19/2017 3:34:00 PM

I think maybe it should be alright, instead of right, in the last sentence of the piece. I just feel it would flow better and essentially means the same thing. Other than that, I really dug this. "Delusional" is my little piece of spelling naziism. Ho hum. Good stuff.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/17/2017 8:44:00 AM

Great use of rhyme and most enjoyable to read.

Darren White

Date: 1/17/2017 1:53:00 AM

That's what we do, don't we? Journey on with our broken things, a vision of beauty keeps us going against all odds. I love your poem Tim.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 1/16/2017 5:39:00 PM

I can relate to this one, even if I wish I could be so upbeat! :) Great write!

White Wolf

Date: 1/16/2017 5:12:00 PM

I really enjoyed this, Tim! So many great lines! And the last stanza is so uplifting!

Eve Roper

Date: 1/16/2017 4:33:00 PM

A lovely write again from a master poet... I am amazed that the end of the funnel doesn't end but keeps flowing with wonderful words... Hugs

Eve Roper
Date: 1/16/2017 4:34:00 PM

get well quick :'(

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 1/16/2017 3:22:00 PM

Lovely read dear Tim! Healthy wealthy time to you.

Chris Green

Date: 1/16/2017 1:40:00 PM

This was beautiful Tim. I especially love the line, "Heading out east on a westward breeze". Great job my friend.

Tim Smith
Date: 1/16/2017 1:44:00 PM

Thanks alot Chris.. Always glad to see your visit

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 1/16/2017 1:15:00 PM

The gleam in my eyes only sparkles at night-Extremely Romantic Timothu. You have two broken knees and I have two twisted ankles... We wouldnt make a one whole good skeleton between us. I do pray for you to get better and you will Coach.

Tim Smith
Date: 1/16/2017 1:18:00 PM

Lol...We need a few spare parts... Thanks Charmu