Smoke

Smoke

where is the you
who first wrapped love
in sweet consent
resting on passion fire so fine
etched in scarlet molten lines
our like-ness?

there is a face I wear 
behind my eyes
it is of you
memories portrait
scriven upon my heart
in words so false
who was the author?

was it my fire, your fire
that roared down to smoke
to distract the eye
shroud the mind
overlay on fading image
romantic novel rhetoric

I can”t find you any more
in the clearer vision of here and now 
this time, this age
with all of the fiction dropped away
I can’t find you…… I
can’t find 
you……

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 11/22/2017 4:46:00 PM
Maybe can't be found cause the smoke and fire has dissipated??? I really, really love this verse. Great write! WRITE ON! ---James
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 11/22/2017 5:58:00 PM
Thank you James I am happy that you found my verse.
Date: 11/22/2017 9:42:00 AM
Beautiful! Like how do you do that? I love the way you use your words uniquely. Quite enviable.
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 11/22/2017 11:50:00 AM
I set aside all inhibitions, forget the rules and write what my heart tells me. Thank you Sherifat Aduku.
Date: 11/22/2017 9:24:00 AM
A haunting piece Patricia, potent penning xomo
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Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart
Date: 11/22/2017 12:49:00 PM
That's a lump in the throat.
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 11/22/2017 11:48:00 AM
When you discover the person you shared your life with was going along for the ride it is a real kicker. I wrote in anger and despair words that he would not understand. Thanks Maureen.
Date: 11/22/2017 5:47:00 AM
How sad is this, but how many go through these.. deep and emotional poem... You really know how to express so many different emotions...
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 11/22/2017 8:42:00 AM
Thank you Silent one.
Date: 11/22/2017 12:03:00 AM
A very powerful expressive poem of emotion, loved this write.
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 11/22/2017 8:43:00 AM
I appreciate your thoughts Athur.
Date: 11/21/2017 8:40:00 PM
Wonderful, Patricia. Dreamy and haunting. I love it.
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 11/21/2017 9:26:00 PM
Thank you Line.
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