Smoke

s m o k e s e s i r l * a * z * i * l * y from the dying embers of a b-u-r-n-t-out romance outdated emotions wrapped in l e th- ar -gy Will a b~r~ee~z~e come to fan it back to life? -------------------------------- Paul Callus ~ 24th Oct 2015 Contest: Creative Layouts Sponsor: Broken Wings Placed 1st

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Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 11/23/2015 4:00:00 AM

I love this Paul, the shape is magnificient;moving like smoke from a lit cigar itself, you did a yeoman Job here and I wish to salute you for this... wishing a lovely week with hugs.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/24/2015 10:45:00 AM

I hope you too are enjoying this week, Kayode. I'm 'honoured' by your salute and delightful comments. Thank you my friend. All the best, paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/9/2015 10:21:00 PM

Very creative and I am gonna place a bet on YES romance can be brought back to life!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/11/2015 3:16:00 PM

Hi Arthur! Thank you for stopping by. Wonder if you're still in France! I like your optimistic view on romance:) (Have not been around mush these past days cos my computer went kaput; sporadically using borrowed tablet.) All the best // paul

Caycay Jennings

Date: 11/5/2015 5:55:00 PM

I can't believe I missed this! It is extremely clever and delightful! ... CayCay

Paul Callus
Date: 11/6/2015 12:46:00 PM

Many thanks CayCay! This happens to be my first shape poem; the subject matter helped a lot in 'building' the shape. So glad that you like it. ~ Regards // paul

Bill Lindsay

Date: 10/28/2015 10:57:00 AM

A thoughtful piece, Paul - well done!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/28/2015 12:28:00 PM

Thank you Bill. I really liked your boat shape. ~ Regards // paul

Skat A

Date: 10/27/2015 9:38:00 PM

Paul,, Wonderful win. SKAT

Paul Callus
Date: 10/28/2015 9:22:00 AM

Thank you, Skat; so lovely of you to stop by:) Regards // paul

Balveen Cheema

Date: 10/26/2015 9:12:00 AM

Congrats Paul on this creative art work! I needed a house, a doorway, flowers, pathway, a gate and logs burning within for the smoke without. You just needed a match-stick to burn outdated emotions into embers!! Regards, Balveen

Paul Callus
Date: 10/26/2015 4:24:00 PM

Love your lovely feedback, Balveen!:) So glad you like my shapely poem! There was a lot of work and thought involved in yours; I really liked it. Thank you for visiting. ~ Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/26/2015 8:31:00 AM

I missed this impressive piece Paul. I love the content of your poem and the unique way it is layed out. I am proud to be in your company my friend. Congratulations on your first placement! Hugs, Connie

Paul Callus
Date: 10/26/2015 4:32:00 PM

Many missed this poem, Connie; I only managed to enter it at the last moment! I surprised myself how it evolved, for when I started it I had little idea of what I was going to do...it worked itself out! Thank you for the lovely comments and congrats. Was so pleased to see you standing by my side on the podium:) Hugs // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 10/26/2015 2:17:00 AM

hey Paulette (hahahaha) with a wink!!! :P, well, we share same spot this time.. :D happy!!! artfully done and I really like the way you did the smoke...!!! the rises is a nice way you did it!! :D! and the few words you use but offers a deal of impact!!! Kudos!! (i think I forgot to send my reply to you on mail so was late, huhuhu) hugs!~Olive Eloisa =`)

Paul Callus
Date: 10/26/2015 4:38:00 PM

Yes, Olive_eloi, this time I share top spot with you and a few other good friends of mine...made my day to be in such good company:) Mail: You are forgiven...anyway, I don't have a whip!!!:) I'll throw some rose petal in the air and let the wind bring them over to you:) Hugs // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/26/2015 2:19:00 AM

notable phrase here: wrapped in lethargy... :D nice!! I like your chocolates much that it destroyed my diet.. :D :P hehehe

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 10/26/2015 1:05:00 AM

Congrats on superb win Paul with this wonderful creative layout and poetry! That breeze is on its way...get...set...go...

Paul Callus
Date: 10/26/2015 5:09:00 PM

Thank you, Upma. Your last comment made me smile:) ~ Regards // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 10/25/2015 8:49:00 PM

Great write, Paul, congratulations on your win!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/26/2015 5:11:00 PM

Thank you Eve! Enjoy this coming week:) ~Regards // paul

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/25/2015 7:19:00 PM

Amazing creative layout and poem, Paul. Nicely thought out and presented! Congrats on your fine win. Sandra

Paul Callus
Date: 10/26/2015 5:27:00 PM

There were many lovely and creative shape poems, Sandra, including yours:) Thank you for the encouraging feedback. ~ Regards // paul

John Lawless

Date: 10/25/2015 6:27:00 PM

Nicely done Paul, sweet take on the theme and the form

Paul Callus
Date: 10/26/2015 5:29:00 PM

Many thanks, John, for liking both poem and shape. ~ All the best. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/25/2015 5:47:00 PM

this is super creative. One of the best in the contest. Congrats, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/25/2015 6:12:00 PM

Glad you liked, Andrea. Thank you the complimentary remarks. ~ Regards // paul

James Inman

Date: 10/25/2015 5:05:00 PM

What a question. Love the backward "sesir," great poem.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/25/2015 5:11:00 PM

Thank you for visiting, and for the nice comments, James. ~ All the best. // paul

Dan Cwiak

Date: 10/25/2015 3:19:00 PM

Paul, I half expected to see a blaze at the bottom of this one, but your words match up so well with the layout I can see why there wasn't. Congrats on your win.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/25/2015 3:48:00 PM

Thank you for the positive feedback, Dan. Glad to have made your acquaintance. ~ All the best. // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/25/2015 1:28:00 PM

Paul, congratulations on your 1 st place win:-) Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 10/25/2015 1:47:00 PM

Thank you, Alexis. Your visit and congrats are appreciated. ~ All the best. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 10/25/2015 12:08:00 PM

very creative Paul many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 10/25/2015 1:18:00 PM

Thank you, Jan. Very pleased that we're sharing top place:) Hugs // paul

Elis Artis

Date: 10/25/2015 9:37:00 AM

So creative and inspiring! I enjoyed reading it

Paul Callus
Date: 10/25/2015 11:03:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by, Elis; glad you find positives in my poem. ~ Regards // paul

Hija De La Luna

Date: 10/25/2015 6:16:00 AM

Wow!! This inspires me a lot Paul! The creative layout matches perfectly with the words! And I could feel it! I hope the breeze comes and fan it ?? love your words as always, Paul! Best wishes!!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/25/2015 7:37:00 AM

So glad that you enjoyed the poem and layout, Hija! Incidentally this happens to be my first shape poem. Thank you for a lovely and encouraging visit. ~ All the best. // paul

Ashley Conte

Date: 10/25/2015 2:30:00 AM

not only in good shape but descriptive as well, paul.. well done!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/25/2015 5:00:00 AM

Thank you, Ashley...love your comments:) Hope that this 'urn' containing dying embers makes the shape grade! ~ Regards // paul