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I hear the leaves rustling From behind the trees Unsure of what I will find there I peek carefully to see A family of snakes slithering Oh so scared of me They’ve made their nest there Just beneath the leaves Now my porch is invaded They just want to be free These tiny little critters are living A little too close to me Copyright © 2009 Lena “Lolita” Townsend

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Date: 5/24/2009 7:42:00 PM
Oh it happens, whenever something that you fear or feel uncomfortable about is so close to you and it is not its/their fault jojjo yet nice poem, brave one, a bag inflated with rattle-snails :) bye bye wiiii thanks for the experience:D:D
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Date: 4/9/2009 2:57:00 AM
Beautiful write, descriptive and yes I am afraid of snakes
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Date: 4/7/2009 5:21:00 PM
I really love the playful spirit. It reminds me of those old skipping stones. Maybe you call it "jump rope"...anyway, love the childish narator. Childish but in no way a jeuvinile piece :) Also thank you for your very kind comments! I have a monster of a migraine at the moment and they combined with this poem have really cheered me up. Thanks, Nathaniel :D
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Date: 3/26/2009 5:43:00 AM
Thank you! This is a great piece, I especially like the last two lines! Take care, Zoe
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Date: 3/21/2009 2:07:00 PM
This is lovely Lolita, it takes your love of nature so wonderfully but with a guarded hand... I love this... Thankyou for your comments on my poem.. Take care, Jo x
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Date: 3/20/2009 1:23:00 PM
Great work, Lolita! I smiled reading this one. If you ever find a way to rid your porch of the snakes, please let me know how you did it. There is something living in the dark area behind my dryer. I'm open to suggestions for extermination. LOL
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Date: 3/20/2009 1:10:00 AM
Thank you for your blog comments today Lolita.Rgds Brian
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Date: 3/19/2009 1:46:00 PM
Spiders and snakes aren't my favorite of God's creatures. If they are within eyesight, they are much to close. Vince
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Date: 3/18/2009 6:41:00 AM
Nice nature poem Lolita.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments on my postings
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Date: 3/17/2009 7:27:00 PM
Love this!! not so afraid of snakes as much alligators.. pleanty where I live! Great write! Love, Robin
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Date: 3/17/2009 7:01:00 PM
Yikes, they are beautiful...from a distance. This is a nice piece. BG
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Date: 3/17/2009 4:55:00 PM
LOL imagery here, Lena!! Great job ... you've really been creative the last few days!! I haven't done a Quatrain yet either so I better get busy with some new forms ... smile ... like all of us, I've got my favorites but I love the Soup because there is so much to learn here!!
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Date: 3/17/2009 4:51:00 PM
I don't mind snakes as long as they don't "invaid" my house! Great imagery in this great write, Lolita! Love, Robin
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Date: 3/17/2009 3:40:00 PM
This is so cute, lol...made me smile. Hope you get that all sorted out.:) Love, Sara
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Date: 3/17/2009 3:26:00 PM
really nice, Jim
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Date: 3/17/2009 2:16:00 PM
Haha! I love it Lena! I really like the ending nice work! Thanks for all the welcome comments! ~Jen~
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Date: 3/17/2009 1:59:00 PM
Ew. So sorry I am NOT a snake person at all. Hope they move away, quickly. Love, Shar
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