Sour Fantasy

Sour Fantasy…

I saw you there passing by.
   Walking graceful, kind of shy.
Body gorgeous angel face,
   Hair was so long, dim the sky.
Breasts like lemons marble legs,
   Rosy lips with tender thigh.
Looked at me with eyes so blue,
   Blue like ocean, my my my.
Words failed me to make a sound,
   I called you with yearning sigh.
I was silent, you disgust,
   You ignored me, I asked why.
You told me that I am mad,
   All I have to do is, try.
I am old or maybe drunk,
   I can at least dream to fly.
Let my fingers touch your skin,
   Kiss your valleys mountain high.
I am in love with my love,
   Even though, she thinks is, lie. 
Love that hurts will never pass,
   Cross my heart and hope to die.
Haloo, go to sleep, is late.
   She is gone, just say goodbye.

8/12/18 Haloo


Note: This poem is a short form in "ghazal" 7 syllables.  The rhyming in Ghazal ends with AA bA cA dA eA etc. It comes in two different forms with and without refrain. (Poetrysoup has a great explanation for this form of poetry).

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Date: 12/3/2018 10:36:00 AM
What a sizzling, sensual ghazal, this is! The imagery is just simply awesome! Well done, Pashang! Love and hugs. Pandita
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/3/2018 10:42:00 AM
Thank you Pandita...
Date: 10/23/2018 3:58:00 PM
Hi Pashang, a beautiful write my friend. You bring out such deep emotions in this sensual write. A wonderful Ghazal from your golden pen. I may try this form one day myself. An excellent write my friend with such strong images. Wonderful. have a wonderful Wednesday. Your friend always....Mike.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 10/25/2018 1:46:00 AM
Thanks Mike for reading my works... You are a true friend.
Date: 10/9/2018 10:35:00 PM
A great ghazal, Pashang:)
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 10/18/2018 1:35:00 AM
Thanks Jo...
Date: 9/27/2018 3:47:00 PM
Nicely done. Thanks for coming to read my Injured Bird :)
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/28/2018 1:09:00 AM
You are welcome... Thank you...
Date: 9/27/2018 6:10:00 AM
Sad that she didn't respond to you. Such is life Haloo. Best to just let her walk on by. Enjoyed your Ghazal, far too complicated for me though, but you excel in this....Maria hugs
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/28/2018 1:08:00 AM
My dear friend, you are too kind...
Date: 9/23/2018 3:33:00 AM
Nice one!!!
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/24/2018 1:59:00 AM
Thanks...
Date: 9/14/2018 5:09:00 PM
A deep sensual write that evokes memories of love and passion, Well written dear Pashang, thanks for sharing,
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/22/2018 8:05:00 PM
Thank you Pixie...
Date: 9/13/2018 1:17:00 AM
Excellent. Well penned. Enjoyed reading it.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/14/2018 11:58:00 AM
Thank you Ravi for reading and commenting without any psychoanalysis... I'm glad that you liked my work. You are a great friend...
Date: 9/9/2018 8:42:00 AM
Beautifully written Pashang, I really like to try different forms so you have definitely inspired me to try this and others, thoroughly enjoyed reading. :))
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/10/2018 2:24:00 AM
Great Idea... PS has a great explanation about Ghazal, I know it because I wrote it. I have a few Ghazals with and without refrain... Thank you for your kind words.
Date: 9/8/2018 2:51:00 PM
Dropped by to read this gem again, would love to see one of your awesome artworks with this poem, I must try this form one day:-)... btw my hair is long but the eyes are green lol hugs Jan xx
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/9/2018 1:32:00 AM
LOL... You are so wonderful...
Date: 9/3/2018 2:04:00 AM
Well done! Could feel the emotions.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/9/2018 1:31:00 AM
Thank you my friend...
Date: 9/2/2018 11:09:00 PM
Incredibly penned, Ghazal. We all win some and lose others; you've depicted the picture here quite well. I like the way it unfolds.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/3/2018 1:13:00 AM
Thank you very much for kind words... blessing...
Date: 8/31/2018 11:54:00 AM
Hello Pashang, An extraordinary write here my friend!! The words, images, and continuous tempo of your Ghazal are all perfectly orchestrated. Maybe I will try to write one of these some time. In the meantime, you are the master for sure of this format (and others too)!! A FAVE!! Cheers and Best, Gary
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/3/2018 1:12:00 AM
Thanks Gary, you are so kind... Please try it and let me know...
Date: 8/27/2018 4:41:00 AM
Delightful. One never knows if one doesn't take a chance. I enjoyed this piece. Thanks for your visit to my Be Silent Poem. I have been away for a time, but hope to be able to post soon.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/28/2018 2:18:00 AM
Thank you, Eileen... Glad that you are fine... say hello to your wonderful Shireen...
Date: 8/21/2018 6:50:00 AM
Excellent write my friend...I'm gaga over ghaza lol...love & light...^WW^
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/25/2018 5:14:00 PM
Thank you WW...LOL
Date: 8/21/2018 5:50:00 AM
Absolutely love your ghaza, my friend.. Brilliantly penned!! So smooth and goes with the flow.. Wonderful job!!! Many Blessings!
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/25/2018 5:13:00 PM
Thank you dear...
Date: 8/20/2018 3:26:00 AM
Wonderfully written poem, a true masterpiece ~
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/20/2018 5:41:00 PM
Thanks, JW...
Date: 8/17/2018 3:08:00 PM
Loved your version..
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/17/2018 4:07:00 PM
Thanks, Silent one, have you read any other version? Love to read that version.
Date: 8/17/2018 12:39:00 PM
Good Gazal. Good Rhyme. Good Form
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Date: 8/17/2018 1:14:00 PM
Thank you my dear...
Date: 8/16/2018 9:34:00 AM
Such an interesting form, well done my friend...
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/17/2018 3:35:00 AM
Thank you, Charlie... You are so kind.
Date: 8/15/2018 3:22:00 PM
Pashang, great flow and I like the form, I do need to try it. Thank you so much for your visits.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/17/2018 3:34:00 AM
Please do... Maybe I should sponsor a ghazal form... Thank you for your kind comment...
Date: 8/15/2018 2:03:00 PM
Just a couple of corrections Pashang. My hair is short and my eyes are brown.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/17/2018 3:33:00 AM
LOL... You know you are my girl... thanks Jean
Date: 8/15/2018 5:41:00 AM
(SMILE) it seems like a nice fantasy, not that sour after all. I enjoyed reading your creative poem today
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/17/2018 3:31:00 AM
LOL... thank you my dear...
Date: 8/14/2018 1:29:00 PM
thanks for the lyric, the honesty, and vulnerability. True to life ... have quiver full of dream arrows. GOD luck; peace
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/14/2018 6:15:00 PM
Thank you for good wishes... always.
Date: 8/13/2018 3:05:00 PM
well done, Pashang. The title for it is perfect!! Back to sleep with you. maybe to have a better dream this time.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/13/2018 8:53:00 PM
LOL... I changed the title many times, this one stuck... Thank you, Andrea, I'll sleep tonight hope for a better dream...
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