Snakes

I hear the leaves rustling
From behind the trees
Unsure of what I will find there
I peek carefully to see

A family of snakes slithering 
Oh so scared of me
They’ve made their nest there
Just beneath the leaves

Now my porch is invaded 
They just want to be free
These tiny little critters are living
A little too close to me    



Copyright © 2009 Lena “Lolita” Townsend

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Cesar Cantu

Date: 5/24/2009 7:42:00 PM

Oh it happens, whenever something that you fear or feel uncomfortable about is so close to you and it is not its/their fault jojjo yet nice poem, brave one, a bag inflated with rattle-snails :) bye bye wiiii thanks for the experience:D:D

Anthony Nutter

Date: 4/9/2009 2:57:00 AM

Beautiful write, descriptive and yes I am afraid of snakes

Nathaniel Köhp

Date: 4/7/2009 5:21:00 PM

I really love the playful spirit. It reminds me of those old skipping stones. Maybe you call it "jump rope"...anyway, love the childish narator. Childish but in no way a jeuvinile piece :) Also thank you for your very kind comments! I have a monster of a migraine at the moment and they combined with this poem have really cheered me up. Thanks, Nathaniel :D

Zoe Campbell

Date: 3/26/2009 5:43:00 AM

Thank you! This is a great piece, I especially like the last two lines! Take care, Zoe

Jo Hayton

Date: 3/21/2009 2:07:00 PM

This is lovely Lolita, it takes your love of nature so wonderfully but with a guarded hand... I love this... Thankyou for your comments on my poem.. Take care, Jo x

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/20/2009 1:23:00 PM

Great work, Lolita! I smiled reading this one. If you ever find a way to rid your porch of the snakes, please let me know how you did it. There is something living in the dark area behind my dryer. I'm open to suggestions for extermination. LOL

Brian Strand

Date: 3/20/2009 1:10:00 AM

Thank you for your blog comments today Lolita.Rgds Brian

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 3/19/2009 1:46:00 PM

Spiders and snakes aren't my favorite of God's creatures. If they are within eyesight, they are much to close. Vince

Brian Strand

Date: 3/18/2009 6:41:00 AM

Nice nature poem Lolita.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments on my postings

Robin Maughan

Date: 3/17/2009 7:27:00 PM

Love this!! not so afraid of snakes as much alligators.. pleanty where I live! Great write! Love, Robin

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 3/17/2009 7:01:00 PM

Yikes, they are beautiful...from a distance. This is a nice piece. BG

Sue Mason

Date: 3/17/2009 4:55:00 PM

LOL imagery here, Lena!! Great job ... you've really been creative the last few days!! I haven't done a Quatrain yet either so I better get busy with some new forms ... smile ... like all of us, I've got my favorites but I love the Soup because there is so much to learn here!!

Robin L. Gass

Date: 3/17/2009 4:51:00 PM

I don't mind snakes as long as they don't "invaid" my house! Great imagery in this great write, Lolita! Love, Robin

Sara Lokken

Date: 3/17/2009 3:40:00 PM

This is so cute, lol...made me smile. Hope you get that all sorted out.:) Love, Sara