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Soar Among Stars

Let me fly Let me soar soar like a bottle rocket soar like shooting star star of the sapphire sky star of the multi-verse multi-verse of endless song multi-verse of ballads formed formed of shatters she's formed of immortality immortality unformed immortality of thought thought of rainbows thought of waterfalls waterfalls of prism light waterfalls of tears tears from children tears from mothers mothers warm mothers home home with yellow clapboard home with a cat cat with whiskers cat with purrs purrs with cuddles purrs for dinner dinner stewed tomato dinner hot hot mouths hot skin skin nee dip skin in the game game to play game to try try me try shusi sushi pink sushi rolled rolled in sesame rolled in the hay hay the field hay Nane Nane Nane sang nane piped piped the harmonic piped to the star stars shine stars explode explode shine *dedicated to Mr. O

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Robert Lindley

Date: 8/3/2014 6:36:00 PM

A trek across life, real , imagined and mythical. You did an amazing job with this new form. Bravo!!

Carrie Richards

Date: 7/30/2014 10:24:00 AM

Just love this.......and in the brief moments of the blitz......one can picture your life in small increments....Isn't it amazing what can be seen in so few the words.......a yellow clapboard house, a cozy kitty, stewed tomatoes, sushi, the night's sky........ I love this !!

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 7/30/2014 10:38:00 AM

don't forget the doo whoop music

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 7/28/2014 11:58:00 PM

Debbie ma, speaking of Yasmin, how is she? Have you heard from her? I hope she is doing well? Shusi? Shoesies? Susi would be "key" in Filipino. OK I am off base with the susi, but I still need a sushi fix. And hmm, I checked, not Beatles,it was "zoom" by Fat Larry's Band--and I was wrong, messed up my lyrics, it was "neon sky" midnight sky came in another line... http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DMo6Ju8SJ8o

Matthew Anish

Date: 7/27/2014 11:32:00 PM

This verse sparkles! Good job! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/27/2014 8:19:00 PM

This is an interesting form, after reading yours I gave it a try.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/27/2014 4:39:00 PM

debs, give me your email again and I will go through that poem when I have some time and let you know the lines that were off beat. Actually, the meter was pretty good. I just always heard that blank verse was iambic pentameter, meaning ten syllables per line and some of yours had 12 or 11 or even less. So the lines were irregular but the meter was fairly good. Give me your email and I will tell you where you missed any beats.

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 7/27/2014 3:54:00 PM

The title roped me in....Then, with that lasso around the neck, there was no where to run! SO, I became engulfed with the unique "Multi-Verse" penned here. (many people still have yet to hear of the multi-verse, no long Uni-verse:) You did it here Debbie. These aren't sores you can pick...but I sure pick these Soaring Stars as a cosmic oracular spectacular with my picking stick! THanks for making my day better w/ this poem. READ IT ALOUD! It truly is a Masterpiece to be added to my faves as a 7.

Ara Belle

Date: 7/27/2014 9:15:00 AM

I just thought this is amazing.. LoveLots, Ara

Gry Christensen

Date: 7/26/2014 3:21:00 PM

Amusing read, interesting form too. And all the things going on.............cat that purrs, purrs for dinner................Yes, what's not to like?

Arlene Smith

Date: 7/26/2014 9:03:00 AM

Wow! Debbie, this is outstanding, dear!.. Clapping for you!.... Hugs.. Arlene

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 7/25/2014 3:33:00 AM

I mean can be with nori or none-- the rolled yummy things (mind blanking out, I want sushi)---ok stopping. What I want to say is, you seemed to really enjoy writing this, and it definitely shows in your write-- and thank you so much from this little monkey-- we are all ok-- save for a bunch of our fruit trees that got broken... thank you so much for your concern, very sweet and thoughtful of you, Debbie ma, sending you hugs.... <3

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 7/25/2014 8:21:00 AM

I love being Debbie Ma!!! You Kash & Yassie call me that! :)

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 7/25/2014 3:30:00 AM

Well what a journey you took us on, soaring with the stars-- I really enjoyed reading this-- and of where it led me-- so many aspects covered, ok, I can't help but have "Zoom" is that the title of that song? I think it is-- you familiar with that? "Zoom, just one look and then my heart went 'Boom'!....flying high in the midnight skyyyyy.... Ok I better quit. Just also want to clarify something-- by any chance, would you mean, "sushi"? the Japanese rolled rice with nori (seaweed) me now cont'

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 7/25/2014 8:20:00 AM

maybe BOOM zoom ... https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KqXrq4TqDHg

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 7/25/2014 8:19:00 AM

yup THANKS you have to watch me all the time now grrr sushi ... I did check but that other spelling must be a word too LOL THANKS little monkey!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/24/2014 8:43:00 PM

oh, debs, this reminds me of one I wrote a long time ago called The Real Food song, and I took the last word of each line and used it as the beginning of the next line. It's such a fun thing to do. So WHO is Mr. O??? Loved how you started this one out! hey, are you noticing how sometimes the ads here are singing or talking? I'm having a TiME of it tonight and they are discussing the planet of the apes movie as I am trying to focus on reading and commenting to you. Urrrggg

Frederic Parker

Date: 7/24/2014 7:26:00 PM

You have me with this one I don't believe I could think of so many things to follow one another like you have..if you didn't take a break when writing this, then you have just blown my mind...

Jan Allison

Date: 7/24/2014 4:48:00 PM

very clever and intriguing write Debbie. think you have invented a new form here LOl. hugs jan x

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/24/2014 3:48:00 PM

Witty Witty YOU! :) Loved how you kept pulling me along this piece...Of course..that last line...THE BEST Hugs. Deb, thanks for what you wrong on my Wayra...You don't know how much your opinion means to me. XO

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/24/2014 3:24:00 PM

Outstanding Debbie. I will be be-bopping around the rest of the day with this on my mind. :) Carol