Tim Smith Poet Rhyme

Sparkles At Night

Directionally dillusional in a straight line scene
Not knowing where I'm going or where I've been
Heading out east on a westward breeze
Living on vitamins and two broken knees

Don't look off in the distance when I come out your way
There's a desperate desire that won't just go away
Enthralled in your beauty and soul's guiding light
This gleam in my eye only sparkles at night

Engulfed in the moonbeams I'm starting to see
What exactly is lying out in front of me
Journey's taken full of life's fury flight
Twists in plans are turning out right

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Brett Harrison January 19, 2017 at 3:34 PM I think maybe it should be alright, instead of right, in the last sentence of the piece. I just feel it would flow better and essentially means the same thing. Other than that, I really dug this. "Delusional" is my little piece of spelling naziism. Ho hum. Good stuff.

Richard Lamoureux January 17, 2017 at 8:44 AM Great use of rhyme and most enjoyable to read.

Darren White January 17, 2017 at 1:53 AM That's what we do, don't we? Journey on with our broken things, a vision of beauty keeps us going against all odds. I love your poem Tim.

Arthur Vaso January 16, 2017 at 5:39 PM I can relate to this one, even if I wish I could be so upbeat! :) Great write!

White Wolf January 16, 2017 at 5:12 PM I really enjoyed this, Tim! So many great lines! And the last stanza is so uplifting!

Eve Roper January 16, 2017 at 4:33 PM A lovely write again from a master poet... I am amazed that the end of the funnel doesn't end but keeps flowing with wonderful words... Hugs Eve Roper January 16, 2017 at 4:34 PM get well quick :'(

Abdullah Alhemaidy January 16, 2017 at 3:22 PM Lovely read dear Tim! Healthy wealthy time to you.

Chris Green January 16, 2017 at 1:40 PM This was beautiful Tim. I especially love the line, "Heading out east on a westward breeze". Great job my friend. Tim Smith January 16, 2017 at 1:44 PM Thanks alot Chris.. Always glad to see your visit

Charmaine Chircop January 16, 2017 at 1:15 PM The gleam in my eyes only sparkles at night-Extremely Romantic Timothu. You have two broken knees and I have two twisted ankles... We wouldnt make a one whole good skeleton between us. I do pray for you to get better and you will Coach. Tim Smith January 16, 2017 at 1:18 PM Lol...We need a few spare parts... Thanks Charmu