space between silence

the s p a c e between us, 
   is lined with full stops
        and wistful questions~
tucked within "inverted commas"
             of w e e p i n g stars,
  but I'm lost  in 
       suffocating s i l e n c e...

t h i n k i n g 
                 l o n g i n g 
                             d r e a m i n g...
as Y o u,  my beloved
are enough...the poetic pause 
 breathing between 
        stellar heartbeats
                  of the mourning sky~
punctuating promises 
    mirroring the magnetic 
  equations of l o v e ~
               a cosmic pyramid 
  glazed with pearl-dust 
 as herbs of henna 
                  soothe this soul 
   swollen with g r a t i t u d e
sipping midnight mocktails
                    like a dressed devotee
worshipping the aura of roses 
      within serene scriptures ...
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Radice Avatar
April 5, 2025 at 11:23 AM
A poem about poetry describing true love. That’s my take on your fascinating and very skilfully written work here I E. :) It would be great to hear this recited. Cheers - Gary
Tor Avatar
April 1, 2025 at 12:09 AM
Your lovely cosmic rendition of love is so cleverly written Inky. Loved your unique metaphors using the celestial heavens. Thank you for posting and sharing much enjoyed. God bless you...
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 4:26 AM
Thank u so much for your kind and generous compliment truly grateful always
Singh Avatar
March 31, 2025 at 9:59 PM
Love as a cosmic,and spiritual force filling the spaces between people.Inspirational poem.Very beautiful.
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 4:25 AM
Thank you so very much! Grateful for your kind support
Buhagiar Avatar
March 31, 2025 at 9:35 AM
A brilliant diamond with a tribute to love. As usual your poems are spectacular, filled with imagery, alliteration and metaphors. Blessings.
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 4:25 AM
Thank you so much dear victor! Grateful always
Bordner Avatar
March 30, 2025 at 6:52 PM
"A cosmic pyramid glazed in pearl dust..." that's spectacular, emblematic to me of many lifetimes going into the building of a soul pyramid, or love temple. "Worshiping the aura of roses within serene scriptures..." Sometimes I wish my face were made of fresh rose petals. The scripture of your rose is written in a dialect of love's innocence Poetess...J.A.B.
Beaufort Avatar
March 30, 2025 at 3:50 PM
IE, Seems like a description of mourning and you do it with such intensity and mood changes that take me for an interesting ride. The poem seems to end with thoughts of what's lost and fades with the final ellipsis. The ending technique you use makes the intensity of the feeling seem to run to infinity. Very strong and powerful write. Smiles and hoping you are well!!
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 4:24 AM
Thank you always for your comments! I do read all of your comments and i do appreciate your thoughtful responses altho i dont get to respond to all of your comments. Thank you always
One Avatar
March 30, 2025 at 3:39 AM
A beautiful and tender poem about your beloved... Your use of grammar and poetic techniques is a wonderful analogy to described love and romance.. so many wonderful endearing lines like "as Y o u, my beloved are enough...the poetic pause breathing between stellar heartbeats of the mourning sky." When we are mourning we just need a loved one to hold and comfort us and bring that warmth when we feel cold and lost... Peace and blessings dear.
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 4:19 AM
Yes youv understood my poem very well! And felt the depth of what iv conveyed here. Its always nice when someone understands what i write .. truly an honor to receive your kind feedback! Thank you so much Sending you light
George Avatar
March 29, 2025 at 9:35 PM
Another gem from your pen. Probably such space is needed for creating silence. It is in such silence that we think deeply about life and its true meaning. Otherwise, we will be like a vessel drifting along the waves with no destination in view. Heartaches make us much more resilient and strong. "the poetic pause breathing between stellar heartbeats of the mourning sky~ punctuating promises mirroring the magnetic equations of l o v e ~" Beautiful lines. Love is enough. 'To have loved and lost' is far more fruitful than 'never to have loved at all.' Dear Empress, your poems amaze me. Into my FAVE
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 2:42 AM
Awwn thank you sweet valsa truly always for your kindness
Suri Avatar
March 29, 2025 at 7:44 PM
wowww!! I love this! the way you use word itches my brain in the right way. I also love the spacing!! The format is enticing :3
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 2:41 AM
Awwn thats a sweet comment thank you so much for the compliments
Dietrich Avatar
March 29, 2025 at 11:04 AM
This is wonderful and just the right size. What contest was it for? The formatting goes so well with the theme!
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 2:41 AM
It was for brians! thank u sweet andrea . always appreciate your visits
Godwin Avatar
March 29, 2025 at 10:26 AM
midnight mocktails - how that sits upon my prose, love it. Felt this one, lived this A LOT to eventually land harmoniously soulmate blissed. A heart must, my life's told me, scar before it can fully appreciate and embrace how wonderful functional and fulfilling love is. Be golden ... CayCay
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 2:33 AM
Awn thank you so much dear cay cay im happy for you! Bless be your heart! Always
Fowler Avatar
March 29, 2025 at 7:10 AM
A jewel of a poem Inky. Congratulations! :)
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 2:25 AM
Thats so sweet of you to say! Thank you so very much!!!
Kendrick Avatar
March 29, 2025 at 5:21 AM
Back with congratulations on your winning work in Brian's contest. Way to go. I enjoyed reading it. Sara K
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 2:23 AM
Thank you dear sara always
George Avatar
March 28, 2025 at 11:27 PM
Another gem from your pen. Probably such space is needed creating silence. It is in such silence that we think deeply about life and its true meaning. Otherwise we will be like a vessel drifting along the waves with no destination in view. Heartaches make us more resilient and strong.
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 2:23 AM
Awn thank you so much for your empathetic response as always’ im always grateful for your kind support truly
Liguori Avatar
March 28, 2025 at 7:30 PM
Your elements of space and time dazzle. I always enjoy reading your poems. Well done.
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 2:13 AM
Thank you so much dear robert for your kindness always grateful for your support
Rolland Avatar
March 28, 2025 at 5:37 PM
wonderful images, i have always prefer silences to vain talking, a graceful poem indeed, thanks poet
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 2:09 AM
Thank you always for being so supportive grateful truly
Poet Avatar
March 28, 2025 at 3:08 PM
Such strong emotional bonds and intricacies of love, desire, and the silent gaps that exist between people dearest Ink. It delves into themes of isolation and intimacy, depicting love as a cosmic force that links two souls despite physical and mental obstacles. The picture of stars and the universe implies that love transcends earthly bounds, while the references to quiet and longing elicit yearning and melancholy. Your vivid vocabulary heightens its emotional impact. Words like "wistful," "weeping," "suffocating," and "mourning" elicit sentiments of melancholy and desire, but "grateful," "beloved," and "serene" convey a sense of serenity and gratitude.
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 2:07 AM
Thank you so much for your detailed and kind response, grateful
Gifford Avatar
March 28, 2025 at 12:23 PM
Hello IE, as always I am left in awe after reading your beautiful words. Truly wonderfully written. Wishing you a wonderful weekend my friend.
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 1:43 AM
Thank you so much for your kind comments always im truly grateful for your support
Cunningham Avatar
March 28, 2025 at 11:25 AM
Love the romantic imagery IE, in time you fill the gaps and it's worth persevering. Tom
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 1:38 AM
Thank you always for being so supportive dear Tom. Grateful for your kind support
Kendrick Avatar
March 28, 2025 at 9:45 AM
Sometimes in relationships spaces do because so distant and silences excruciatingly deep and long. I enjoyed the work. Sara K
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 1:33 AM
Thank you dear sara for your soulful response
Onpaper Avatar
March 28, 2025 at 4:44 AM
the space between us, is lined with full stops.. that’s cox my mind is still buffering !!! U know how slow that fellow is !! thinking longing dreaming… ayeee papiii me to you toooo.. cosmic pyramid glazed with pearl-dust as herbs of henna soothe this soul… oh damn look at that flow !!! Absolutely stunning .. this piece is a work of art papi!
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 1:28 AM
Awwn papi thank you so much
Rhymes Avatar
March 28, 2025 at 3:46 AM
Poetic pause . Wonderful
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 1:27 AM
Thank you dahlin
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