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Slug of Greed

I want to take over the world, cause misery and dying I want to create a master race, kill all low living swine I want a god who answers to me, be exclusively mine Mostly I want what I never had, that would be a spine By David Kavanagh

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Christopher Flaherty

Date: 7/5/2022 2:51:00 PM

I very much like this 1 Sir More now so just reading it again It's very complex so much so it pose's a conundrum I also want to grow a spine or backbone to In essence be the kind of person or human being I wish I was was but would never want to be Great 1 Sir love it Made me think

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/5/2022 3:21:00 PM

Great stuff Christopher, you have a spine like me, but we’re always trying to figure out better ways to use it, rather than leaving slime behind us, I’m delighted this one got you thinking, cheers David

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 7/5/2022 4:42:00 AM

Great metaphor, David They can’t hide their trail of slime. Best, SuZ

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/5/2022 5:00:00 AM

Heya SuZ, however hard they try, the trail of slime will keep oozing in their wake, thank you for stopping by, cheers David

Gary Radice

Date: 7/2/2022 10:12:00 PM

With greed comes fraud, trickery and when it becomes all consuming, manipulation of language and situation - the blaming of others. Sociopaths, narcissists, the delusional: Who or what system allows for these people to rise to the top and have power when it's actually help they need (with support needed for people around them) I guess to find out you have to follow their slimy trails. My take only. Cheers - Gary

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/3/2022 1:04:00 AM

Your take is most welcome and true Gary, I’d even add some are born into privilege and regardless of mental health, are allowed to accede by birthright into positions of power, and yes there always seems to be a slimy trail, good to hear from you, cheers David

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/28/2022 9:25:00 AM

David your Monokou is indeed a puzzle, when dream time arrives, fantasies of the mind ludicrously come through as they our sub subconscious and we can be the hero in them, Thought provoking and this would be my understanding of it, I think you are a brave poet who writes what he feels and says what he says as he wants to say it, and personally i think God likes your thinking, you don't like egotists, you don't like the bad guys, kudos for writing this poem. hugs and blessings Jenn.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/28/2022 10:51:00 AM

You call it well Jennifer I do like antiheroes, always have for the very reason they say and do things in their own unconventional way, to perhaps win the day, I’m agnostic, which can probably be construed as God fearing, sometimes I feel obligated to write these unflinching verses, if I offend the spineless greedy egotists, job done, cheers David

Jeff Connelly

Date: 6/27/2022 8:45:00 AM

Jajaja David. Ah to get paid to write poetry WOW. I forgot to comment on the way this poem is shaped... almost... like a slug... slim trail...

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/27/2022 10:54:00 AM

Yep it’s a slimy one Jeff, wonder if I subliminally designed it this way, must go with the flow.

Jeff Connelly

Date: 6/27/2022 5:27:00 AM

It doesn't take a spineless bastard to write such a wonderful poem David jajaja. If you would win money for ALL these contests you truly would be entering them with a greedy mind. Thanks for this one David...

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/27/2022 5:40:00 AM

Ha indeed it doesn’t Jeff, but I’ve worked for several spineless greedy bastards, who let their sycophants do their dirty work for them, whilst all the time they pretended to be holier than thou, suffice to say I took my services elsewhere and a bit more, hey you mean I could win money, how much? Where? Lol cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 6/26/2022 12:07:00 PM

David, greed is an inwardly focused, obsessive, and self-centered want for riches or power that may easily become an unquenchable insatiable monster. All the narcissists, sociopaths, and egotists in this poem are well portrayed by you. Enjoyed reading this wonderful writing.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/26/2022 12:25:00 PM

Thank you Lasaad, I believe greed is the common denominator in all the conditions you’ve mentioned, I would also add cowardliness, miserlinesses, and paranoia to the list, when these delusional people attain power, they usually wreak havoc on everyone around them, cheers David

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 6/26/2022 12:26:00 AM

Hou have portrayed the selfish greedy individuals ahd megalomaniacs in a swell apt way. Kudos for this fine poem!!

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/26/2022 1:03:00 AM

Thank you Zaynab, greed is indeed its own all consuming monster and can develop into a dangerous godlike complex, as seen in so many individuals throughout history and today, cheers David

Jenna Logan

Date: 6/25/2022 2:48:00 PM

What an unusual concept on greed. Personification of the trait works well. Good luck in the contest, David.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/25/2022 3:04:00 PM

Heya Jenna, I tried a few other approaches but kept coming back to the personification almost by default, So in the end just went for it, I know it’s extreme but so is greed, thank you so much for stopping by today, cheers David