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Something Old Something New

Original Poem Without the comfort of your hand to hold Aimlessly, I wander about in the dark No hint of warning had been foretold I am a dying ember without a spark Forbearance and faith is what I need and a love so true that I might heal My painful wound continues to bleed Emotional heartache, I cannot conceal Updated Version I 've lost the comfort of your hand to hold No warning bell in the church steeple tolled Aimlessly I wander, meandering in the dark smoldering, a dying ember without a spark Forbearance and hope shall be my creed and the faith found in a tiny mustard seed For these things I pray that my heart may heal I am weary of grief I can no longer conceal October 4, 2021 Something Old Something New Contest Sponsored by John Lawless

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Date: 6/23/2022 2:24:00 PM
Jenna, I like the additions you made: meandering, smoldering, and the mustard seed allusion add a little poetic spice to an already wonderful poem ~ John
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Jenna Logan
Date: 6/23/2022 2:28:00 PM
Hey, John. Thanks for reading this older one. I’m grateful that you enjoy my poetry enough to do so. That’s special to me. Hugs.
Date: 10/4/2021 7:28:00 AM
I'm with Victor, both are awesome! well done Jenna
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Jenna Logan
Date: 10/4/2021 7:47:00 AM
and you guys are both awesome with your comments. Thanks so much, Mark. I hope you have more time to spend on site. You have been missed.
Date: 10/4/2021 7:26:00 AM
I loved both versions even though on can detect the similarities.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 10/4/2021 7:46:00 AM
The similarities must remain, just edited to an improved version...in the poet's eyes. Thanks, Victor.

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