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Bewildering

Do you ever feel as if life is passing you by You're drowning in a sea's whirlpool of flux and there's no one around to hear you cry Sometimes life sucks! It really sucks There are times when I feel like I don't belong Annoyed by friends who can act like schmucks I try to do the right thing, but it turns out wrong Sometimes my life sucks! It really sucks. I wrote a poem and had it formatted to enter It was an edited sonnet; romantic lines in redux But when I hit 'submit' I cursed my Tormentor My computer sucks! It really sucks. I'm often plagued with decisions and questions and find myself standing at a crossroads, a crux and all I get are a lot of ridiculous suggestions Feeling bewildered sucks! Yeah, it sucks. Life should be filled with sunshine and flowers I fell in love, but he didn't love me back. Shucks! My heart was broken. Tears fell in salty showers Love sucks! Today, everything does.

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Date: 8/13/2020 9:08:00 PM
While it may not be an extreme case with the composer herself, life's turns are often blandly uninspiring in the main...and adults' lives, that is - our boundlessly optimistic younger sisters' and brothers' merry Christmas seems to occur every day of their interminably blissful existence herebelow. So this is a pretty fertile niche for any introspective versifier's literary forays; and you've done it tolerable justice, Jenna:-) Congrats!
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/14/2020 12:00:00 PM
Thank you very much for leaving such a detailed review, Hannington. I appreciate your perspective.
Date: 8/13/2020 12:15:00 PM
What an honest poem. I will be honest, Jenna. I only live one day at a time, so when A day is bad, I declare that the totality of life must suck for everyone on the planet. Losses in my life I have not penned about much. But I can complain and my daughter is all over me to knock it off. She cannot bear my bitterness. My heart has been broken so often, it's a wonder However, you got your points across well. You are truthful. Hurrah Forever~ Pangie xx
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/14/2020 11:59:00 AM
Your theory sounds plausible. I think you may have found a guide to happiness, Pangie. I always love reading your comments. I never know what to expect and I'm never disappointed by them.
Date: 8/13/2020 5:20:00 AM
Life can suck my friend but your poetry certainly doesn't! love the rhyme here especially schmucks lol:-) hugs Jan xx
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 8/20/2020 6:28:00 PM
Ha ha ha! Do you lovely ladies know what the word 'shmuck' really means?! It's Yiddish derogatory slang for the male member... Ooh, that tickles! lol. Here's a vocabulary quiz for you: Shmekel is to shmuck as ______ is to Huck. Good luck!! All Smiles, Gershon
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/14/2020 11:58:00 AM
That's quite a compliment, Jan. I am honored by them, so thank you.
Date: 8/13/2020 4:30:00 AM
I enjoyed this wonderfully penned piece of poetry, Jenna, at times I feel this way...it really sucks. :) Best of luck in the contest, perhaps another winner here. Hugs, John
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/14/2020 11:57:00 AM
I'm sure we all feel that way, especially in the last few months, but try to remain positive. I don't know about winning. I've had my share of disappointments lately, but it's trivial in the big picture. Thank you for leaving your generous comments, John.
Date: 8/13/2020 3:52:00 AM
Your poem is wonderful and does not suck! Very good! All the best in the contest!
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/13/2020 4:11:00 AM
lol Thanks, Krish. My life definitely does not suck.
Date: 8/13/2020 3:51:00 AM
Welk here's hoping your day picks up for you Jenna. Just off to the rock pools, being with the grandsons means I can act 10 again and not look out of place lol. Tom
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/13/2020 4:10:00 AM
You're free to always act any age you choose, Tom. The rock pool sounds wonderful. Enjoy and thanks for taking time to comment.