Solitary Life Part Ii

Solitary Life story/poem He was able to get up and was able to walk. Now he was thinking to himself - maybe I did the wrong thing. I shouldn't have isolated myself from people. I could have hurt myself really bad and no one would have helped me. He said to himself - I am going to change. I will take off the fence, uncover the windows and change my ways. I will start talking to people again and make some friends. After doing what he said he would - he then went out for a walk. He first saw the dog that always barked ar him. He tried to touch him, but the dog didn't barked at him this time. He saw the neighbor that always said hello to him. He greeted her and she didn't answer him. He also saw other people, he tried to be friendly, but no one talked to him. As he was going back to his house - he saw a lot of people going inside his home. He asked them what was going on, but they too did not answer. They were paramedics and other people that had gathered around. Soon he saw them bring a body out of the house. He went over to see who the dead person was. To his surprise - he saw himself as the dead man. The fall had killed him...
08/01/2013 Written by Lucilla M. Carrillo Comments: The message here is to not isolate yourselves, from people. try to make friends, don't be by yourselves. We all need friends. Friends are like treasures. Sometimes it's better to have friends, than to have a lot of money and live a lonely life...

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Date: 8/6/2013 12:28:00 PM
So true...So true! I do believe you are my friend right? :o) So I will try to make sure you are not lonely. Words from the heart.
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Date: 8/5/2013 2:19:00 PM
"Wishing to be friends is quick work, but friendship is a slow ripening fruit." Aristotle. I like the moral of your story. Nice poem
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Date: 8/4/2013 6:02:00 AM
I so enjoyed your story/poem, yes are right, one should not be along, as your message is so true, good friends are hard to find, but when we find one we should cherish them, great write, blessings to you, sueellen
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Date: 8/4/2013 3:46:00 AM
I'm embracing your awesome poem my very dear friend Lucy. A great moral/lesson in life in your very beautiful story. No man is an island & what is money, compared to happiness as 2 saying go.:))) Thank you so much for sharing. I really enjoyed reading it from part 1 to 2. I'm wishing you all the best. Thank you so much as well for your visit on my poem. Have a nice wkend! love lots & big hugs, Leonora
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Date: 8/2/2013 4:50:00 PM
Great story in poetic form with a surprise ending..Enjoyed reading this one today..Thanks for the visit to my work..Your presence at my work is always encouraging..Sara
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Date: 8/2/2013 4:21:00 PM
I really enjoyed your story, very well told and a valuable lesson. Change parametics to paramedics
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Date: 8/2/2013 11:54:00 AM
- An interesting story Lucilla, and your comments below, I could not agree more - Money does not make people happy!! (unfortunately we need them) - You're very good at small stories - stories that make the reader have to think. - Thank you my friend. - Wishing you a beautiful weekend, Lucilla! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/2/2013 8:27:00 AM
Isolation - a many barbed pitchfork. On the one hand it solves the problems of hurting others and dealing with our guilt from personal insensitivity. On another tine of the fork is the problem of madness, such as is often experienced by prisoners in isolation. There are other barbs as well, too many to discuss here. I'll send you a soup mail. Fine poem; fine writing... Jack
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Date: 8/2/2013 8:20:00 AM
Lucilla. your footnotes are not needed. This was a very powerful story and the lesson was very clear. I really liked this, sweetie. Great story. (i would label it as "narrative" and a really good one!)
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Date: 8/2/2013 5:19:00 AM
This is such a true and inspiring write my friend! I really enjoyed reading your story here and it teaches an awesome point to not be a loner, go out and make friends, to love others as yourself! What a glorious piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 8/2/2013 3:16:00 AM
Your message is very timely, my dear. Great imagination here.....we need to make changes before it is too late. Lovely read! Hugs!
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