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Song of the Wind

On waves I swept from clouds of grey to make once tranquil bliss astir - together, we would join the fray - a tumult tango beckoned her. Fandango spin upon the seas where tempests tease a tropic storm. What once was born a peaceful breeze now grows in yield - now comes the swarm. On every churning white-capped wave, my breath in howling echoes dwell, then dance ashore and misbehave where Nature's fates forebode, foretell...

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Date: 4/11/2024 1:23:00 PM
Dear Craig, Congratulations on your fabulous win in Tania’s contest!Images and word choices like “howling echoes” and “ tumult tango” are evocative and captivating! Quite a few alliteration (especially the last line) turn your gorgeous write an excellent piece of personification poem.
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Date: 4/8/2024 4:37:00 PM
Craig, congratulations on your win in Tania's contest! What a wonderful personification of the wind - an imp dancing the fandango with power and mischief. I love your whimsical wind teasing waves and misbehaving in delightful alliteration! This is so much fun and so reflective of your seaside relationship with a seaside wind! I truly can relate as I grew up, and still reside, near the water! High fives for this pure delight! Easter season blessings to you!
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Date: 4/5/2024 4:13:00 PM
Craig, congratulations on your first place win, like the foreboding anticipation of the wind in this one.
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Date: 3/25/2024 7:41:00 AM
You wind is even in meter, which is impressive, imagine a metered wind, I guess it would be like a refreshing breeze.. Nice choice of words here like Fandango and the light alliteration in the last line..
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Date: 3/25/2024 4:44:00 AM
Dear craigs, this sounds so lyrical like a beautiful song, something about the way you phrase lines emanate a beat as i read, in such captivating cadence: absolutely gorgeous, love the seamless flow of alliterations and picturesque lines so well articulated: “What once was born a peaceful breeze now grows in yield - now comes the swarm.” This hits the deepest for me. Every poem you is so evocative. Best wishes if this is for a contest: pleasure reading your work. Always
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Craig Cornish
Date: 3/25/2024 5:52:00 AM
Inky, thank you, playing with iambic tetrameter - fun with meter!
Date: 3/25/2024 12:55:00 AM
Expertly executed Craig, no luck required for the contest
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Craig Cornish
Date: 3/25/2024 5:50:00 AM
Thanks DD, tossing one out on a boring afternoon - what's fun about writing is we always have something to do?!
Date: 3/24/2024 9:50:00 PM
A beautiful song of the wind Craig, enchanting, every verse… Beryl
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Craig Cornish
Date: 3/25/2024 5:49:00 AM
Thank you Beryl

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