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Son of War

The snow fell on bloody ground turning the white to red, eating the silent flakes till they disappeared into red dust. The hand lay still...hopelessly bound in death. Warm red snow was not meant to melt and cover white life with lust. No breath melted the blanket of white dancing playfully on the mother's son who lay coldly quiet 'neath nature's cover. He had wanted to stay...not feel the splice of war...taking him beyond the red sun atop the earth where the hawks hover.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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Date: 8/4/2009 10:30:00 AM
I hope you did enter this verse in "War what is it good for?" Light & Love...and more pleasant thoughts
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Date: 6/8/2009 6:13:00 PM
profound...and beauty in death...I think you need a ' in fron of neath? 'neath for the missing be? perhaps not ;) Light & Love..try The Sowing
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Date: 6/3/2009 5:49:00 PM
Very beautiful poem you have painted for us to read, i enjoyed it every bit! Congratz on being featured also!
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Date: 6/3/2009 7:35:00 AM
Congrats Patricia on your elegy being featured again. God Bless. Vince
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Date: 6/1/2009 12:35:00 AM
Congratulations on your poem being featured this week. Ernilando
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Date: 5/3/2009 6:41:00 PM
Patricia, my belated congrats in making the semi finals...Raul
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Date: 4/28/2009 6:38:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry making it into the semi finals Patricia. Wishing you the best of luck in the finals. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/12/2008 8:07:00 AM
Brilliant! Fine rhyming and flow, and excellent imagery... Well done! Keith
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Date: 11/12/2008 4:00:00 AM
Terrific write. Very painful. I just can't imagine snow and blood together. What a curse would it be? So many sons and so many mothers and still we are waiting for the last ones!! Peace be with the world. Congratulations for being featured!! Would definitely keep this one in my favs. Love, Chitra
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Date: 11/10/2008 7:50:00 AM
Patricia, this is powerfully sad and makes me think, how many sons, and mothers. Congratulations on your amazing poetry being featured this week. Love, Shar
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Date: 11/10/2008 3:54:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved poem being featured this week.Love, Carol
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Date: 11/9/2008 4:56:00 PM
Powerful poem with a powerful message. The vivid imagery forwards your thoughts in a creative way. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Keep up the good writing! Wishing you ongoing success. Karen
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Date: 11/9/2008 4:41:00 PM
Congratulations Patricia on your elegy "Son of War" being featured. Vince
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