Solo

romantic loom spins closure, unexpected bewildering jumble of unwinding threads messy break up in a ping pong bounce of accusations shafted love affair that's also about one's self complex jigsaw gutted, buried in conjecture that shifts balance serenity's search when being out of sync is a ringing emptiness crystal ball wishing for another with the soft feel of velvet for lips with the softness of depth to repair life stalled by combative impulses contentious solution to the puzzle of brokenness a search that pokes through a garden's cold decay composed August 17/21

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/27/2021 4:25:00 AM

Whoa!! Very expressive and creative work about a broken relationship. It takes two to make a relationship and two to keep it together. Sometimes one just won't do at all just wants to move on. Thanks for your considerate comment on my pose work. Congrats on this winner. Sara

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/27/2021 3:42:00 PM

Greetings Sara, Thanks so much for your affirming comments. I hope that you are on the mend. Your Covid poems were very moving, heart breaking yet so valuable in warning. Regards always, Brian

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/21/2021 9:27:00 AM

Brian, congratulations on your win in Craig's contest. These are hard hitting, gut punching lines describing the raw emotions of brokeness and regret. I really like the picture of hope that peeks through "the garden of decay." Really nice ray of hope. Blessings.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 8/21/2021 1:48:00 PM

I understand that sense of a poem not being finished or being just a little off of what we want and wanting to re-work it. Have done that many times. For me it is a continued process of thematic exploration and new personal perspectives. Let me know if you re-work Solo. Would love to read it. And, once again I did enjoy the first edition! All the best. Sam

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/21/2021 11:27:00 AM

Greetings Sam, Thank you for your supportive remarks. I am still uncomfortable with Solo + may re work it. The premise of hope in finding another to heal brokenness from a failed relationship is commonplace wishing + perhaps misplaced. However, I am heartened by your note Sam. Be well. Best wishes, Brian

Beata Agustin

Date: 8/20/2021 9:16:00 PM

Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... making me reflect the essence of solving "the puzzle of brokenness." God bless you.

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/21/2021 6:09:00 AM

Thank you Beata. You are a very thoughtful poet who writes inspiring verses. Best wishes, Brian